Chapter 9 (Twilight)
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B.P.O.V
You know one of those days where you wake up and say the first thing that comes to your mind. Well today was one of those days.
I opened my eyes to see Edward looking down at me and the first thing that came to my mind was...
"You look good in a cape." Edward just smiled and the whole family burst into laughter. I turned my head to see them all there looking at me. Then I realized what I had just said. I blushed till my face was going to explode.
"How are you feeling?" Edward asked when the family stopped laughing.
"Much better… Thank you." I said.
"For what?" He asked and I blushed again.
"Just forget I said that." I got up and Alice dragged me into the bathroom.
"What are we doing today?" I asked.
"Well we're fixing your room up! I thought it best that you have a voice in where the things should go and what color for the paint job." Alice said and pulled a towel from the closet throwing me into the shower. I took off my clothes and threw them over where Alice was. Then I let the hot water warm my skin.
"So what did you dream about last night?" Alice asked casually.
Ed.P.O.V
The whole family was at the door of the bathroom trying to get a better spot to listen to Bella tell Alice about her dream.
"It was of my mom…" Bella started and we were all a little shocked.
"You were talking in your sleep…" Alice said and you could imagin it so well that you could practically see the blush on her face.
"I've been having a lot of bad dreams of my mom recently… it happens each year. Hey Alice… can I visit her grave today… maybe after we finish my room?"
"Of course Bella." Alice said and then opened the door it was so sudden that we all fell right through.
"Shhh… Out, now!" Alice said in a small voice. We all got out and then Alice turned to us.
"Okay! We should all wear black if we're going to go to a cemetery." Alice said and they all left my room to get changed. I looked through my clothes and found a black outfit when I heard a knock on the door.
"I'm decent." I called as Alice walked in holding a simple black dress. She walked into the bathroom and placed it on the counter and then sat on my bed. She wore a black mini skirt with a black tank top and her usually spiky hair was down with a black clip on the sides to keep it out of her face.
"Edward…when we leave to go home. I think you should take Bella somewhere… cheer her up, see a movie, you know." I didn't bother asking her why she couldn't do it herself… she's warmed up to me most and it's clear she has no other friends.
"Okay…" I said and Alice left the room.
"You should wear a cape." Alice smiled and I knew the family was not going to let that go for a long time. After a while Bella came out and if my heart would have skipped a beat if it wasn't already dead.
Bella had more hair on one side giving this Pretty/serious look. The dress hugged her perfectly as it touched her knees but there was one part that made a growl form in the pit of my chest. On her arms were bruises and scars. One looked somewhat like a hand mark…
Was Esme right about Bella being abused? Bella noticed me staring and blushed a deep scarlet and I smiled.
I'll find out in a week. We walked down the stairs to see Emmett loading the last thing into the Jeep We began our trip to her house. When we walked in, there were beer bottles everywhere and it was rather dirty.
"Who drank all these?" Emmett asked and we all wanted to smack him on the back of the head.
"My dad often has friends over…" Bella said but it didn't go unnoticed that she didn't answer the question. We all walked into Bella's room and Bella gasped.
The room was cleaner than it was before. There was no dried blood on the walls. All of Bella's old clothes were thrown out and the floors had a nice polish to them. They had chosen a light blue and I could tell Bella was captivated by the ceiling. It was like the universe was painted there.
There were stars and planets… I'm sure, to a human it would look almost realistic. Esme really did a nice job.
"Oh Alice, Esme!" Bella said and gave Esme a hug, there was a glint in Esme's eyes as she hugged Bella back and I knew that Esme considered Bella a daughter.
"Were does this go?" Emmett asked pushing the bed into the room.
"Just over there." Bella said as Emmett turned it to the right side and put it down. Jasper came into the room and put the mattress on. Tears started to come from Bella's eyes as she looked at all of us.
"Bella what's wrong?" I asked as wiped away her tears.
"Thank you! This is the best day ever!" Bella said and she hugged me. I hugged her back and she was so warm under my cold arms. We spent a lot of time deciding where the stuff would go. By the time we finished, the room was the best in the house.
"Its only 11:00." Emmett said.
"I should probably clean the house… Charlie would like coming home to a clean house." Bella said and she looked very sad as she said that.
"I'll help you." I said and Bella smiled.
"Me too." Alice said and before long the whole family was helping out and we were done within 30 minutes.
