Finally, I should update. A lot. To catch up, you know. Thanks, everyone, for reviewing! It's amazing – this time, everyone who reviewed haven't ever reviewed before! Thank you!
Thanks to all the favoriting people and the alerting people who alerted and faved this story and/or me!
And thank you to everyone who read the story! More than 10,000 hits already! So incredibly happy!
You know what drives me insane? So far, today, only three visitors – but over a hundred hits! It's insane! But still, thank you to all of you readers! xD
In the reviews, ChinaDang suggested the updates to be longer. So, I thought, maybe if I post the updates twice as long, that might work, right? Yeah, that'd be quite satisfactory. But for now, until the 100 scene anniversary, I'll post multiple scenes per update.
And I'm quite amazed at Evanescences Angel. She read my story from the very first scene to nearly up to the update point for two hours! Two hours of staring at the screen, reading and reading… and ignoring hunger pangs, too. I would have gone to get a drink long before that. xD
She pointed out a few places to fix, that you would see when you go to the reviews page.
One: Ria is a mary-sue. And you readers would probably notice Ria not becoming so much of a mary-sue later. I've already begun to fix that. And for the beginnings of the story, I'll get back to that; I sometimes prefer to write out the entire story first before I go back to make those changes. And this time is one of those sometimes. ^^
Two: an entire forty scenes were devoted to Kaia's little tap. Hm. In other terms, that is one week out of her life. But apparently an entire hour in real world time. I would say that's quite a lot. And plus, those forty scenes might not really seem much anymore, once the story progresses further. Soon, it won't really be half of the entire posted story, it'd be one third of the story, one fourth, one fifth, maybe even less. I'd just have to write a lot. Also, another point, possibly a spoiler: that hit is a lot more important and affecting of Kaia's life in the future than you would think. More than any sane person would think. Inside the box, of course.
Also, quoted directly from the reply I sent to Evenescences Angel:
"I tend to write the beginnings of a relatively short story and turn it into a full-length book."
Three: Kaia's original impression is fading away. Or the problem was something like that; I can't quite put it into words, but at least I know how to fix it. It's so weird, I think I noticed a little that Kaia isn't really… the real Kaia in the beginning of the story. However, you would realize she would gradually return to the Kaia she was in the beginning – a normal girl. In ways, the hit that Hibari dealt on her would seem to have healed a bit, like it hadn't ever happened. But that would come after the Future Arc. Like everyone else, Kaia would change.
For this problem, Evensences Angel suggested that Haru, Kyoko, and Kaia become friends. After they change, they've become friends. Once I get there, probably it would show up, become much more easy to see. However, I haven't even entered the future arc in what I've posted so far. The good stuff is still yet to come. :]
And yes, Chrome. I've been thinking of Yamamoto/Chrome, how to put it into the story. Of course, there'll be more Chrome if there's going to be Yamamoto/Chrome. And of course, the pairing can't possibly exist if Chrome wouldn't tell anyone. And if it had to be someone, personally, I'd start with a girl.
Four: Ria's wings a little overboard. Really…? In ways, yeah. I had to give her a means of flight, since in the future she'd refuse those flame-eating boots and such. Ah, minor spoiler. Oops, but oh well; it isn't that big of a spoiler. And as a dying will flame, as well.
Also another suggestion from Evenescences Angel, that Belphegor, the King of Knives, faces off against Kaia, the Queen of Knives. I absolutely LOVED the idea. Don't be surprised if that goes into the story some time.
And that brings us to the scoreboard. It's been updated; quite amazing. Check it out:
Mukuro/Kaia: 8 [and 5 re-votes from Shin] [one of the votes are from Shoko-Chan, and she re-votes twice]
Gokudera/Kaia: 5 [and 1 1/2 re-votes from Shin] [another re-vote from Crazee4anime] [a re-vote from little-L.A.M.]
Belphegor/Kaia: 5 [a re-vote from The Great Pineapple MEKI] [a re-vote from RemStrike78] [and a re-vote from AkaMizu-Chan]
Hibari/Kaia: 4 [a re-vote from that~one]
Yamamoto/Chrome: 2 [and 2 re-votes from Shin] [and a re-vote from Banyou]
Hibari/Haruka: 2 [and another re-vote from Shin]
Mukuro/Kaia with a Hibari twist: 1 [and 3 re-votes from Shoko-Chan]
Belphegor/Kaia with a Mukuro twist: 1
Soto/Kaia: 1
Byakuran/Kaia: 1
Xanxus/Kaia: 1
I put them into order…and…
Amazing comeback, Bel! :]
Thanks, guys, for voting! Again, like scene 69, I'll put in the re-votes and see the tallies…
Mukuro/Kaia: 15
Gokudera/Kaia: 8½
Belphegor/Kaia: 8
Hibari/Kaia: 5
Yamamoto/Chrome: 5
Mukuro/Kaia with a Hibari twist: 4
Hibari/Haruka: 3
Belphegor/Kaia with a Mukuro twist: 1
Soto/Kaia: 1
Byakuran/Kaia: 1
Xanxus/Kaia: 1
Mukuro/Kaia is still winning by a long shot. This time, Gokudera/Kaia and Bel/Kaia are neck-to-neck, after Bel/Kaia's votes surpassed Hibari/Kaia. Hibari/Kaia trails along behind by a few votes… and behind Hibari/Kaia is Yamamoto/Chrome. Seems that pairing isn't really being challenged by another, as both characters' names aren't mentioned in the other entries. After is Hibari/Haruka, then follows the single-vote entries.
In this situation, I think the outcomes would change a little. And you see, the twist entries have been omitted. For all twist categories, please see the main pairing of the twist entry.
