What's up everyone? I hope you enjoyed chapter 5. I would like to make a shout out to two people, grudgekitty and Gam919.
grudgekitty: after reading your review then rereading the chapter, I understand what you meant. I would also like to thank you for making my first critic!
Gam919: Thank you for agreeing with what Stan said ;). Also, I was confused by your second question and was wondering if you could rephrase it. If you want to PM me, I can personaly answer your question.
Okay, real quick, this is what I would like to call a Twin Chapter. I will be doing Mabel and Dippers P.O.V. At the same time. Enjoy!
Mabel:Dipper
I woke up to the sound of Bill entering the room. I don't know how or where, but it sounded like a door slamming shut.
"Here's your voice back Shooting Star." He says.
My once empty throat now feels full.
"Thank you."
"Your welcome. Now be careful. The more you struggle, the more it's going to hurt."
What does that mean? Before I could reply, a small, stab of pains starts to bloom in my chest. I don't know where it's coming from or why, but it sure does hurt.
As I enter Mabel's room, I see her face start to scrunch up. Her eyebrows squished together, her teeth bearing pain as she frowns. Tears start to emerge from her eyelids. I quickly run to the side of her bed and call her name.
"Mabel? Mabel!? Grunkle Stan! Help!" I yell.
The pain in my chest grows stronger. It hurts so much. I can't help but cry hot tears. I look for Bill but he is no where to be found. I fold over myself on the bed, trying to see if that helps the pain.
I doesn't do anything but make it worse. I let out a bloodcurdling scream.
Mabel lets out a bloodcurdling scream as Grunkle Stan, Stanley, and Soos enter the room.
"Kid, whats going on?" asks Stan as he rushes to Mabel's other side.
"I don't know! I just came in here!" I yell over Mabel's screams. I start to cry from hearing the pain that echos of the walls.
Just then, Mabel's eyes shoot open, reveling nothing but pure white.
I don't know what's going on, but I want it to stop. NOW! I can't take the pain. I want Dipper. He would know what to do. My eye's shoot open and I can feel as the pain slowly engulfs them. Soon the pain starts spreading all through out my body. All I can do is scream.
The rooms blue interior starts to turn red as the pain gets increasingly hotter. I'm scared so I scream. I force my eye's closed so I don't have to feel my pain as well as see it. But the tears come out faster and the screams get louder.
The tears come out faster and screams get louder. Mabel starts levitating. Only a couple inches off the bed. But it worries me because I don't know what's going on. I squeeze Mabel's hand as her screams pound against my eardrums.
"Dude, what do we do?" asks Soos, barely heard over the screams.
"I don't know!"
As she is lifted off the bed, her hair sticks out like static electricity and the blue glow gets brighter. Bright enough that I have no choice but to close my tear filled eyes to keep from going blind. I put my hands over my ears to try and block out the screams.
"Mabel! Mabel, can you here me? Please stop Mabel! Mabel!" I yell.
"Mabel!" I hear Dippers voice in the room. I open my eyes and look around. He is no where to be seen. Just the red glow surrounding me and the bed.
"Dipper?"I ask.
"Dipper?" she asks. Wait, is that her, or is it Bill? I struggle to open my eyes.
"Dipper?" Yes! It is her. She moves her lips to form my name when she says it.
"Mabel!"
"Mabel!"
"Dipper, whats going on?"
"I was going to ask you the same thing."
"I don't know. But it hurts. Dipper, it hurts so bad."
"It's going to be OK Mabel, trust me. Tell me how it hurts." I say as I reach for her hand.
I feel I firm grip on my hand.
"Dipper? Are you holding my hand?"
"Yes. I want you to know I'm right here. I will not leave your side."
"Thank you Dipper." I say. I'm glad he's here, even though I can't see him.
"Your welcome Mabel. I love you."
"I love you too." Then the pain get's so great, I can't scream. Well, I can, but it's so loud I can't hear it. Then it all stops. The red turns to back to blue. The pain disappears.
Mabel stops screaming. Her glow turns back to the light blue color. Her body is back on the bed and her hair is back down. Mabel's eyes are closed again and she is now longer crying.
I feel something tingly climb up my throat. I open my mouth and out comes a little blue star like dust. It's about as big as a tennis ball.
Mabel opens her mouth and out comes a little blue dust ball.
"Mabel?"
"Dipper?"
She doesn't respond. I check her pulse. It's back to her normal speed and her breathing is steady. But she's unconscious.
He doesn't respond. I sit up and look around for Bill. He's still gone but I know he'll come back eventually.
I try one more time.
"Mabel?"
I try one more time.
"Dipper?"
Still no response.
Still no response.
"No!"
"No!"
There you have it! This is my favorite chapter so far and I hope you enjoyed it. You can see at the end I made them more like twins. Saying and thinking the same things for those last 8 lines. Survey time! Who's P.O.V. Next? Dipper or Mabel? Ant thoughts? Please let me know! Thanks!