"Thank you so much!" Bella said and truly we were just glad to see her so happy.
"We should go to Forks cemetery before the rain starts." Alice said and that got all our attention.
"You're right Alice." Bella said and we all got into the Jeep. It was around 5 minutes before we arrived and we slowly walked around all the tombstones.
"Which one belongs to your mother?" Esme asked.
"It's just over here… mom wanted a tomb like the Egyptian. It's big so, it needs a lot of space…" she explained and under a tree was a black marble tomb-stone with white writing that said.
Renee Marie Swan
1958-1993
Loved wife and mother
Died with a dream to see the world and a city full of sun…
"What does the last sentence mean?" Emmett asked his usually happy voice thick with sorrow.
"Exactly what it says… my mother wanted to travel the world. She hated Forks because she wanted the sun. Now she's forced to be here for the rest of eternity. She was going to divorce Charlie before she found out she was pregnant. When she did find out about me she stayed with Charlie and tried to make it work…" Bella explained, a tear slowly coming down her cheek.
"What's the tomb made out of?" Carlisle asked trying to stay on subject but with less stress in the air.
"All sides of the tomb are marble. It's pretty big as you can see but, Charlie wanted to let the sun shine on her face a little longer so the top part is made out of wood so that Charlie could cut a small hole and let the sun in. After awhile he had to close it 'cause the rain was coming but, he seemed happier knowing the sun shined on her face a little longer…"
"Was it hard coming over here?" Alice asked not knowing what it's like to leave someone you love.
"I never knew her but in a way I don't think I ever did…" A light rain started but it was only spitting. More tears came down from her cheeks and I did the only thing I could think of. I hugged her. She seemed kind of shocked at first but, then hugged me back and we just stayed like that as the rest of the family left. After one minute the rain started to pour and I listened to Bella's stomach growl. I pulled out an umbrella. If you live in forks you know best to keep one with you at all times,
"You want to get something to eat?" Bella just nodded and I kept her close to me so none of us could get wet. We walked out of the cemetery and I noticed the ground sink a little as we left the tomb but paid it no mind. My Volvo was parked there as I pulled Bella in with me, I found a note on my rear view mirror. I pulled it off and read it.
Thought you might want your car.
Alice…
"Where are you taking me?" Bella asked and I smiled at her.
"It's a surprise."
B.P.O.V
I hate surprises… I thought as I watched Edward drive. I didn't dare look at what speed we were going but, it was very uncomfortable to know he was barely looking at the road. Instead he was looking at me…
"So what was this about… me in a cape thing?" Edward asked to lighten the mood.
"Dose it matter?" I blushed and looked at my hands.
"Well Alice is probably going to force me into one and the whole family will never let me live it down so…"
"I'm so sorry about that! It was the first thing that popped into my mind and the dream…" I covered my mouth with my hands the second I said that but Edward caught every word.
"You dreamed about me?" And that gave Edward a crooked smile that was so nice I couldn't help but smile back.
"Maybe…maybe not. Maybe I saw you in a cape in my dream. Maybe I saw another guy in a cape and thought it would look nice on you." I was trying to confuse him but we both knew the truth.
"So tell me… What did this other guy do in your dream?"
"He saved my life…and then he took me to the most beautiful place ever." I said leaving out the kiss.
"Really...Why was he wearing the cape?" Edward asked.
"For two reasons actually." I said.
"And what were those two reasons?" Edward asked with a smile playing on his lips.
"The first was because it showed how heroic he was and the second was because he looked good in it." I said.
"And tell me how he saved your life…"
"Well a zombie wanted to kill me… she didn't like me very much. So she tried to kill me."
"In that case you should tell me who he is so I could thank him."
"I already did…" I said and thought about the thank you I said to him this morning.
"We're here." Edward said and I looked at a fancy restaurant. We fit right in wearing fancy clothes.
"What can I do for you?" A waitress said with beach blond hair and a curvy body. She seemed to only be talking to Edward but he paid no mind to her.
"A table for 2 please…" And then he leaned in so that his lips were close to hers.
"Somewhere private please." Edward whispered in such a seductive voice, it made me shiver.
"Right this way." She whispered back a little dazzled. She led us up the stairs and to a balcony table where we had a nice view of the La Push cliffs. The rain had lightened up to a sprinkle. There was a big umbrella covering our table.
