I'm about to do some story-whoring, people. Of my own newest story.
I'm working on a prequel to King's Note, following my OCs before they came to Japan to fight Kira, Death Note based.
The dialogue might be a bit hard to read for some, as it takes place in Ireland and I do use Irish slang within the dialogue quite a bit. Apologies for that, but I do want to make it realistic. They can't be using American slang and accents if they're Irish, now, can they?
The main-main character in the story is the little-mentioned Al from the first few chapters of this story, and he's quite a bit more important than you might guess.
When I started working on the story, it was more or less a project for myself in order to develop my OCs more. But, it got a plot that involves death notes and shinigami and L and murder and all that good jaz, and so now it's a fanfiction.
I've planned out the ENTIRE thing, timeline and all, right down to the day every important plot point occurs. Wonderful, no?
The bad-person is Don's younger brother - who is never mentioned in King's Note for a reason that will be covered in this story.
Would anyone like a summary?
Summary:
Al is highly regarded as the best con artist in Ireland by many, and he takes quite a bit of pride in his hard-earned title. Even so, he still holds a steady job in the small town of Newmarket-on-Fergus working as a bartender for a local pub, if only because he enjoys the job and talking to drunk people is rather amusing. His rather nice (or as nice as it gets for an orphaned con artist) life is flipped around, however, when a few boys enter his pub and attempt to order a few pints using a fake ID, three teenagers going by the names Don, Sean, and Pat. They end up looking up to Al as a sort of a mentor in the ways of the streets, even as a sort of a father figure - Don and his younger brother Sean ran away from home two years earlier to escape their abusive drunkard of a father, and Pat just tags along with them for the hell of it despite his grandmother's wishes for him to live a safe, sheltered life. A year after meeting Al, Sean witnesses the brutal murder of his own mother behind the pub Al is working at. The gunman flees in one direction, and Sean runs in the other. Don, who is in the pub at the time, realizes that his brother is missing from the pub just before the gunshots ring out. He rushes to where they came from to find his mother dead and his brother nowhere to be found. After days of searching, he can't help but assume the worst for his brother. Sean, however, has simply fled to another town, afraid to go back. Left alone with his own thoughts and nightmares, facts become confused with fiction for the confused teenager, and delusions develop in his mind that lead him to believe he watched Al gun down his mother. He looks for some way to revenge. Meanwhile, a shinigami called Zerhogie (he is in Death Note, check the How To Read Character Guide in the shinigami section for him. If ya don't have it, you can check it out at onemanga"dot"com) has been keeping an eye on his planning out of curiosity. He decides to trick the Shinigami King into believing that he has filled his Death Note and needs a new one, and he succeeds. He delivers the death note to Sean to see what it will amount to, and Sean incorporates the note into his plan. He uses blackmail to get Al to follow a trail of murders he leaves across the country, though the murders are no ordinary murders; every death Sean causes is a brutal animal attack of some sort, making it impossible for anything to be traced to him. However, because Al funds everything with credit card scams and cons, L, who is following the case himself due to its odd subject matter and sheer amount of deaths, is able to track down Al as the main suspect. What exactly is Sean's plan for revenge? Will Al figure it out before it's too late? Will L discover the truth about who is really committing the murders, and how? Read away and find out!
It's rated M, as a warning in advance. For uber swearing and extreme violence, as well as touchy subject matter such as child abuse.
What else to say? Not much.
Except pleasepleasepleasepleaseplease check it out! It'll answer quite a few questions that may not get answered in this story surrounding my OCs, I promise!
Now, onward to the review replies.
Vampire Note: I'll add it to the line-up. Today's is chinchilla, though :P
Sparanda: Because it can't be the word of the year if it's word of eternity! :O I'll announce it at the end of the chapter.
Stalker of Stories: Awesome - I could seriously use a beta reader, thanks for that. I usually type these up at about midnight going on nothing but caffeine, so I tend to make quite a few mistakes. I've edited the last chapter, I just haven't taken the time to repost the edited version yet. And as for the hair dye thing - I used permanent hair dye two days in a row before, and it did horrible - and I mean horrible - things to my hair. I think it just depends on the hair type. I can't dye my hair more than once a month without it getting fried. Ah, and when I rewrite it I'll be posting it as another story - under the same name, but the title will read The King's Note rewrite or something to that extent. I'll only post a chapter or two a week, if that, I won't just change all the chapters on this story all at the same time. That would be crazy.
