I just want to say one thing…
START REVIEWING PEOPLE! Last time I checked, this thing had 97 views, but no reviews. Even if the story's bad people, it still wouldn't hurt to criticize it. Then it could be made better, and then you would give it a good review, so it would stay like that.
Zack woke up to see a dense canopy above. Groaning, he sat up and looked around. They were in a thick forest, and Jack was sitting a couple feet away grinning as if it were his birthday. The Temporal Flower was nowhere to be seen.
"Why are so happy?" he asked Jack.
Jack, still grinning, pulled a small sphere from behind his back. It was red on top, and white on the bottom. It had a black stripe running around it and a little white button in the center.
"What. The. Fuck." Zack breathed, trying to control himself. He understood why Jack was so happy. Zack felt like he could burst with all of his excitement.
"Do you know what this means?" Jack asked. Zack nodded; apparently Jack was a Pokémon fan as well.
What the two failed to notice was the rather large creature sneaking up on them. It suddenly attacked Jack; huge scything claws pinning his flower to a tree. Zack immediately jumped on top of the creature and put his hand to its forehead; thin metal threads spiraled into it, giving Zack the knowledge needed to understand its language. The creature hissed and slashed at Zack with its free claw, tearing a gash into Zack's face. With an anguished cry, he fell to the ground, holding his right eye.
"Scyther, what are you doing?" Zack looked up with his left eye to see the speaker. A Castform floated towards them, obviously angry. "Why did you run off like that? You know we're trying to help the rest of the Pokémon, not kill them right?"
"Anybody with a suitable amount of intelligence would know these aren't Pokémon; their small things with clothes and wrist watches!"
"Even if they aren't Pokémon, that doesn't give you the right to attack them!"
"What about the darkness? For all we know, they could be tiny kamikaze monsters!"
"If it was the darkness, we would be dead right now. Seriously Scyther, these little guys were harmlessly caressing a Pokéball. A bit weird, but still harmless!"
"Well-"
"JUST SHUT UP!"
Zack turned in the direction of the voice. A small (I mean small) Jigglypuff was standing nearby, rage set in its eyes. The Scyther and the Castform flinched, and Zack knew why. Even small runts could be powerful; the Jigglypuff was probably superior.
The Jigglypuff rolled its eyes and turned to Zack. "Now, I need your name, your occupation, and the answer to this question; were these two being idiots?" it (she) asked.
"Zack, none, and yes."
The small Pokémon nodded, and then turned to the Scyther. "Why did you attack Zack?" she asked.
"If you ask me, I was doing him a favor. Pokémon are less likely to attack those with scars; they're the survivors." the Scyther replied coolly.
"And how were you part of this?" she asked, turning to the Castform.
The Pokémon gulped. "Just trying to keep Scyther under control." it replied nervously.
The Jigglypuff sighed, and then gave Zack an Oran berry. Zack accepted it gracefully, sucking out the juices with his hands. Jigglypuff made Scyther put Jack down, as well as forced him to apologize to the Pikmin. Just as the duo were about to move on, a Riolu burst through a bush.
"Your late, punk." said Scyther. The Riolu glared at him and moved towards Jigglypuff, only to be stopped by Zack.
"OH MY GOSH IVE WAITED ALL MY LIFE TO HUG A RIOLU AND NOW I FINALLY CAN IM SO HAPPY!" Zack sputtered. The Riolu peeled off Zack and turned towards Jigglypuff.
"May I borrow this for a second?" he asked.
"Be my guest." Jigglypuff said. The Riolu carried Zack off into a nearby bush. When they emerged, Zack gasped.
"What the fuck?" he breathed. Either he got to the Mushroom Kingdom by a bush, or something weird was going on.
"I chose you because I felt that you weren't human." it said simply. Then the Riolu began an explanation about the natural world, about how through small points (like bushes) other places can be visited, and how he got from Sinnoh to Kanto. Then he started talking about the darkness.
"All we know about it is that it turns people evil. The actual effect can vary from world to world, but no matter where you are, you had better avoid it." With that, they returned to the Pokémon world, and the two Pikmin left.
"We've been walking for a while." said Jack, who was getting tired.
"Shut up." said Zack, who was getting tired of Jack complaining. Suddenly a Pikachu appeared! It got into a fighting stance.
"Who does this chump think he is?" Jack asked bravely. (because he knew he was immune to electricity)
"Jack, I'm not to sure about this one." Zack replied unsteadily. There was something about the Pikachu's grin that looked, evil.
And then it began to change. All of the color was drained from it's body, leaving a deep black color, and it's eyes became blood red.
"The darkness." Zack whispered in horror. The Pikachu then fired a pure black lightning directly at Zack. The next few moments were a blur. Jack jumped in front of Zack and took on the full force of the shock, which resulted in a small explosion that flung Zack backwards. He saw Jack turn the same color as the Pikachu before hitting his head and blacking out.
Remember; review even if it's bad, and be sure to criticize. Also, it wouldn't hurt to add some ideas in for this. And yes, I changed my name to Pikacrafter45, which is also my Wii U username. Review, or I will send Pootis Man, Elmo, AND the Plasm Wraith after you. :)