"I'll be back soon to take your orders…" She said and walked off leaving us alone. I walked to our table and Edward pulled my chair out for me.
"Thank you." I said and sat down. I put the menu in front of my face to hide the blush. I scanned the menu and found something I liked.
"So… what's the reason for all this?" I asked but Edward just stared his eyes never leaving me as he replied.
"Need there be an occasion for a man to take a beautiful lady to eat?" Edward asked making me blush again.
"I suppose not…Edward." This was it. I needed to tell him about Charlie. He's been so nice to me and I shouldn't keep a secret from someone who trusts me with his own. He could have killed me when he knew what I knew about him but he didn't. Now he and his family do all this.
"Yes Bella. " He asked his eyes boring into mine.
"May I take your order?" The same girl came back.
"Yes… can I have a steak with mashed potato, an Ice-tea and for desert a chocolate moose?" I asked and the lady nodded looking at Edward.
"I'll have the same." Edward said never taking his eyes off of me and I noticed the waitress was jealous.
"Right away." She said and left.
"Now… you wanted to tell me something?" Edward asked.
"I-I just wanted… to say… thank you."
Damn! Where did my courage go?
"It's my pleasure Bella." Edward said.
"Hey Edward. How old are you?" I asked and Edward's face lost whatever colour it had left.
"17" He said.
"I mean how long have you been 17?" Edward sighed and broke the gaze he had and began looking at his hands.
"I was born in the year 1901…" He said and then finally looked back up at me. I nodded and was happy that he could trust me. I mentally slapped myself for not being able to tell him.
"Here's your food." The waitress said and put our food own.
That was fast… I wonder if she told the cook to make our order first… She left and I ate in silence as Edward picked at his food. Sometimes he would throw parts of it over the balcony into the garden below but, mostly he watched me eat.
"Is it good?" Edward asked.
"You should try it yourself or ask the plants." That made us laugh and the conversations seemed to flow after that and soon we walked out of the restaurant. It was almost twilight.
"I want to show you something…" Edward whispered taking my hand and leading me into the forest.
"Ummm…girl follows strange man into the forest… I think I've seen this movie." I said and chuckled.
"Oh really, Then what happened next?" Edward asked and covered my eyes.
"Hmm… You kidnap me?" I answer.
"I think I already did that… no that's not it. Get on my back." Edward said and put a blind fold on me.
"What?" I said shocked.
"Just do it or were going to be late." Edward said and helped me on his back. I felt the ground disappear from my feet and then next thing I new I was sitting on something hard and round.
"Open your eyes." Edward whispered and I looked at the most amazing thing in my life.
The night was so beautiful, so amazing. We were sitting on the top of a tree branch and we saw the tops of trees and at the end of the forest where the sun was setting. Then when you looked a little up you saw the light of stars and a moon.
"Oh Edward! It's beautiful!" I said and was memorizing the sight in front of me.
"I've seen a lot of things before but only one thing can beat a big open Twilight."
"And what's that." I said my voice a whisper. I tuned to look at him and found our faces inches apart.
"You." He said and he slowly moved his lips to mine. They were cold and hard but strangely soft and warm at the same time as they sent an electric current rushing through my veins. It was better then the dream for this kiss had an aura of reality. I put more passion into the kiss and put my hands on his chest as he put his hand on my cheek. The passion made my heart beat so fast I thought it would come out of my chest. I moved my hands around his neck and licked his bottom lip asking for an entrance. Edward froze under me and all too soon he slowly pulled apart.
He seemed happy he could control himself but sad that he couldn't go as for as I wanted. I understood that it was dangerous so I decided not to push him. I leaned into him and put my head on his shoulder as we watched the rest of the sunset.
Okay! And that's a chapter! At first I wanted to name the chapter 'The kiss' but if I did that it would have given away the surprise. Pleas give a big thank you to my new beta for taking her precious time on this fanfic.
Beta Note: It was very good!! claps. There were many minor mistakes, I took care of those. You also had grammatical errors.
You kind of need to add more detail to the people. To let the readers know who they are. For instance, instead of saying Edward said. You could add an emotion to that. During the kiss, you added a lot of detail. It actually made an image in my mind. This is what you should do, add more detail to it. Other than that, everything was good. I loved the story. I also left a few notes in the story.
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