ThreeBooksInTheFire: Wootness for fummins! Haha, seriously XD. Come to think, in fact, I think he might be part Martian. He's got those really crazy big eyes like the stereotypical three foot tall green aliens have. He was looking for his long lost cousin there :P Oh, I've never read that manga - I had to wikipedia it to figure out what it was, lol. Is it any good?
Madeline Cullen: Yeah, let's not beat up the pandapuppy. He knows some seriously crazy martial arts. Just ask Light, he's gotten a foot to the face more than once XD Stealing his candy miiight work, as long as you don't get caught at it :P
Princesa de la Luna: Thanks for the review, and I'd check out the other stories, but I have't heard of either of the mangas they're based on - I haven't got much spare time as it is, and the little I do have is spent playing guitar and working on this story. I might get around to checking out those series, but probably not soon. I wish I could help, sorry about that.
Marisol Akyri: But Matsuda's the most awesome ditz ever :( lol. I probably show him too much love, but he's the comic relief character in Death Note, and I like comic relief characters :P
Xer0-sama: Aah, I already had the lineup. Pat's got the vocals, as Don can only sing (and will only sing, for that matter) when he's had quite a bit of tequila beforehand. Matsuda and Katherine had already figured out their spots in earlier chapters - Matsuda's got lead guitars, and Katherine's got drums. Don's going to be doing bass guitar. And I was thinking of the name being either that or just Legally Dead.
Raine44354: Don't feel bad, neither do I, lol - just look at all the multi-chapter fics I've got on here, that's a dead giveaway right there XD And whoa, lmao when did L turn into a sex machine? O.o I might have to have a talk with him about that later.
Sybil Corvax: I felt sooo bad for writing that, but it was still too goshdern amusing XD
Usagi323: I should be updating a lot more often than I have been :)
Now, this chapter is mostly just a retelling of what happened in the same chapter/episode of Death Note, but chapters like that are necessary sometimes to progress the story. Of course with added characters, but not much has changed except for a bit of dialogue. The next chapter will be more interesting, I promise.
"See, just like I told you!"
In truth, everyone in the investigation had expected Matsuda to be the one to break the silence there. He had wanted his very own I-told-you-so moment whether he would admit it or not; he had been the one to discover what was going on with Yotsuba firsthand due to his idiotic blunder. But regardless of Matsuda's triumph, it wasn't good, not at all. Kira's plan was moving forward all too smoothly. He had considered every possibly circumstance. The fact that L and Katherine could both see Shinigami, that they both knew for a fact who the Kira to form this plan had been, wasn't going to help in the least little bit.
Ooi continued on after his momentary pause now, breaking the silence in the other room and bringing a hush over the investigation team once again. "However, there are a few things we need to discuss before we move on. For instance, the death of Hatori."
"It couldn't be helped. Frankly, I was relieved to hear the news of Hatori's death." This silenced the room again for the moment as the other six turned their heads to look at Namikawa, all rather inquiringly. Takahashi voiced what was no doubt the general thought around the room.
"What's wrong with you, Namikawa? You were relieved to hear your own colleague was dead?"
Namikawa sat back in his chair, crossing his arms. "I believe it was a logical enough action for Kira to take, to show us what awaits us if we wish to pull ourselves away from this group. I had honestly hoped this would happen from the moment Hatori spoke of his wish to leave at our special meeting on Tuesday."
Silence rang out again as everyone took a moment to think this over. After a few long seconds, Ooi gave a short nod of agreement. "Yes…" he said slowly. "I believe we all know the meaning of Hatori's death, and we would all do good to keep it in mind. Next, the report from Erald Coil."
"So," Higuchi said, picking up a couple sheets of paper from in front of him on the table, as everyone else did, "this is the investigation we paid five million dollars for…"
"According to this, L is working on his own without any country backing him," Kida said, skimming quickly through the first page and flipping over to the second. "Japan police have pulled out of the Kira investigation, and while other countries are investigating, they're only doing so on their own soil. It's still unlikely L will give up his investigation at this point, having supposedly moved to Japan after Kira was determined to be in the Kanto region."
