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VFSNAKE; My lemons suck...tried once on my first story and you won't see any here. I probably try one in Restored Legacy with Harry...but here not so much
Naruhina; Well I can't think of many man hating girls with ice powers...and its perhaps one of the most simple yet original jutsu I've made. Have you ever seen that sort of jutsu outside my writing, or the variations to 1000 years of death?
GodZ; You could say that
Harliquin; Why thank you, I like throwing in twists like that once in a while
Hektols; Quite so
Elemental Master; I do admit that my stories aren't as meaty as stories like Harem War, Broken Bow or New Chance. However, that is a price of their quicker updating.
The difficulties of creating an effective Harem Story...at least to me
The harem genre, a genre that appears sporadically in (Most often in Naruto actually, though followed far behind by Harry Potter and Bleach). The idea of a man having multiple girlfriends, or a girl with multiple boyfriends (A genre I don't read, as it would be riddled with Slash as much as this one's genre is filled with fem slash) is a difficult story to create while being realistic...to some extent. First you need to decide what sort of guy you want
Do you want a guy who seeks out a harem? Or the guy who ends up with one? I at least prefer option two...could be because my first harem genre was Rosario Vampire...
Anyway, you really should explain why that would happen? It should be legal, but also give a reason? Characters just don't share their boyfriends like that for no reason. For example
Here you have the Coven bond thing (A/N, I just like using Coven instead of Clan...don't know why?) while in Mysterious Power, the harem really stared with two characters who agreed to share him because of their horrific pasts and later bolstered with the CRA (See Haku and Fu)
You have soul bonds in a lot of Harry Potter Stories (And mine)
If I ever do the Bleach Harem...the main block is how I'd make it. Might involve a cave prophecy or something
In theory, a Percy Jackson Harem could easily be created with the aide of the Goddess of Love...but then again, you can't get Aphrodite/Venus to do everything for you
However, particularly as these attributes are shared, one must find a way to be different. Use the odd girl that few do, bond them a different way...its all up to you
Begin
Top Floor; Hinata's POV
To those who braved the the deadly forest, and traversed up the 13 floors of the tower, besting your most feared memories, while fighting the guy with the flaming circles, the thunder kunai bitch, the ice shield wierdo and the pink haired reaper...or something like that, you could find a quite nice viewpoint up top the tower.
Though you needed quarters for the binoculars.
Hinata had been stationed up top in the rafters to keep a look out for not only Naruto's progress, but also any approaching attacks, which was quite the legitimate concern as it was shown to be.
She would have stayed on this, however, if she didn't have to dodge the giant golden colored...thing that impacted into the ground before her...as a guy with six arms climbed into the stand.
"Well well, looky here, a secret character" he spoke with a smirk "Quite worth the effort to get here. Say toots, what about..." Hinata hissed like a really big snake, or a velociraptor. He had a sweat drop.
"Okay...no date then" he spat a spider web from his mouth straight at Hinata, who was trapped in the silky threads.
"I don't have a bondage fetish" he told Hinata "Nor am I really a rapist. Anyways, if you come with me quietly, I will convince Orochimaru-Sama to let you live at least" she glared at him, as a burst of chakra was blasted from her body, breaking the webbing.
Hinata glared at the freak with multiple arms.
"I will not submit to anyone allied with that snake" she growled. He appeared amused.
"So, a Hyuga. This will be an interesting boss battle, much more interesting then the mere common enemies I had to face getting here. Perhaps I will even level up!" he formed two of those golden wads again...with his sweat.
"SPIDER STICKY GOLD BOOMERANGS!" he sent the projectiles spinning at Hinata, who blocked them with two of her strong gentle fist attacks. She charged forwards, as Kidomaru dodged.
Hinata smashed the wall open, as she jumped down and down the building.
"Well well, you want a free formed battle then, well Kidomaru's got ya!" he jumped down after her, as he spat out spider webs down to nab Hinata.
Hinata dodged, the spider webbing hitting the walls of the tower and sticking there, as she jumped into the trees, where Kidomaru followed her.
He stopped as he lost sight of her.
"Where are you..." he closed his eyes...as Hinata appeared out of the shadows around him...
"Gotcha" he had a golden dagger thing, and stabbed Hinata. She coughed blood as she staggered backwards.
"What..." she gripped her injury...as six fists impacted into her, knocking her into the tree on the opposite side. Kidomaru smirked.
"I like to plan before I fight bosses, and Orochimaru-sama was quick to point out your shadow travel" he grinned "Lets just say, I'm not going to be surprised by any tricks of yours, so don't bother" Hinata grimaced, this could be bad.
Unknown to her, he had placed a spider on her early on in the match, and the little creature was helping track her, even when she shadow traveled.
She had to be careful now, she no longer had that sort of surprise.
