A'ye, so here's the next chapter. Sorry if I don't update anytime this week, I don't feel too good, I've got a butt load (. . ew?) of school work to do, and tutouring. So, yeah! Hope you enjoy! :D
REMINDER: This is my opinion, don't blow off on me just because you don't agree with me.
Disclaimer: I'm not going to take credit for something I can't possibly in my own mind create. :b
RACHEL IS A SLUT
Rachel is the slut of all sluts. I freaking hate her, and the fact that she tried to steal Percy away from Annabeth, let's make her a slut -manical laugh-.
Don't you love reading stories like that where they basically incorporate their hatred towards Rachel through their story? I find it completely unnecessary for her character to be portrayed as a slut. Rachel is anything but a slut, she's probably the most insensitive human the Percy Jackson series has ever met! If she feels the need to say something, she'll say it. She's sarcastic, fun, full of life, artistic. Out of all of that, how can you possibly see her as a slut?
She hit the titan lord with a blue plastic hair brush, she deserves more rep for that.
DIALOGUE
Person who requested this, you did not reply to me. . . so I tried to follow what you thought. So. . . yeah.
Dialougue is very important to all stories, not just here in the Percy Jackson archive. It's really annoying when people don't know how to use it properly, or the conversations they convert just lack . . . humaness (how exactly do you spell it?).
Example:(grammatical things are purposely done wrong)
'Hi," I said.
'Hey," John said.
"'I'm bored", I said.
"Oh, me too," John said.
"What do you want to do," I asked. (where's the question mark?)
"I don't know", John said.
The story may have an amazing plot, but if the dialogue is always going to be like this, I will not read it. The conversations are just plain out boring, they use the same exact words. Eventhough some people actually have conversations like this in real life, in stories people do not want to read something like that. They want to read some interesting, and out of the norm.
CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT
Character development is basically character arc. When the character yet develops a new viewpoint or new characteristic because of that viewpoint( not so well at giving definitions, I'm not a dictionary), I guess you could say, overtime.
My example is our dear friend Percy. Through out the books Rick has written Percy doesn't really realize the reason for Luke's bitterness until the fifth book, he sees he had a rough childhood, and all the struggles he went through. In the Mark of Athena, that's when actually get to see his character develop. Percy finally realizes Luke's bitterness, Luke felt used, and betrayed by the gods (exactly how he feels now, since the gods are sort of being stubborn about helping out in this war, avoiding contact with demigods). Percy, and Annabeth can now understand that, they've been through a whole lot of crap that has to do with the gods, and now with this new prophecy comming up, all they wanted was a break from all this.
It's annoying when I read stories that lack this development. You can't stay the same person forever. . .
Like if a story mentions how Annabeth still has hatred towards Rachel, it makes no sense at all. They're over that situation if you haven't noticed,they're like bffs. Or Percy still being sad/regretful about all of his friends death, in the Sword of Hades, he practically accepted the fact they were dead, he didn't like it, he accepted it.
That's it. Remember requests can be submitted, and I hope you enjoyed. Review . . . ^o^
-XxThisMyFriendIsAPenxX