"What the hell does he mean, 'supposedly?'" Higuchi asked impatiently, flipping back and forth between pages of his copy of the report. "He should be certain about something that could be useful to us, like the name and face of L…"
Katherine took a seat at one of the empty chairs as they listened to the discussion of "Erald Coil's" report in silence. There was still no shinigami in the meeting room, meaning that whichever one of them was Kira had almost definitely made it stay behind, meaning he knew someone on the investigation team could see shimigami and was taking no chances. So far, the most likely candidates in Katherine's eyes were Higuchi and Namikawa, possibly Ooi. Higuchi seemed most likely just because of how particularly impatient he was with the reports. However, Namikawa's complete indifference to the death of Hatori, seeing it as more of a relief than anything else, almost made him seem likely – Kira would have definitely been relieved to have someone opposing his authority dead, even if the death was at his own hand. He and Ooi both seemed to have a fairly strong influence over the group, and anyone with a strong influence over the goings on in those meetings could be a suspect. Though Higuchi didn't seem very influential himself, he was still exactly the type of scumbag that the new Kira seemed likely to be.
The least likely would be the most nervous, and in this case that seemed to be Shimura and Takahashi, both of whom were particularly careful with their choice of words. Shimura seemed jumpy in general, but the look of utter disbelief he had given Ooi when he switched the subject away from Hatori's death after less than a minute of discussion on the manner definitely helped his case. Like Hatori had apparently been, it was quite obvious Shimura wanted next to nothing to do with the group, but he was smart enough to keep his mouth shut about it. Perhaps he wouldn't have been if Hatori hadn't been the first to speak. And then Takahashi, while he seemed at least a bit untrustworthy just based on first impression, was definitely too nervous about matters to be Kira. Midou and Kida both also seemed unlikely, but at least a bit more likely than Takahashi or Shimura. Katherine would have been perplexed if Kira was any one of those four.
"Now we move onto the main subject. Whom to kill?" Katherine snapped herself out of her ponderings to look back up at the screen now.
"Well, Elf Insurance is planning to launch in Japan," Midou said. "If that isn't stopped, then Yotsuba and many other strictly Japanese companies will lose quite a few clients."
"We'll pick the leading figures in this project and have them all die in an accident," Kida said. "It's an American company, so they'll die in America, leaving no visible connection between the accident and us. Besides, we aren't the only company that will gain from their deaths."
"Then in regards of Elf, we will ask for accidental deaths of those names," Ooi said. "Agreed?"
"Agreed," the other six around the table agreed.
After discussion of a couple more names, the group began discussing when they should ask Kira to act. There was no doubt Yotsuba was it, but they still only had circumstantial evidence. They would need more solid evidence than simply a group of seven Yotsuba employees discussing what would be done.
"Kira… accidental deaths… specification of a date and time… this has to be it," Light said. "Everything is exactly what we thought it would be."
"Unfortunately, no arrests can be made until the names mentioned actually die," L said. "Until that time, the evidence we have is still insufficient…. However, if we continue to observe the actions of these seven during and after the meeting, and watch the actions they take closely until those mentioned do die, then we will catch Kira without fail."
"R… Ryuzaki!"
L nearly dropped a spoonful of ice cream at the sudden yells from Light and his father directly behind him. He looked over his shoulder at the two. "What?"
"Your method is wrong, Ryuzaki," Light said.
"We can't let you do what you're planning."
Here we go… L thought with an inward sigh, looking back up at the monitors of the Yotsuba group.
"You intend to let them kill someone else in order to get to Kira in order to establish evidence that would hold up in court without any more backing that we already have," Light said.
"Look, it's clear enough that those seven are committing the murders. This videotape and Matsuda's testimony will be enough to prove it. Letting them commit another murder is out of the question."
"I haven't said anything about letting them commit a murder yet," L said. "We won't be able to arrest them at all unless one of those two dies, not legally… well… I suppose that isn't important, but we can't arrest any of them at this point."
"Think about it, Ryuzaki. Those people they're planning to kill aren't even criminals. We can't pretend we haven't heard anything. Those seven are evidently responsible for the deaths happening around Yotsuba."
"…So, Yagami-kun, you do believe killing criminals is justified?"
"I didn't mean that – don't stray from the point.
"While I hate to interrupt such an enlightening discussion, we still 'aven't got a fecking clue which one of them actually is Kira," Pat pointed out. "Only one of those seven is responsible for the deaths surrounding Yotsuba, the other six are bein' 'eld against their will an' made to help. Yeh can tell that at least a few o' them don' even want to be there, just from watchin' them. They're practically hostages. Arrestin' all seven o' them would be like arrestin' both the burglars and the tellers involved in a bank robbery – yeah, they gave up the bank's money illegally, but they 'ad a fecking gun to their head, wha' else're they supposed to do?"
