Raged over one of the reviews that was given after publication of Chapter 51. This review is over Chapters 1 to 14. Because this is the worst flame I've ever read in awhile, be prepared for a small rant. Please skip through this if you are not interested.
Under the name of headsupdisplay and Guest this anonymous reviewer said my story had 'plot holes', after only reading up until Chapter 14. Okay, cool. Then he tells me to 'STOP WRITING' in literal caps.
That got me pissed off.
Especially, since his review was 3/4 made up of shit.
Please, headsupdisplay, kindly learn what PRONUNCIATION is, and also maybe you could show me what kind of shit you've written before trying to tell me to 'STOP WRITING'. Until then, unfortunately, I'm going to have to tell you to fuck off.
I also hope you will read this, and get your own FanFiction account so I can actually respond to more of your flames via PM, instead of having to waste chapter space.
I really, really hope he reads this and responds. It would be nice to see what kind of shit he can throw back at me. Come at me, headsupdisplay.
I really enjoy having constructive criticism, but having a messed-up tool coming in to tell me to 'STOP WRITING' and point out what is wrong with my chapter with zero sense of punctuation, I just lose my head. Apologies.
Also, it's one flame in 40-50 reviews, so I must be doing something right. ;)
Because this unneeded rant has already wasted so much Author's Note space, I will not be adding to it and responding to reviews. If you really want a response you can leave me a PM. However, do note that I go through every single review and enjoy every word, unless the words are 'STOP WRITING'. Thank you guys!
Deidara and Sasori entered the hideout.
As they did, Sasori discarded his Hiruko armor, connecting chakra strings to the puppet and maneuvering it to a corner.
"Doesn't it get hot in there, Sasori, my man?"
Sasori grunted, and Deidara took his partner's answer as a yes.
Konan walked into sight, carrying a tray. "Cookies?" She smiled. When Deidara and Sasori stared at her, the blue-haired woman glared back. "Fine." She walked away.
"Actually, I think I'll take one, hm."
Too late, Konan was gone.
The figure of a seemingly spiky-haired person flickered into view. Sasori nudged his younger partner, urging him to stand at attention.
"Greetings, Sasori, Deidara."
"Leader-sama." The Suna redhead nodded.
"I called you here today to talk about the Nine-Tails Jinchuriki."
"Oh." Deidara's eye fell to his left sleeve, feeling embarrassed and almost ashamed. Almost.
"Well, now, obviously because of Deidara..." The leader made it a point to glare at Deidara as his name was being said, causing the former terrorist to twitch under his gaze. "... Konoha knows about the Akatsuki."
"Yes." Sasori confirmed.
"This means the Leaf will now be more guarded against strangers who enter the village. However, I have received news that Naruto is on some journey with one of the Legendary Sannin, Jiraiya. This would be the perfect time to abduct him."
"Then what are we waiting for?" Sasori quizzed.
"The Legendary Sannin, hm?" Deidara frowned.
"That's the exact reason I called you two here today," said the leader, addressing Sasori's question. "Two other members will hunt down the Nine-Tails. You two can sit back and relax for now."
"Whaaaat?"
"Do not question, Deidara." Sasori glared at his partner. "It is your fault we are being relieved of this duty, you know."
"Sasori is right. Please, do try to be more careful next time, Deidara."
"Tch." The former Iwa ninja turned. "Fine."
Sasori sighed. "Such a child..."
Nodding to the leader, who disappeared in a flicker, he returned to the safety of the Hiruko armor, and chased after Deidara, who had exited the hideout.
Naruto glared at the water balloon.
The water balloon seemed to be glaring back at him.
"I'm going to crush you," Naruto growled, as if fighting an enemy.
The blonde and his new teacher, Jiraiya, was in Shukuba Town at the moment, searching for some 'beautiful woman', as Jiraiya claimed, named Tsunade. She was apparently going to be the Godaime.
However, with Naruto pestering him for a demonstration of the new technique, Jiraiya had used it on a tree.
"Rasengan!" He'd yelled, and Naruto was in awe. A blue sphere had appeared in the hand of the Pervy Sage, and he had slammed the sphere into a tree, creating a deep spiral hole.
