Hello my fellow readers again. It's come to my view that a lot of people think Kiroki's a Mary-Sue.
Big flippin Deal.
Who really cares, least I have a plot. *kinda*
But ya know some people think it's so horrible that a character is Mary-Sue. TO me a character is a character and nothing more. SO there's a lot of great qualities about the character and so there's some lame emo story behind them. All the real MAIN characters from the original story were like that usually. What's horrible about the Fanfiction writer bringing in a NEW character and giving he or she something like that.
I'm not sayin that I'm mad at yall for thinkin my character's mary-sue. I'm just statin my opinion about mary-sues in general. This is only my belief. I don't judge people that have mary-sues.
I will admit sometimes it gets a bit outta hand with all these qualities. But some ARE unintentional. And I've seen some really GREAT stories get discontinued or deleted or rewritten because people continuously flame the writer for having a slight mary sue. *shout out to KaylandElric. Lunar Alchemist will forever rock and I hate that she discontinued it. But Lunar Alchemist Brotherhood is just as or even better.*
To me mary-sues are just another character in a story and it won't bug me if you KINDLY tell me your opinion. I only flame back if you flame first.
Hope you read all this,
SongbirdAlchemist.
Now for my disclaimer
I OWN NOT FMA ONLY MY OCS AND THE PLOT SORTA!
Previously on Daughter of Ed
"Then you'll fit in Kiroki's group over there." She said shoving him toward her group.
"Wait a second, Kiki?" he asked looking at her.
"Adam? What are you doing here?"
"I've been moving in with my sister over the past few weeks. I've been having problems with my parents so she's letting me move in with her. I just got here a little while ago. She had me transferred here a few days back so… here I am."
"Who's your sister?"
"Her names Emily Johnson, she's a resident doctor at Central General Hospital."
"Doc Em is your sister?" she asked.
"Well yeah. But one question why did the teacher say I would fit in your group?"
"Remember how I told you that I had gotten into a recent breakup?"
"Yeah and."
"He was our groups base player and now he's with the snide bitch over there." She said with slight venom.
"Oh. Right. I forgot that that was your reason for not takin up my offer."
"Adam…"
"The offer still stands, you know."
"Adam…"
"Just you me, dinner, a movie…"
"Adam…"
"Yes?"
"I'll answer you after we record, kay." She said heading back to the booths. After everyone was acquainted with Adam, and he was told what to do they started to contemplate what song to do.
"SO… what song should we do, Kiki?" Asked Seth.
"Why do you always pin it on me?"
"Because you're a composer?"
"Huh…well I was thinkin about doin a cover of "Shattered" instead cause I don't have anything prepared really." She explained.
"You mean that Trading Yesterday song?" Taylor asked.
"Yeah, it's really easy to play and all so…"
"Sounds fine to me." Said Adam, "I mean I've heard it before and I know how to do it."
"Shattered it is." Said Seth.
Yesterday I died, tomorrow's bleeding
Fall into your sunlight
The future's open wide, beyond believing
To know why, hope dies
Losing what was found, a world so hollow
Suspended in a compromise
The silence of this sound, is soon to follow
Somehow, sundown
And finding answers
Is forgetting all of the questions we called home
Passing the graves of the unknown
As reason clouds my eyes, with splendor fading
Illusions of the sunlight
And a reflection of a lie, will keep me waiting
With love gone, for so long
And this day's ending
Is the proof of time killing, all the faith I know
Knowing that faith, is all I hold
And I've lost who I am, and I can't understand
Why my heart is so broken, rejecting your love, without, love gone wrong,
lifeless words carry on
But I know, all I know, is that the end's beginning
Who I am from the start, take me home to my heart
Let me go and I will run, I will not be silent
All this time spent in vain, wasted years, wasted gain
All is lost, hope remains, and this war's not over
There's a light, there's a sun, taking all shattered ones
To the place we belong, and his love will conquer
And I've lost who I am, and I can't understand
Why my heart is so broken, rejecting your love, without, love gone wrong,
lifeless words carry on
But I know, all I know, is that the end's beginning
Who I am from the start, take me home to my heart
Let me go and I will run, I will not be silent
All this time spent in vain, wasted years, wasted gain
All is lost, hope remains, and this war's not over
There's a light, there's a sun, taking all shattered ones
To the place we belong, and his love will conquer all
(his love will conquer all)
Yesterday I died, tomorrow's bleeding
Fall into your sunlight
"Okay… now what?" started Taylor.