"We still can't wait around to find out and let more people get killed," Light said. "If we take all seven into custody, we would have a better chance of discovering which one is Kira through direct interrogation."
"… request Zenzai for this weekend, and Elf for three weeks after," Ooi was saying on the monitors, "though spreading them out alone doesn't solve the problem…"
"This weekend, they'll be committing one of the murders sometime between tonight and tomorrow afternoon," Yagami said. "This isn't good…"
"Light-kun, do we have the mobile numbers for all seven?" L asked.
"Yeah, we could have their calls intercepted with police assistance."
"The police aren't our allies anymore," L reminded him. "They might notify Yotsuba of the interception."
"That is true…"
"It doesn't matter which one, but we need to call one of them and stop them from doing this!" Yagami said, flipping his own phone open.
"Hold on," L said, looking over his shoulder at Yagami. "We can't do that. They'll figure out that the investigation reached them only a few days after Aiber contacted them. It would look suspicious. Besides that, it will make it nearly impossible to find Kira and pin him down then – it would send us back to square one, all our efforts would be wasted. We need to obtain evidence that proves Kira's existence in order to catch him…"
"But saving a human life still has priority," Light said. "Listen to what you're saying, Ryuzaki."
"Besides, if Kira can kill a person just by wishing it so, then there won't be any evidence to find," Yagami said.
L shook his head, picking up a cup of coffee from the desk in front of him. "If we conduct our investigation deliberately and carefully, we will find evidence, because it is there to be found."
"What makes you so sure?" Yagami asked.
Before L could begin to answer, someone rather unlikely spoke up. "Because Kira killed Lind L. Taylor and the FBI agents." Most of the heads in the room turned to Matsuda at this. He crossed his arms, eyes inclined towards the ceiling as he thought. "Kira killed someone posing as L, and the FBI agents that were also searching for him, which means the evidence must exist. Otherwise, he wouldn't have needed to kill them, because he wouldn't have had any worries about them finding any evidence that could incriminate him, and he would have been fine with leaving them to search for him with the assurance that he couldn't be found." He looked back down at the investigation team, and looked surprised to see all of the incredulous stares he was receiving for the deduction. "That's what Aizawa-san told me," he admitted with a laugh, scratching the back of his head. "I finally understood what he meant by it a few days ago."
"I see…" Yagami said. "But for now, we still don't know which of those seven is Kira, or even if one of them actually is – there still could be a possibility one of them is simply connected with Kira. To save Mr. Zenzai's life, we must allow them to know that our investigation has reached them."
"Of course…" L said resignedly. "There's no other way, saving a human life comes before pinning down Kira…"
"We'd probably be better off just letting them kill the bastard," Katherine said, cradling her head sideways as she looked up at the monitors. "They'll just start being more careful if they know they're suspected, and then it'll take us even longer to find Kira, so the end result would be even more people dying."
"Not necessarily," Light said. Katherine raised an eyebrow at him, and then rolled her eyes when he didn't elaborate to look back up at the monitors. "Ryuzaki, if Kira is among those seven, then the possibility of me calling one of them and Kira answering the call would be one in seven, correct?"
"Hmm? I was thinking more along the lines of two at the most, so let's say two in seven."
"Right. Then I'll have to place my bet on that," he said. "I'm going to need to borrow your name, Ryuzaki." He looked up at the monitors. "From what we've seen, the one among them who is least like what we would expect Kira to be and has the greatest influence over the others is…"
After a short pause, L and Light both said, "Namikawa," at the exact moment Matsuda chose to point out Ooi. Outnumbered, however, he gave up his thought immediately, allowing L to continue. "Use the phone here if you are going to make a call," L said, indicating the phone attached to the desk. "The phones installed here have been made untraceable and tap-proof." L half-glared over his shoulder when he heard Pat scoff in response to the sentence, but refrained from saying anything.
Light dialed a number on the phone and the investigation team watched in silence as the meeting was interrupted by the ringing of a cell phone. Namikawa mumbled an apology as he took out his cell phone, examined the caller ID for a moment, and flipped it open. "Yes?"
"Are you Reiji Namikawa, head of the first sales division of Yotsuba Group?"
"I am indeed."
"Good. Give me occasional responses while you listen to me."
"Oh? What's this?"