The first step to mastering this awesome-looking jutsu was, according to the old Sage, to burst a water balloon with only one hand - using chakra to spin the water within.
Naruto proceeded.
He frowned. It didn't seem to be working.
A knock on the door ceased his practice, and Naruto placed the water balloon in the bathtub, along with all the other water balloons Jiraiya had gathered.
He rushed to open the door, wondering who in the world it could be. Jiraiya was out having a blast at some pub, but he had the keys.
Opening the door, Naruto's first impression was mainly afraid.
The man on the other side had a sickening smile on his face. What scared Naruto however, was his blue skin and sharp teeth. In his right hand, the stranger carried some object, but his back hid the majority of it from Naruto's sight.
A forehead protector on the man informed Naruto of his loyalty to Kirigakure, the Hidden Mist Village.
But as Naruto took a closer look, he found that the symbol of Kiri was slashed.
"It looks like you were right for once... heh heh." The tall, grinning man spoke. The door was pushed open fully, his attire shown off - a black cloak, with decorated red clouds. "It seems the great Jiraiya is indeed absent."
Pervy Sage? Naruto thought.
"This will make our task a lot easier," he continued, smirking.
"But of course, Kisame-senpai!"
Another figure joined the man named Kisame. He wore an orange, spiral-patterned mask.
"Don't get too excited... Tobi."
Kisame revealed the object on his back. It was some kind of sword, with bandages wrapped around it. "The Nine-Tails Jinchuriki," he murmured, with a smile on his face that rivaled Orochimaru's. "This should be fun."
"Who are you guys?" Naruto was gripped by fear, but reminded himself that he was a Chunin of Konoha. With that knowledge, he steeled himself.
"We are going to have to catch you and take that Kyuubi inside of you! Sorry! Haha!" Tobi said, laughing sheepishly.
"Tobi, shut up," Kisame replied to his partner's words with an annoyed tone.
Naruto got into a basic taijutsu position. "T-The Kyuubi?"
"I think I'm going to cut off a leg or two so he can't run." Kisame said menacingly.
"Careful, Kisame-senpai! We are supposed to capture him alive!"
"I know, I know." He did a few hand seals. "Let's see what you've got... Nine-Tails."
"W-Woah! Wait, wait, wait!" Naruto yelled.
"Water Style: Raging Waves!"
Naruto jumped out of the way as a large amount of water gushed out of Kisame's mouth.
Unsheathing his sword, Naruto positioned himself again.
He soon found out, though, that the Raging Waves jutsu was not an attack.
"Water Style: Water Shark Bomb Jutsu!"
The huge puddle that had come as a result of the Raging Waves took the shape of a shark and jumped towards Naruto.
"Gah!" He ducked, and the shark crashed through the room walls instead, creating a hole.
Kisame charged at Naruto.
"Meet Samehada!" He laughed madly, swinging the weapon in his hands.
Naruto dived aside, and instead a bigger hole appeared in the wall as Kisame drove through.
Tobi now came forward, tackling Naruto into the hole, ensuring he followed after Kisame.
Naruto couldn't stop his screams, until he landed into the arms of Kisame, who smirked at him.
With a yelp, he kicked the blue-skinned man away.
Tobi landed soon after.
"Tobi, I'll handle this." Kisame declared. "I haven't cut anything for quite awhile now!"
"Right, Kisame-senpai." The masked man said cheerfully. "I'll just relax in these hot springs then!"
Naruto turned, now realizing they were in the hotel's hot springs, conveniently closed for apparent renovation.
"No," Kisame sighed. "I need to use the hot springs for my attacks, you idiot."
"Oh, yeah! Right, I guess I'll just watch from the side." Tobi's tone was laced with disappointment as he threw his cloak back on.
"Now!" The swordsman did a few hand seals. "Water Style: Water Shark Bomb Jutsu!"
From the water of the hot springs came a shark, made entirely of hot water. Naruto found himself yelping again, and tried to use his sword to defend himself from the incoming shark bomb.
Unfortunately, it exploded in his face, dousing him with hot water and throwing him back.
"Water Style: Four Shark Shower."
From the water rose tiny water droplets shaped into sharks. Kisame jerked his hand forward and they flew towards Naruto like water missiles.
