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Chapter Five: Icy Plans
Fumu went through her bedtime routine in a daze. While she brushed her teeth, her hair, put her clothes on and slid into bed; all the while she couldn't stop thinking.
While she lay in bed in the dark room, she couldn't sleep. It was almost like the Dedede face that was peeking at her though the crack in the doorway was forcing her to stay awake.
As she tossed and turned, she attracted some attention from outside.
"...Poyo?"
Sitting up, Fumu looked at the pink puffball through tired eyes.
"Come here, Kirby." she muttered, opening her arms and beckoning him to snuggle up to her.
The little puff walked in sleepily and hopped on the bed, crawling into Fumu's embrace.
"What... Wrong... Poyo?" he murmured. He still couldn't speak very well, but it was understandable. Most of the time.
Fumu sighed as she rocked the puffball back and forth, holding him close to her chest.
"He's a mystery wrapped in an enigma wrapped in a dark past, you know?" she mumbled. "I can't figure him out..."
"Poyo?" Kirby asked, confused.
"I mean, he used to be your friend, and then he was your enemy. He's Meta Knight's enemy, but he's Bandanna Dee's friend! I'm not sure if he's my friend or my enemy, but..."
"Poyo?" Kirby was genuinely confused.
"It doesn't matter." Fumu assured him. " Just go to sleep."
"Poyo." Kirby agreed, crawling out of her lap and under the covers. It wasn't long before, feeling safer than before, Fumu fell asleep with the puffball in her arms.
Outside, however, something rather sinister was going on.
A cloaked figure was floating outside the castle walls, spreading little red berries all over, and even throwing some over the wall.
After he had done, he chuckled to himself lightly.
"The icy plans are underway..."
With that, he spun his cape and disappeared.