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This is part of the last chapter from Max's POV in courtesy of Eclipsevampire.
Chapter 3 The Hitter Guy
Max's POV
Fang looked like he was going to punch that guy at any second.
Max, make sure you don't stay down here to much longer. He is going to try and catch up to you before you head up stairs.
I hope Fang hurries up. I don't want this guy to catch up with me. By the looks of it he was having so much trouble keeping calm. I can't believe that Angel had to tell him.
The guy wasn't even paying any attention to what Fang was saying. He just kept looking at me dreamily.
This guy is getting on my nerves. Doesn't he read Fang's Blog?
"Gazzy don't." Gazzy was holding a pair of his underwear rolled up into a ball. He was going to throw it. Gross.
He held it back as far as he could. Before I could do anything about it he threw it right at Nudge.
She started to run around in circles trying to get the underwear off her head without touching it. All you could hear was yelling, "Get it off my head. It is so gross. Max, Fang do something about this. Someone get it off of my head."
Nudge's head was swaying around. It almost seemed like the underwear was glued to her head. It took her forever to finally get the underwear off her head. She looked like even more of a mess.
Nudge was glaring at all of us. None of us could breath from laughing.
Then I saw that she was grabbing something out of her bag but I wasn't sure. Tears started to stream down my face from all of the laughing.
I saw some material in Nudge's hands. She took out one of her pink sports bras.
Gazzy never even saw it coming. Nudge threw the pink sports bra at Gazzy's head.
His reaction was even worse then Nudge's. He thought the bra was contaminated. "This is even worse then underwear. Get this thing off of my head. It burns."
Angel was trying to explain everything that was going on to Iggy but she was having a hard time. Iggy got the gist of it though. He probably heard Gazzy and Nudge yelling.
It took Gazzy even longer to get the bra off of his head. He was shaking his head with all of his might.
Both of them walked up to each other looking really mad. There faces were about an inch apart and it seemed like they were going to strangle each other. The most unexpected thing happened, they fell on the floor laughing. They were holding on really tight to their sides.
We were still laughing when Fang came over with the room keys.
He held them out to us. "Okay, here are the room keys. Same rooms as always?" Iggy and Gazzy grabbed a key before anyone could reply. I saw a key floating in mid air.
Angel didn't want to grab a key I guess. The key followed her up the stairs to her room.
I had the last key in my hand. Fang and I headed up the stairs hand-in-hand.
Before we even walked a step I felt a hand on my shoulder. It was really cold and was squeezing my shoulder.
"I just wanted to welcome you guys to the town." He shook my hand first, which I greatly regretted because he handed me something.
He left before we could say anything to him. I showed Fang the piece of paper in my hand and I opened it. In it was the guy's name and phone number.
This was going to get Fang mad. I looked back up at Fang but he didn't look mad. I held him back because he hands were growing white from him holding it so tight.
I was starting to head back up the stairs when I felt a arm around my waist. It was Fang's. He turned me to face him. Before I knew it his lips were on mine. It was only a peck on the lips but it was enough to shock the guy at the front desk.
His mouth was wide open but he wouldn't stop staring at us. Fang must have been ready to head up because he put his hand on the low of my back. I was holding back laughter but it was really hard.
When I couldn't see the guy at the front desk anymore I let out my laughter.
The Flock was going to get a kick out of this.
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