Hinata jumped across the trees, straight at Kidomaru, her fist glowing for Gamma Gentle Fist. Kidomaru dodged the attack as the tree was cut in half...as Hinata poofed.
"Damn trick!" the real Hinata reappeared behind him with Gamma fist, which he grabbed with two of his hands.
"What!"
"REVERSE ELBOW!" with the upper pairs he elbowed her in the head, causing her to stumble back as he spat a web of sticky threads at her, binding to to the ground, as he approached her, a golden knife thing again in hand.
"Your tricks are interesting" he mused "However, I know your battle style, your code. Because I know all the codes, you are nothing but a mere nuisance" he prepared to stab...as a blast of air hit him straight on.
Hinata growled "GENTLE FIST; AIR PALM!" a fist of air struck into Kidomaru once again, sending him stumbling backwards. He smirked as black marks began covering him.
"So, it appears I'm in need of a power up" he commented as he began forming hand seals for the summoning jutsu...
"AIR PALM!" He dodged another air attack...only to find two Hinata's behind him in addition to the original.
"TWO!" each one of the clones struck Kidomaru...as he used each of his pair of arms to block their attacks.
"Humph...COUNTER!" golden stuff began forming from his arms, impaling the clones and injuring Hinata's hand. She jumped back, as blood dripped off her hands.
"Ha, not exactly able to fight if your gentle fists are all scratched up" he smirked "THIS GAME IS MINE!" he formed pairs of blades from each golden material and flew at Hinata ready to slice and dice her...
As Hinata put her bloodied hands to good use.
"SUMMONING JUTSU!" a poof of smoke formed as Kidomaru's attack was repulsed, by the scales of a large, blueish snake (A/N, the one Anko used in the Sea arc with Isaribi).
"No way..." Kidomaru said in amazement..."This is big" he discreetly made a few hand signs, summoning a small messenger spider to send to Orochimaru.
Hinata frowned. Anko only had guessed that as their coven got larger, with more chakra across it, some of their inherent abilities might be shared. She had only suggested it might include the summoning contract.
"Well then...SUMMONING JUTSU; RISE KYODAIGUMO!" another giant poof of smoke rose as a giant spider was mounted by Kidomaru.
The two summons flew at one another, the venomous spider and snake attempting to do the other in with bites as Kidomaru attacked Hinata.
He spat a spider web at Hinata, who jumped down the scale covered back of the snake to avoid it, as Kidomaru formed a club of golden material. He slammed down on the spot Hinata was standing on, denting the snake's scales but missing Hinata.
She round house kicked him, which he blocked with two of his right hands.
"NOW THEN...!" Hinata screamed as his golden stuff sharpened into her leg, causing a drizzle of blood to form as Hinata was now injured heavily in four places; her lower chest, her hands and her foot.
"AIR SOLE!" Kidomaru was blasted back as Hinata sent a air palm, through her foot. It also came with a flying shoe, so now she was down that too.
"Not bad, you may be a worthy opponent yet" he smirked as he was covered in more marks and form began changing, as his head band fell off...
Hinata was sick...his hair had turned gray, his skin a reddish brown, horns, spiked arms and a third eye...
"HOWEVER, YOU MAY STILL BE TRASH!" he formed a giant bow out of that gold stuff as he formed a golden arrow from it to.
He fired the arrow downwards at Hinata, who swiped her foot.
"AIR SLICE SOLE!" a air slice flew and struck the arrow in mid flight, the two attacks taking the other out.
Hinata was actually surprised that would work.
He fired more arrows, as Hinata blocked more of them with air slice soles. The snake was starting to get annoyed of the explosions by now...
Kidomaru spat a net web at Hinata now, who rolled out the way. However, her movements were now unsteady, the injuries were starting to get at her.
It was an opening for him, as he dropped his bow.
She was nothing but long range now, so might as well get in close. Golden substance began to coat each of his fists like gloves, spiked at the end for that extra bit of attack power.
"SIX SLICES, ONE!" Hinata dodged the first lunge
"TWO!"
"THREE" Hinata continued to use her natural flexibility and grace to dodge the attacks, despite her injuries that hampered them.
"FOUR!"
"FIVE!" Hinata was home safe...
"SIX!" She had a surprised expression on her face as all six of his hands, covered in golden material, were shoved into her stomach.
"And that's all folks" he grinned, as Hinata and the snake poofed, into a log covered in exploding tags.
"SUBSTITUTION!" he yelped, as he tried to remove his hands that were imbedded into the log...
BOOM
The spider and spider guy exploded, as a battered Hinata watched from a tree. She smiled weakly.
"I win" she collapsed to the ground, crushing the tracking spider that Kidomaru had put on her.
Orig Moves
Air Sole
Kekkei Genkai (B)
Description; The Air palm sent through your foot, it often comes with a shoe
AIR SLICE SOLE!
Kekkei Genkai (A)
Description; Air Sole attack with a wider attack range and faster