So, because I have nothing better to do, I am going to go through this story, and go Cinema Sins on it. Welcome to FF Sins. Sin comments will be in brackets. Enjoy.

One day while camping in the woods, kids are abducted and sent to a top secret research facility. After a few strange things happen, they wish there lives would be normal, but will they ever be normal again? [The camping is mentioned for like a second before everything goes downhill. +1]

Welcome back to my first ever story!

"Talking"

'Thinking'

[Telepathy]

"Wow, this is great!" Said one of my friends, Eteinne. [I recently learned this is the wrong spelling. +1 for each one of these misspellings.] (If you can't pronounce it, its said a-t-n) [I thought this needed to be clarified +1]

"Agreed." My other friend, Kellan, said. "This is one of the better views I've seen in a while."

"Guys, we need to be heading back. Its getting dark, and there are wolves in these woods" [Obvious plot advancement is obvious plot advancement. +1] I said.

"Aw!" Said Eteinne, who quickly perked up at the mention of marshmallows. [Marshmallows becomes the only reason he is funny. I was going make him say "I am Etienne. You stole my marshmallows. Prepare to die." with him picking up and smashing some bad guy into the ground with telepathic powers. +1]

Me and 2 of my best buddies [The power of five year olds is strong with me +3] were on a Boy Scout [BSA. +1] trip to Camp Whiting [This is an actual camp when spelled correctly. +1 for spelling], in CT [Shortening. +1]. While it was lesser known, it was great for small-medium troops [Outside of BSA you would have no idea what this means. I think. +.5] like mine, because it had 2 lean-tos and a cabin for the adults. We had gotten permission earlier to hike up to the peak [Except this wouldn't happen without an adult going with us. +2], and had just gotten there. Kellan had been in scouts for a while, but Eteinne was a newb [Gamer terminology. +1]in comparison, and this was his first trip.

-A few minutes later-

"Do any of you smell something?" Kellan said. [Insert fart joke. Wait, I didn't? +5]

"Now that you mention it, I do..." Eteinne said.

"It smells like something is burning!" I replied. "And not the cheerful campfire kind of burning! Come on!" [How can I tell the difference? Plot. That's how. +1]

We quickened our pace. As we finally reached camp, we saw it was engulfed in flames!

"That's one big bonfire" [Stupid joke is stupid. +1] Said Eteinne. "Wait... does this mean no marshmallows?"

Seeing some of the nearby trees catch fire, I told everyone we have to move now. "There's a clearing where someone could get us, and I have my flare [Plot! +1] and fire starters" I said as well. As we were moving, we heard a few helicopters. I lit the flare, and we made it the clearing. A few minutes later, one of the helicopters dropped down. The chopper itself was a big one, probably a cargo transport. 'Getting anything in the sky to help eh?' [What I was trying to convey was that everything available was trying to help in this incident. Because of poor wording, +2]I thought as the door opened, and a person who I never thought I would see in a million years stepped out: My recently pronounced dead friend who had been missing for 6 months, after an avalanche broke his car to smithereens in north Alaska. [Plot! +1] His name is Jack. I was about to ask what happened, when I noticed his strange attire. He had this weird flower shaped hat, green clothes, and what looked like a vine whip attached to his belt. His skin had a greenish hue to it as well. [Because I couldn't think of anything at the time, he was a Venusaur, If you couldn't already tell. +1] The only words to escape my mouth were "Why are you dressed like that?" Before he threw something that looked like the bile bombs from L4D2. (Yes I brought L4D2 into this. If you don't like it, leave, there's more references coming concerning other things.)[I thought that I needed to type that. +1] Before we could move, the canister exploded and sprayed this weird goo all over us. Upon touching us, it started to expand. Looking around, I saw that Kellan and Eteinne had some on them as well. As it reached my face, I blacked out.

-P.O.V. Switch: Jack-

'This part is always messy.' Thought Jack, the Commander of the Pokemorph special forces. 'The guys at intel told me I would seeing some old friends, but didn't tell me exactly who… [I really don't like this part. +5]

Sin total: 40 (if my math is correct)

Sentence: Doing the rest of these...