He swiped his sword, brushing them off, but they exploded into even tinier sharks, and hit him.
Unfortunately for Kisame, Naruto turned into a log.
"Hm?" The Akatsuki man turned. "Water Style: Giant Vortex Jutsu!" He screamed quickly, and from the hot springs, a water tornado emerged and flew towards the incoming Naruto, who had to cease his attack on Kisame to dodge the jutsu.
"So he uses the Water Style," Naruto muttered. His sword glowed. "Wind Style: Razor Wind!"
Kisame waved his Samehada, countering the sharp air waves.
Particularly interested in Naruto's kenjutsu, Kisame attacked, his bandaged weapon raised up high.
To the former Kiri nin's surprise, Naruto defended himself by clashing his sword against Samehada. This kid... he must use a sword pretty often.
Kisame kicked out, but Naruto was one step ahead, already on the ground.
The shark man was suddenly kicked in the chin, resulting in him being tossed into the air by the blow.
"Shadow Clone Jutsu!" Naruto was up on his feet immediately. Two clones appeared beside him and jumped into the air, one punching Kisame in the chin. The other clone kicked his opponent down towards the original Naruto.
Not wasting any time, he seized the opportunity.
"Rasengan!"
Nothing appeared.
Kisame glanced at Naruto's hand warily, then to Naruto himself, who had a disappointed look in his eyes. Did his jutsu fail? Ha, this kid is hilarious. He brushed himself off from the punch and kick he'd received earlier. His fighting style is... unique.
Fine, Naruto mentally huffed. If the Rasengan won't work...
He ran forward, attempting to strike Kisame, but was countered by Samehada.
As Naruto moved, he felt a stinging pain in his stomach that forced him back.
That's... the wound from the Chidori! It hasn't completely healed yet, it seems...
Seeing his opponent somehow weakened, Kisame grinned, showing off his sharp teeth.
"Water Style: Water Shark Bomb Jutsu!"
A gigantic shark bomb jumped out of the hot springs and shot towards it's intended target.
"Kisame-senpai!" Tobi said in alarm from the side. "That shark's huge! Will it kill him?"
Before Kisame could reply, there was a cry of "Summoning Jutsu!" and a green toad appeared in front of Naruto equipped with a giant shield, defending the blonde from the shark bomb.
"What?"
Naruto looked up.
A white-haired man stood on top of the green toad, striking a pose.
"Pervy Sage!"
Jiraiya grinned. "Yo!"
Gripping onto Samehada, Kisame backed away. "Jiraiya of the Legendary Sannin, eh?"
His smile tugging into a frown, Jiraiya glared at Kisame. "Are you... the Akatsuki?"
"So you know of our organization. I'm not surprised." Kisame turned to Tobi. "However much I would like to pit myself against a Sannin... I am no match for one. Tobi, it's time to leave."
"O-kay, Kisame-senpai!"
"Wait!" Jiraiya began to do hand seals.
"Water Clone Jutsu!"
Two Kisame clones attacked Jiraiya and his toad summoning. Naruto tried to go in pursuit, but the Akatsuki duo had disappeared.
"Who were they?" He questioned, as the old pervert dispersed the last clone by slamming his head into the ground.
In response, Jiraiya only smiled grimly.
Three figures flickered into view.
"Kisame, Tobi. Report."
"Yes." Kisame said respectfully, addressing the apparent leader. "We found and targeted the Nine-Tails in the absence of Jiraiya, but we took too long in the capture and Jiraiya returned."
"And you retreated," the leader finished. "Wise decision."
Kisame nodded, acknowledging the man's praise. "What shall we do about the Nine-Tails then?"
"We will worry about that later. For now, assemble at this time tomorrow. We are discussing something fresh."
"Sounds interesting."
"Right. Dismiss."
Two of the figures disappeared, as quickly as they'd appeared.
The last of the trio stared hard into space.
"Jiraiya-sensei... huh."
I hope you liked the short battle between Kisame and Naruto. I really enjoy writing fights. I don't know why.
Question of the Day: What is your favorite jutsu of all time in the Naruto world?
In the next chapter, Tsunade meets up with an old pal. The question is - which one? Meanwhile, Naruto continues training to master the Rasengan. See you all in the next chapter.