Okay. I'm going to post these notes with the newest on the top (numbered the higheset). There will most likely be a new post for each update. You'll probably want to ignore the rest.
#4 Still flushing out and trying to find mechanisms that are subtle so that the reader isn't broadsided with a "Where the heck did that come from?" I altered part of the plot line as I went through this ... which is why Sakuar had sort of a full day while Naruto battled his illness and the demon. I'm debating on a sequence of flashback that... To put it simply, should it just be an editorial convienence, a recalled tale from another character, or part of the delusions. I'm leaning towards the middle, though the first would be easiest. The last would work, but it might leave the reader confused unless I can make very clear what is real and what is delerium. Having only been delierious once in my life, and that when I was a teen (about the same age as I've made Naruto 16), I'm finding it hard to truly recall what it was like. Oh well, if all else fails: Fake it. NOTE: This draft has minimal rewrites. I'll try and get to them later. Made some changes to the other chapters, but the current reader need not worry about them as they don't affect the story line -- just clearing a few things up. I.e., I realized last night that I had no descriptive info of Sakura!?! So a few dashed off lines in the only place that wouldn't require major rewrites took care of that.
#3 WOW, lot's of edits for this one. I'm too tired tonight, but will catch it later -- read it now if you don't care. Another chapter, another verse. As mentione before, I'm working at trimming down the character developments a bit. The reader with more knowledge of Naruto will appreciate this the most I think, but I'm still aiming to provide stand alone characters. Some I've glossed heavily over (the observant reader might notice this, those unfamiliar with Naruto will definitely notice it). It's a very slow start, I know. I myself am wondering how long before I can get into the meat of the story? Well, every good steak has at least one bone ;) It seems that the reader and I must endure awhile as I don't with to rush the development TOO much.
#2 As mentioned, I hate reading these things and find it annoying to find A/N in a story. It distracts from the rhythm and pace of reading and knocks a reader out of whatever world the author created for him. BUT I also see the need to keep some records and comments running here while I'm writing. BUT I've decided it will be better to just update a tag page, in case there are people reading this thing.
Now, as to the story and what's happening. Hmmmm... I find myself falling into the trap of over explanation. AND yet, a story should have the merit to stand on its own without reference material. So I find myself writing about chakra and the demon fox, introducing character's as if the reader has never encountered them. This is VERY time consuming. I am tempted to drop or at least reduce this tedium ... not so much for my sake, but for the reader. In essence 1/3 of what I've written to most will be blah blah blah ... I already knew that. For now I guess I will continue this paradigm but still remain in question of its value.
Oh God, do I really have to put that crap about not owning Naruto?! It's insulting not only to me, but the reader that I must do so. Obviously I have no connection to original work, nor will I profit from this endeavour. So blow it out your pipe and don't bug me about stupid stuff.
#1 I hate Author's notes, but I need to drop this in for now and will most likely delete it later. I have many issues with the Naruto world and a part of me wants to disassemble them in this story. There's two problems that I see that are keeping me from doing just that. One: It would percipitate a greater departure from the Naruto story line. Two: It would require the investment of a lot of time and writing to clarify and expound upon these shortcomings. For example... In my thinking the Shadow Clone (or any clone jutsu) would not be able to stand more than a brief physical contact with the original without great pain and tremendous concentration. There are reasons for this as good ones if a person allows logical and even shall we say perverted reasons to ensue along those lines. In fact, even the henge jutsu must be consider more of a gengutsu on a limited sphere than a true "transformation." To me, a true transformation would involve soooo much more. Otherwise boys will be girls and nobody would know who was who or what was what. Therefore a henge would be limited and very detectable by even a genin or a semi-skilled commoner.
