Review maybe? Pweez? ~curly
I get up, the pain is gone "Where did you find me?" I ask
"Well I found you on my way back from school lying on the ground with both of your legs twisted, but you were still breathing, so I carried you back here, and your legs, they just started fixing themselves." She explains, "So how did you fall? Were you pushed? Did you jump?"
I lie "Someone pushed me"
Her eyes widen with fear, "So you were an Erudite?" She asks
"What's an Erudite?" I ask
"What do you mean what's an Erudite, they are the faction that values intelligence!" She exclaims like she is stating some sort of obvious. "Tris if there is anything you're not telling me, you can trust me"
"Ok, I'll tell you this, I was born in whatever you call that place, Erudite, and they put stuff inside of me, and poked me with needles, and did tests on me." I say
Her eyes widen even bigger to the point where they look like they are going to explode, "How did you get out?" She asks
"Well they were taking me to the incinerator, because nothing was working on me, and I started running, when they were about to catch me I jumped out of a window and now I'm here." I explain and her eye grow even wider "Crystal calm down your eyes are about to explode" I laugh, for the first time in my life, I laugh.
She blinks" Sorry this is just so much to take in, so they must of put some sort of healing accelerator in you, I bet they were trying to make the perfect soldier." She says calming down.
"I guess, so what's the deal with this faction stuff?" I ask unimpressed
"Well there are five factions, each faction values a certain trait, the Erudite value knowledge, the Candor value honesty, Amity values peace, Dauntless values bravery and, here in abnegation we value selflessness." She says
"So… how do you know what faction you will be in?" I ask
"It's this thing called the aptitude test, you take it then it will decide what faction you will be in" She says
"So, could I take this test?" I'm excited, maybe I could have a normal life.
"Hmm, maybe you could put on some abnegation clothing, and sneak into the aptitude test" She suggests
"How will you get my name in the system?" I ask
"I have a friend named Caleb who stole a computer from the Erudite, he can hack into anything" She says as if she had memorized it, which she probably did.
"So this Caleb guy, can I meet him?" I ask very interested
"Yeah sure ill bring him over" She says and exits "Be right back!"
This gives me some time to think, what will the aptitude test be like? Is the whole world like this? It seems like an ineffective system, like what if one person values creativity? Or hard work? It doesn't seem right to me, and what if someone values more than one moral? What happens then? My thought is cut off as Crystal and, who I presume to be Caleb as come in, "Tris, this is Caleb, Caleb this is Tris" Crystal says "Hello Tris, Caleb reaches out his hand.
"Uh what are you doing?" I ask utterly confused
"Tris shake his hand, its formal" Crystal says to me
"Erm alright..." I say and grab his hand and shake it "That was weird"
"Uh, its alright, so what do you need me to do?" He asks awkwardly, pulling out a large metal thing out of the back of some sort of bag on his back. He clicks a button and it lights up, I guess this is the computer thing Crystal was talking about.
"Caleb I need you to the name Tris Prior into the list of teens on the aptitude test" Crystal says.
"Where did Prior come from?" I whisper to Crystal
"I don't know I just thought of it" She replies
"I like it" I say impressed
There is a brief moment of silence before Caleb says "Alright its done, Tris Prior is now officially and Abnegation member 16 years old."
"Thanks a lot Caleb" I say gratefully.
-Skip to the test-
I enter a room with a woman in it, "My name is Tori, I will be administering your test, now drink this and we can start" She says and hands me a glass with a blue liquid in it.
"What is this?" I ask
"Do you want to be in a faction?" She asks
"Yes" I gulp
"Then drink the damn stuff" She says annoyed
"Alright, alright calm down, I'll do it" I say and drink it, it tastes bitter.
"The serums should take effect in about 60 seconds, good luck" She says
It only takes a few second until my vision starts blurring and my whole vision goes black.
I'm burnt,hope ya enjoyed! ~curly