Jealousy Makes You Do Mistakes
SasuHinaIta / ItaHinaSasu
Hey guys ! Thank you for your lovely reviews except for one person who left me a negative and disgusting one. That person wrote:
":Firstly, you don't "do" mistakes, you "make" mistakes! How dare you demand
reviews when you have even done the minimum to make your story
reader-friendly! Both chapters are highlighted in BOLD print, even an idiot
knows that bold print on a computer (or any other electronic device) screen
for a considerable amount of text is very ** readers eyes. Also, considering
the high level of grammar mistakes in the title and summary, you have probably
turned away a lot of potential readers. Don't you think that's a bit arrogant
of you to EXPECT people to read and review low quality work? Get your act and
your story together before you go and demand reviews, it's not like you have
some First-Class-Pulitzer-Winning product going on here!"
I just want to let know to that reader that if you ever read this; I hope you go back to your tiny little corner. I recognize that I have a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes. Never said the opposite. But YOU should learn to READ. Cause if you knew how to read; you would've realized that in the first chapter I wrote that I am NOT FORCING YOU TO READ MY STORY and NO HATERS, FLAMING or OTHER CRAP. Now go to your pathetic world of haters and leave me alone. GET IT ? My goal here isn't to win some "First-Class-Pulitzer-Winning" product. My goal is to write for those who enjoy my stories. I don't force people to leave me reviews. They review in their own free-will. You are the only one who didn't understand that posting things on this website is for pleasure. I also don't put my text in boldprint so it attracts people. I do it so it makes it easier to read. In my computer we can't read clearly if it isn't in boldprint. No one has ever come to me to complain about it. Low lifes like you make me sad. Don't you have something else to do than acting like a total immature over a story ? One last little thing. We don't say: "Also, considering
the high level of grammar mistakes". We say: Considering the low-level of grammar.
I also don't really care if I turned away potential readers. Whoever reads my stories and enjoy them is enough for me.
Okay readers ! To our story !
Last chapter:
- But when I kissed her; she didn't reject me.
The older Uchiha got pissed. How dare he kiss HIS HIME ?!
He maintained self-control for Hinata's sake.
- If it wasn't for her; you would be in the hospital right now. But oh my, I have something more important to do than wasting my time talking to an immature brat. You seriously need to go fix your brain Sasuke.
- My brain works perfectly fine.
- Indeed. It works so perfectly fine that you pushed away the only person you ever had ( Hinata obviously ) besides mom and dad.
- That's the past.
- But it's still your brain foolish little brother. he replied before leaving
Sasuke was stunned. Maybe he had made a big mistake; but he surely won't let that happen ever again. He won't let her go and give up on her.
"-Oh no. Not this time brother..."
With Itachi and Hinata...
The Uchiha turned on the engine of the car, and drove away from the school.
The girl stayed quiet during the trip; not wanting to ask what happened after she left. Was probably a family talk or something.
After an hour and a half of driving; the landscape began to change. Beside the road were standing pine trees and very tall trees that had a long red-ish trunk covered by layers of snow with snowflakes falling off the sky at a slow pace.
Hinata pressed her nose against the car's front window. Observing carefully her surroundings and nature.
The man next to her chuckled at her childish face expression. It was cute tough.
"- It's beautiful... By the way, where are we ? asked the Hyuuga heir
- In the outsides of Konoha.
Her mouth formed and "o"
- Could we come out here more often ? If that doesn't bother you.
He smiled warmly at her.
- Of course we can. Anything for you my hime.
She blushed at the word "hime"
- So, um... Where are we going exactly ?
- To a cabin that belonged to my grandparents. It's in a forest near a lake.
- Woah ! Can't wait !
- Yeah, we're almost there."
They finally pulled over to their destination. The so-called "cabin" was more like... bigger than an average house but smaller than a mansion made of wood.
The girl gasped as she saw it. She surely was rich just like the Uchihas; but she had never seen a gorgeous place like this one. The buildings she always would go to were modern which at the end got boring. But this one was simple, yet stunning with its own charm in the middle of a forest. Adding to the beauty of its structure and surroundings, candles and torches were lit up in the entrance alley that made the atmosphere even more romantic.
They walked through the "cabin's" door to end up in the entrance hall. It contained a massive chimney with a toasty warm fire in it. The shadow of the bursting warm colored flames danced around the room.
Next to the chimney was a gigantic old library composed of classic books, poetry books, and plays. The floor was carpeted of a welcoming bright red and the air was filled of pine-wood scent. Last but not least; the walls had portraits of the Uchiha clan relatives hanging on it.
Hinata felt a chill go down of her spine. These portraits were damn creepy.
She reached out for Itachi's hand; interwining her delicate long fingers with his.
The man raised and eyebrow with a questioning look. Seeing that she didn't say anything; his eyes traveled to where she was looking at and spotted what frightened her so much.
He chuckled and led her to the dinning room.
On a loooooong table was sitting their dinner that was waiting for them.
It was displayed of a traditional Japanese dinner named Kaiseki.
It consisted of:
"shiizakana" (appetizers served with Japanese sake)
"mukouzuke" (sashimi - slices of raw fish)
"kuchitori" (a small side dish)
"suimono" (a soup)
"nimono" (simmered vegetables)
"aemono" (food dressed with sauce)
"kounomono" (Japanese pickles)
"hassun" (food from the mountains and the sea)
"sunomono" (food marinated in vinegar)
"yakimono" (grilled fish)
"mushimono" (steamed food)
"nabemono" (Japanese hot-pot)
rice
miso soup
Hinata's eyes widened.
"- Wow. T-This is a lot ! Did you prepare it yourself ?
The Uchiha nodded with pride. He was glad that she liked it.
- B-but it must have taken you a long time. Why would you waste your time one me?
He smiled.
- I never waste my time when it comes to you. This is nothing compared to what you are.
- I-I would like to make it up to you...
His smile widened even more.
- If you insist... You could make it up to me by... How about a kiss ?
She blushed; becoming beat red.
- I-I...
His lips pressed against hers very delicately.
The kiss was sweet and gentle; but somehow it didn't feel right. Something was missing. But what could it be?
How come doesn't it feel right when this was something she always wished for ? It was her dream to be with him. Right ?
- Err hem ! a voice interrupted them
A disgusted look appeared on Itachi's face as he saw the person that was standing in front of them.
But when it comes to Hinata; she was shocked.
DUN DUN DUN ! Who do you think our "mystery person" is ?! How will things turn out in our ItaHina date ? Review ! ( If you like my fanfic or have suggestions. Again NO HATING,FLAMING OR RAGING. If you want to point out a mistake I made, please do so; but don't rage and throw it out all to my face like an animal ).
Votes for now...
Team SasuHina: 7
Team ItaHina: 4
GUESS SASUHINA IS AHEAD !
Thank You for reading !
~~~ Ja Ne ! ~~~