"This is L." Namikawa looked slightly shocked for a moment, but quickly regained his composure quickly, obviously not at all keen on letting the other six what was going on. "Within that room are cameras and microphones I've had set up. The entire meeting has been recorded, starting with the discussion over the death of Hatori and onto the decision over whom to murder. Am I making myself clear?"
"Yes…" he said after a short pause.
"If you are not Kira or directly connected to Kira, then I have a proposal. Let's make a deal. Postpone the killing of Zenzai and the president of Elf for one month. I do not believe that should be too difficult for you to do."
"Okay. Sure."
"If you can promise to do that and cooperate with us from here on out, then what all but Kira himself or whichever of you is connected has done will be overlooked. Only Kira will be prosecuted, I will not question any of you that have been forced to cooperate with him on the murders that have been committed."
"I see…"
"If you discuss this conversation with the others, then it will only create chaos. In that case, I will show none of you mercy and you will all be caught. My only concern is to meet Kira in single combat. If L wins, you will not be charged. If Kira wins, you will continue with your wealthy life. Regardless of the outcome, there will be no loss for you. However, if you are caught now, it will be a great loss. The best thing for you to do now is play along with both sides and watch what happens. I expect you to act upon my instruction before the current meeting ends."
Light hung up the phone at this, leaving Namikawa to quickly formulate a plan. "Y… yes, next Monday then. Fine." And with that, Namikawa snapped his own phone shut. The first to begin the inevitable questioning was Ooi.
"What was that about, Namikawa? Who was it?"
"Hmm?" he said disinterestedly, stowing away his phone. "Nothing important, one of my men made a mess for me to clean up on Monday. Sorry for the interruption. Now, back to the subject at hand. How about this? We will give Coil a month to work on L, and if no progress is made by the end of the month, we will kill several at random dates, then give it another month, and continue this way until we actually get rid of L. Once L is removed, we will go back to two or three weekly. This means that we prioritize dealing with L."
Silence fell over the table, but it didn't seem to be a nervous or awkward one. They were all thinking about the idea, going over it to see what made sense and if anything needed to be change. Namikawa didn't look exactly comfortable, but given the fact that Kira was most likely in the room with him, one slip-up meant he would meet the same fate as Hatori. After a long moment, Midou spoke.
"I see…" he said slowly. "If we can get Coil to find L, we can kill him and have no more obstacles to worry about. We should move cautiously until then."
"Hmm…. That could work," Ooi agreed.
"Having some insurance can't hurt," Higuchi said.
"Then we will give Coil a month and continue with our meeting every two weeks. That seems to be all for today."
Once the meeting room was again empty, the monitors were switched back to their normal setting of Misa and Katherine's apartment. The investigation team remained silent for a moment afterwards. Despite her normal Light-bashing tendencies, even Katherine had to admit that had been a good idea. There was no doubt that everyone in the room agreed – and judging by the look on L's face, there was no doubt that the detective had every intention of using the idea to his own benefit. He was planning something; she could practically see the gears turning at much-too-fast speeds inside his head, cooking up another of his spontaneous plans.
"That was indeed a good plan, Yagami-kun," L said, breaking the silence in the room. "This way, the death is both postponed and we will be able to obtain information from Namikawa. Your method is similar to mine, and you had the idea before I did. Maybe after I die, Yagami-kun could assume the name of L."
In case you didn't see it in the beginning, I'm going to re-whore me King's Note Prequel.
It's called Animalistic Tendencies. Comma will be quite happy if you read it and review it and stuff!
The first chapter is a prologue just for background - it won't get into the actual storyline until chapter 2.
But it basically explains how everyone (the OCs, I mean) met and got into the wonderful world of criminal activity.
The main purpose of the story is basically going to be to explain exactly what caused Al to meet his unfortunate fate in this story. He was only wanted for murder; he never actually committed one.
So, read! Please? I'll give you all a bunch of fummins!
Not doing any questions this time, sorry. I'm busy working on the next chapter of Animalistic Tendencies at the moment, and once I finish that it's off to bed with me, because I'm bloody tired.
However, word of the day:
Chinchilla.
And, just for clarification, the word of ETERNITY is fummins.
It cannot be changed unless Chuck Norris wishes it to be so.
Oh, and by the way, due to new research done in the Kira case that was never previously released, it has been confirmed that Namikawa is, indeed, Dracula in a rather ineffective disguise. I will give you more information on the subject at a later date.
Just so's ya all know.