"Well, Kiroki could tell me her answer to my offer." Adam started.
"Right now?" Kiroki asked.
"You said after we recorded."
"What offer?" Questioned Anne.
"I asked her out to dinner and a movie and I'm still waiting on her answer." He smirked looking toward her.
"Oooh Kiki, you've already got them lining up don't you?" Anne chuckled.
"You sure bounce back fast." smiled Cassy.
"Not really much to bounce from when you find out which whore he's taken." She said with slight venom.
"Yes or No Kiroki?" Adam asked impatiently.
"…(huffs) Fine! Pick me up Friday, 8:00 don't be late. Where's dinner gonna be at?" she huffed.
"It's a surprise, but dress nicely. That's my birthday present to you." He smiled.
AN: Incase I u were confused the date for them is February 2nd and it is a Wends day. Thursday will be the 3rd and Kiroki and Edward's birthday. END AN
"Kiroki you didn't tell your birthday was soon! When is it?" Anne asked.
"It's tomorrow." Cassy said eyeballing at her cousin.
"Why I didn't tell yall is because it's noneya business." She said in a muttered voice.
"Trisha Elizabeth Kiroki Elric. Why didn't you tell us!" Anne said in a yelling voice.
"Because you'd get all crazy and want to do stuff and have a party. Which I don't need one. I don't need presents and I don't want to make a big deal about my birthday. Kay. So drop it. Yes Adam I will go out with you on Friday though. But it's not you present to me. It's just a date." She said.
"Alright, whatever." He said, "But dress nice regardless."
*Later that day at Cassy's house*
"Dad! Your Dinner's in the oven!" Called Cassy from the living room after hearing the door open and close shut followed by footsteps.
"Not dad, Mom." Raina said coming into the living room.
"What do you want?" she spat.
"Raina, I know you hate me-"
"I don't hate you. That's against my beliefs. I just have a burning loathing passion for you."
"Okay then, but look. I don't want you to have that passion for me anymore. I just want everything back to the way it used to be."
"Well it's kinda hard to go back in time isn't it?"
"Look, I know your mad at me for walking out and leaving you behind."
"No you abandoned me and dad and then stole all my siblings."
"*mutters* you have your sayings I have mine. *normal voice* Whatever you say, but look what matters now is that I'm back now! And I plan to stay, if your Dad will have me back. I want to be back with your father because I have forgiven him. He's forgiven me and I can only hope you'll forgive me. "
"You really mean it?" Cassidy asked quietly.
"More than anything in the whole world."
"Then if dad can forgive you…I might be able to eventually. For now though you still under my radar."
"Just the thought that you aren't cursing at me anymore makes me glad." Raina smiled at her daughter.
*Havoc enters the scence.*
"Well what have we here?" Havoc asked the tow girls.
"Just another daughter chat is all, Jean."
"Yep that's all. Dinner's in the stove if you want some. But is it alright if I head over to Anne's house for a while?" Cassidy asked. *Anne lives just 3 houses down*
"Go for it." He smiled as he watched his daughter exit the scene.
*At Anne's House*
" Okay so we all know that Marissa did something to Aaron, Right?" Cassy started looking over her group, which included herself, Anne, Seth, and Taylor.
"Right." They said in unison.
"Okay, judging by the way Aaron is acting, I say he's under some influence that's making act like he loves Marisa. Our job is to sneak in and see what's really going on inside of Marissa's scheme."
"Yeah but how would we get to do that?" Taylor asked, speaking up over Cassy.
"Simple, there's a dance next Friday, along with that, most military officers will be at the State dinner. Marissa's house will be empty and that's the perfect time to strike and check out her house." Cassy explained strategically.
"Okay, but what about Kiroki?" Seth asked.
"Kiroki is a military officer and will be at the dinner all night and she's not going to know about any of this. Absolutely no word about this to her period. Are we clear?" she asked, clicking her tongue.
