Peer Editing
By Piotr Rasputin
I think that your thesis is that humans and mutants are not different on the inside. If so, you should move that thought closer to the beginning of your paper.
If your thesis is about the inadequacy of language, you should talk more about that in the rest of your paper. It is a good point.
All of your points are good, but they seem haphazard. If you rewrite your conclusion to include an outline of what you will talk about in the rest of your paper, it will bring the paper together better.
If you want me to read your conclusion when it is finished, feel free to slip it under my door or bring it to Danger Room training.