Hello Reviewers! I got quit a bad review from a supposed "New Guy" stating my writing is dull and that I should change my writing style or stop writing altogether. But who cares? He only reviewed for the Prologue. Which is dumb because prologues don't really have action or excitement. I'm not a pro-writer so I'm trying my best with suspense and excitement and balancing it all out. So if you got nothing nice to say THEN SHUT IT! Onto the story :D
Snowpaw's POV
Snowpaw sat in the training hollow and perked her ears to the sound of scuffling paws behind her. "If you're not careful you could scare away the prey with that kind of footing Greypaw" Snowpaw teased as she turned to face her sister.
Greypaw huffed out a purr and flopped down. "You're fast, Sunstar couldn't even keep up." Greypaw meowed, catching her breath. Before Snowpaw could reply the golden tom stepped into the clearing watching them carefully.
"That's because I wasn't trying little one." The two sisters began to bristle at his term of endearment towards them.
"Don't call me little!" Greypaw screeched, leaping at Sunstar. Their leader stepped aside, easily dodging her attack. Greypaw crashed into a tree and let out a yelp of pain.
Snowpaw instantly was by her sister's side and glared at Sunstar. "Why did you do that? She could've been seriously injured" Snowpaw snarled.
Her leader turned to face and, a smug look on his face. "What are you going to do about it?" he asked, flicking his tail several times.
Snowpaw's fur began to bristle and she lunged for Sunstar. He jumped over her and landed behind her, swiping at her hindquarters to knock her off balance.
Snowpaw focused her weight on her front paws and lashed out both of her back legs, striking Sunstar in the face. She landed on her belly and cursed loudly as Sunstar was over her in an instant, a storm of anger raging in his eyes.
Snowpaw watched as her sister leaped onto Sunstar's back, unsheathing her claws to grip tightly onto the leader. Snowpaw stood up and began striking blows to the leader's shoulders. When he raised his paw to strike back Snowpaw head-butted him, knocking him off balance as he fell to his side.
Snowpaw pressed her paw to his throat, a dark voice echoing in her mind. "True warriors kill to win their battles" Snowpaw unsheathed her claws, pricking the leader's throat.
"Snowpaw wait! It isn't his time yet" Greypaw hissed into her ear. Snowpaw snapped out of her trance and looked at Sunstar's bright blue eyes. They were tinted with fear and defiance.
Snowpaw jumped off of him and pressed her ears to her skull. "I'm sorry" she muttered before dashing off towards the newly claimed piece of land.
Greypaw's POV
Greypaw watched her sister dash off and looked over to her new mentor. They had been a mouse tail away from taking one of his lives.
The golden tom stood up shakily and shook out his fur, a tiny blood droplet hitting Greypaw's nose.
"I'm really sorry Sunstar; I don't know what came over me." Greypaw reluctantly apologized.
"It's fine Greypaw I knew very well what would happen." Sunstar explained, washing her fur gingerly. "He was right though. The two sisters claws would be stained in blood" he muttered to himself.
Greypaw stood in horror as Sunstar muttered insanely to himself, something about claws being stained in blood and someone being right.
"W-Who was right Sunstar?" Greypaw asked carefully. Sunstar looked at her, remember that she was there.
"Nothing Greypaw, go fetch your sister and bring back at least two pieces of prey" he ordered, leaving Greypaw by herself.
Greypaw looked herself over and shook the dust off of her. "Let's see, Snowpaw seems to have headed towards…" she drifted off, trying to catch her sister's scent.
"A-ha! There it is, towards Sunningrocks" Greypaw purred, padding quickly, following her sister's scent. She perked up her ears as she heard a yowl of help.
Greypaw raced to Sunningrocks, climbing to the top to see what was going on. Her sister was pinned by a larger tom, while two other RiverClan cats lashed at her belly and flank.
"Snowpaw! I'm coming!" Greypaw snarled viciously as she leapt across the river, crashing into the tom that held her sister down.
Snowpaw cried out in pain as the tom's claws were wrenched out of her flesh. Greypaw growled threateningly as she stood over her sister protectively.
"Don't you dare lay another filthy claw on her!" Greypaw snarled. The toms chuckled as they stared at her.
"Is ThunderClan so desperate they send kits to fight their battles?" The smaller tom asked mockingly. Suddenly Greypaw was swept off her paws and tossed away, her head connecting with a boulder as her vision faded to black.
Snowpaw's POV
Snowpaw stood up quickly and ran over to her sister. "Greypaw?" she asked quietly. Before she could check if her sister was still breathing a paw was hooked under her and tossed her into the air.
Red flooded over her vision as she dived down, her claws becoming unsheathed as she landed. She attacked the tom nearest to her, connecting her claws to his throat and tore it open. She felt the warm blood flood over her paws and spun around and leaped at the second tom.
The tom squealed with terror and tried to knock her off, but failed as she pinned him down. "How are you stronger than me? You're nothing but a kit!" the tom cried out.
Snowpaw giggled and latched her teeth into his throat, gracefully performing the killing bite. Snowpaw staggered off the dead tom and looked for the third, her vision growing blurry.
Snowpaw was knocked to the ground as the third tom loomed over her, horror filling his eyes. "What are you?" he asked quietly. Snowpaw spotted Greypaw sneaking up on him and purred to him.
"We're your worst nightmare" The tom shrieked in pain as Greypaw leaped on him and bit into the back of his neck. His grip loosened and Snowpaw flipped him over.
Before she could tear his throat open Greypaw pushed her off, keeping the tom down herself. "I can't let you live after hurting my sister now can I?" she asked the tom.
Snowpaw watched his black fur stand on end as her sister whispered to him. "T-The warrior code states that a warrior never kills to win his or her battles" the black tom recited.
Greypaw sneered at him raked her claws down his face. "Unless it's in self-defense. Which means me and Snowpaw are in the right" Greypaw finished as she performed the killing bite.
The blood splattered the ground as Greypaw leaped off her. Blood staining her light grey paws as she padded over to Snowpaw. "Snowpaw are you alright?" he sister asked, looking at her.
Snowpaw couldn't retain the question as she sat down dizzily. "W-Wha-?" she asked as she hit the ground, unable to keep her eyes open. Maybe StarClan could accept her if she was in fact dying.
Snowpaw let out a groan of pain as her sister frantically called her name. Snowpaw sighed as she slipped into a quiet , and blissful darkness.