"Yes Ma'am."
"On another note, tomorrow is Kiroki's 16th birthday. Our job is to give her the BEST sweet 16, but don't forget about her dad either. He's turning… 37 I think…" Cassy said changing subjects.
"But she said she didn't want a party." Seth countered.
"Which is code for I really want a big sweet birthday bash, duh." Anne said with a valleygirl voice.
"Okay but how are we gonna give her the greatest party ever?" Taylor asked.
"Like all the great party planners… we wing it." Cassy smirked.
*Next Day*
Kiroki woke happily the next morning. After getting ready and dressing in a dark read sleeveless hoody top and black baggy skater jeans, she unbraided her hair and actually flat ironed it out. She put a black and red beanie on her head and then slipped on a pair of black and red Vans.
She tumbled down the stairs and into the living room and went over to her dad.
"Happy Birthday, Dad!" said Kiroki with a cheer. She handed him a wrapped up box and kissed his cheek before going to the kitchen to start breakfast.
"Wait, Sister, stay outta the kitchen!" Eli called from in the kitchen. He came out and blocked the doorway.
"Why?" she asked.
"You don't have to work on your birthday, let me do breakfast this morning." He said nervously.
She gave him a quick suspicious look and said,
"Your hiding something, I know. And I WILL find out." She said before turning and going back to the living room.
"Eli kick you out too?" Ed asked his daughter.
"Yeah, and I have a feeling what the boys are up to." She said.
"Yeah, its kinda obvious what they're doing, isn't it?" asked Edward.
"Yep, now open your present." She smiled. Looking at the gift that still was in his hands.
"I was just about to," he said before tearing the wrappings off. He tore into the paper box quickly and pulled out a T-Shirt. It was black and had on it in red the Flamel symbol like the one on his old red coat. Beneath it in red letters it said, Team Edward… ELRIC, Cause REAL men DON'T Sparkle.
"Was this Custom?" He asked, gaping slightly at the picture.
"Actually, No. I found it at No Topic (1). Did you know you have your own fanbase that rival's the Edward Calan (2) fanbase. Ya know he's the main character in that series called um… Moonlight or something. But basically it's a sappy supernatural romance that has sparkling "Vampires" in it." (3) she said using air quotes.
"I have a fanbase?"
"Well your only the most popular Alchemist in the country. And you don't look half bad to be 37." Kiroki smiled.
"Really?"
"Yes dad, really there's about a gazillion girls in school that are still swooning over you. Shoot even some teachers swoon at you and Uncle Al."
"Really?"
"Yep, and some of the males are attracted to mom to ya know."
"Give me the name and I will MURDER them." He said seriously.
"Oh Dad, I'm kidding." She laughed.
"You better be." He said seriously.
"Don't worry I am." She smiled.
"Alright, well I'd give you your present…but, it's not ready yet."
"Don't tell me you MADE me a present."
"What's so bad about me giving home-made gifts?" he asked.
"Member when we lived in Rizembool and you "Made" me that club house? Or how you "Made" that tire swing. Or how-"
"Okay I get it! I don't have good mechanics like your mother! But NO I did now MAKE you a gift. It has to come in first."
"Is it a Camaro?"
"I can't tell you.
"A Mustang?"
"I won't break," he willed himself in his head.
"a Les Paul?"
'You can do it Ed'
"An SG? A Trans-Am? An original Volkswagen Van?"
"I can't tell you." He said sternly.
"An El Camino?"
HONK HONK
"Get going or you'll miss your ride." He said shoving her out the door.
"FINE FINE I'm going!" She called before jumping into Anne's convertible and speeding off to school with her friends.
Oh how little she knew about what was to take place that day.
END OF Chapter
No topic is like Amestris Hot topic
Edward Calan is the Amestris equivalent of Edward Cullen
Moonlight would be the Amestris Twilight
Anyways…
Okay. You're lucky cause today I'm givin you this update and a new fic. *One that wasn't voted on. It's a Naruto Fic which is why it wasn't in the poll* So to all you SasuSaku fans go out and read the prologue to an oncoming story!
Once again I own nothing, save the OCS and the plot kinda.
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