Hey guys CookieMonster4242 here, I just finished reading the trilogy by El James and I loved it so I decided to give the story my own take, just to see if my English style of writing is adaptable, enjoy

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Story Setting : What if Jack Hyde did more to Ana then just hit her? What if he had actually raped her?

This is my take on the story, no Baby Grey in thing story (okay, might appear at the end)

Warning for OOC characters

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Bright light shines through my eye lids and after a long few seconds, I manage to force them open to see a completely white ceiling.

The hospital.

Right. Christian had found me after…..that. I sense someone beside me and tilt my head down, to see a small mass of copper-coloured hair on my bed. A small smile creeps on my head as I realise who it is. Christian.

As softly as I can, I run my hands through his soft locks and he immediately jolts awake. Watching the sleep leave his eyes as his sleepy brain tries to process my smiling face was definitely entertaining, and I'm rewarded by a large bear hug that makes my wince as my ribs protest.

'Sorry, did I hurt you?' Christian questions as I look into his concerned Grey eyes. God I've missed that voice.

'I'm fine' I croak, feeling unhappy at my voice. I sound like I've been screaming for three days straight.

Noticing my frown, he instantly pours me a glass of water, which I gulp down immediately. Heavenly.

My hand discreetly creeps to my belly and I rub in circles. A look I've never seen before flashes across Christian's face and I sense something's wrong. It took me a while to finally realise it.

My belly, it feels…..empty.

My heart rate immediately spikes, and the frantic beeping on the machine suddenly seems distant. All that's on my mind is my belly.

Blip.

Blip is gone.

Tears are streaming down my cheeks as I grab at Christian and scream, the sadness and anger taking over my body. Christian's strong arms press me back onto the bed as I continue to weep and sob. A feel a small pinch on my arm before the whole world just seemed to quieten down, before I fall into oblivion lost in molten grey eyes.

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Tell me what you guys think and if you guys think I should stop, I'll delete the story. Thanks for the support guys, please review