See here:
Mukuro/Kaia: Final Pairing, and the story would finish off with this pairing.
Gokudera/Kaia: Pairing will persist, however would end before the end of the story.
Belphegor/Kaia: Because of the Varia' punishments by the Ninth for the Cradle Affair and the Ring Battles, pairing wouldn't come until after the Future Arc.
Hibari/Kaia: Will go on into the Future Arc, but most of the pairing's romance would end abruptly after.
Yamamoto/Chrome: Pairing will come as a side-pairing. It will fade into the story gradually.
Hibari/Haruka: Pairing would not be portrayed [sorry!!]. I don't really follow Haruka after middle school, except a few occasional meetings, like the one below, in this scene.
Soto/Kaia: Pairing would likely be unrequited in a romantic way. [I will leave it as it is right here. If I include any other information, it would be considered spoiler. D:]
Byakuran/Kaia: Pairing would come later in the story, after the Future Arc, since we don't wee Byakuran that much, and it would be impossible for romance to spring over the course of a few brief meetings.
Xanxus/Kaia: Please see entry Belphegor/Kaia. Also, by the time I get around to this pairing, Kaia probably wouldn't really be that young anymore. Much time has passed since the Future Arc for this one.
If you are not happy about this, please vote! If you are happy about this, please vote as well, to preserve these pairings in the ranks they are in now!
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OMG. This is really long for a headnote. And it doesn't seem there is enough for the actual story… I'll update a few scenes this time, to make up for it.
Thanks, everyone, for reviewing! :D
Now, please don't listen to me and hurry up and read!
Happy Reading…!!
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Kaia was sure this was Haruka's house. She had only come over once, when Soto was busy doing something else. She entered the front yard and came right up to the door. She heard voices – exited squeals and giggles of female voices. Kaia frowned.
She rang the doorbell. The voices immediately hushed. The knob turned, and the door opened. A familiar face came into view, as well as a few others.
"Who is it~?" asked Haruka. She blinked. "Ehhh- who- Kai?!" Haruka gaped. Kaia's eyes were wide open. But they narrowed in anger.
"Haruka… have you even thought of what I'd be going through after I moved?! And yet you ditch me…for…them…" Kaia gritted her teeth and glared at the girls behind Haruka. "They've been the ones who tormented us throughout elementary school, idiot! And yet you-"
"Kaii, they aren't that bad, trust me," Haruka looked as if she were begging.
"They aren't that bad?! Iruku, Shai, and Tsuyo, they've been rotten bullies to us! They're just being nice to you, to make you rotten like them!" accused Kaia in her rage. "Can't you remember the ones that left you, but still think of you?!"
"I've tried calling you!!"
"Do you see my bandages, Haruka?!" snarled Kaia. "Do you see the bandages on my head?! I've been bedridden for an entire two weeks, and do you think I've been anywhere other than the hospital?! Do you think you can call my new home number when I'm at the hospital, unconscious and possibly not even alive anymore?!"
"What happened, Kaia?" breathed Haruka. She looked back at her three friends behind her. "Iruku, Shai, Tsuyo, you three better not say anything bad against her." They nodded, though they glared at Kaia.
"Come in," invited Haruka. She smiled warmly. "I shouldn't keep you standing there too long."
"No. I can't endanger you either," Kaia shook her head. "I'll just talk here." Her eyes narrowed dangerously. "I don't know what happened, but you are well aware how infamous the Disciplinary Committee of the middle school is? The President is half the issue."
"President?" repeated Haruka.
"You'll know him when I speak his name," spat Kaia. "Hibari Kyouya."
"The Hibari Kyouya?!" oogle-eyed Haruka. "He's scary…"
"You know the weird rumors about Namimori? They are all true," Kaia stamped her foot in emphasis. She shook her head. "Haruka, I just can't believe you…to have abandoned my memory…"
"I haven't, Kai, I haven't!" objected Haruka.
"Why have you not come to visit, when I've come to visit when I could?!" glared Kaia. "I miss you, but you don't miss me back. I can't go on blindly hoping. I've got nothing else to trust, and you've failed me."
"We're still friends, Kai, please!"
"I would like to think so too, but…" Kaia shook her head. "I can't afford to risk your well-being for mine."
"What do you mean? Kaia, I don't want to lose you!" asserted Haruka. "You're my friend, right?!"
"And you, mine. But it is because we are friends that I must do this," Kaia looked around her. "It seems that…that person…is after me now. Remember that person that preyed on students from Kokyou? That…mass-murderer… And I'm not lying." She looked past Haruka. "You rotten three, you just make my world darker." In fact, she didn't know much about that mass-murderer, aside from the fact that he was scary and ominous, with that creepy grin. So far, Mukuro fitted these categories. If he didn't, then he could be bent into it.
"Kai…" begged Haruka. "Don't do this to me, please…"
"Then…call me, please?" Kaia smiled a little. "I don't want this to happen either, but I don't want more than one death between us. Call me, please. Or email me; I'll get through on one of the school computers." Haruka nodded, a watery smile appearing on her face.
"I'll see you later then…" she nodded. Kaia nodded confirmation.
"I'll see all of you later, if it so happens were cross paths once more."
The door closed. Kaia remained standing in front of it. She felt like crying, she felt like storming at Haruka in rage, she felt like she didn't know what to do.
She's moved on… She doesn't care about me anymore…
So I am really a discarded doll, aren't I…
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Also, notice she isn't really thinking as she says these words. What Mukuro said about Haruka before Kaia came to visit Haruka probably got to her. Poor her.
Thanks for reading, everyone! xD
Have an awesome summer, everyone!
