Hey guys I know that some of you dont like my story, its like on the german site I posted this story before, but let me tell ya sth: I dont care if ure mean to me or my story cause im writin it for fun. You can give me tips and adviceses what to do better but you dont need to hate it cause i will ignore it
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With greetins Franzi
Our commander sat on a majestic throne of black obsidian and the throne was with black emeralds. On his shoulder sat a raven, who screamed: "Girl, Girl"
"What was that!?" the commander shouted at us and I felt bad. "Im sorry", I said and I felt bad, because I didn't want to break the rules. Back in Winterfell I was the naughty, little girl but here I wanted to be a true bother. Whatever.
Jon and I had to clean the castle with our toothbrushes. Damn, that was hard work. All of the other brothers were at a cool party, but we had to work. We could hear the loud music and we wanted to snack the snacks.
When we sat in our tower we did nothing. Suddenly I heard how someone knocked at the big door of the wall and a brother opened it. I was curious, because we didn't think we would have guests. Was it Robb? Or Arya? But it wasn't Robb or Arya. It was a white Walker!
"Oh no!", Jon said. Suddenly the dead body of the man I killed today stood up. I drew my dagger and went to JonJon so I could protect him. Jon looked at me with big eyes.
"We have to fight!" I screamed at Jon and he nodded, together we looked the death in the eye. We stand there, back on back and the two corpses attacked us.
"Now to you!", I screamed at the white walker, who stepped back affrightedly.
I ran at him, with quick, light steps and dodged an attack. His blade was cold, but not as ice cold as my eyes. I attacked him, but he dodged too. Suddenly a new song came up and the walker listened to it. I threw my dagger in his eye and killed him instantly. He exploded and Jon killed the other man and we gave us a high five. "We did it!", we shouted.
Later we went to the commander and told him our story. He was very impressed.
"WOW!", he said. "You saved our lives. Sorry I was so evil, but this isn't good! White Walkers should be extinct; I killed the last one myself." He showed us his hand, some of the fingers were missing.
"We have to tell them in King's landing, that the white walkers are here again and they have to send us men!" We nodded and the commander asked us if we wanted to go there.
He would give us our own towers and servants, when we were back. The guy who tried to kill me was my servant now and he had to clean the castle with his toothbrush.
Jon and I gave us our hands and together we went to King's Landing, while Alistar Dorne looked at us angrily. What was his plan?