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After much thought, Maka chooses a new mission to engage on, though she seems to be so lost in thought, and Soul can't help but notice this. On the way to their objective's location, the public park, Maka and Soul are almost awkward towards each other. Searching for the next kishin egg Soul will consume, they finally come across it in a dark alley. How will the battle turn out?
Chapter 2: Getting Closer!
With her eyes secured on a single target, Maka stood in an advanced fighting stance. Her grip around Soul loosening and tightening. A stiff breeze passed by, the night sky was cloudless. A subtle mist lay above the head of Soul's meister.
She stepped forward, slowly approaching the mouth of the alley. Shoulders relaxed and balance steady, Maka closed her eyes and took in a single deep breath.
"Maka, it's your night to cook, right?" Soul's reflection showed on the blade, a wide grin quickly taking form.
"Hahaha! Actually, it's yours." She swung Soul behind her so he lay flat on her back in between her shoulder blades. Her gaze hardened as she watched the shadowed creature creep closer. The moonlight made it's way onto the kishin's distorted face. It's nose slanted and flat, almost as if it only had two nostrils. One eye was small and pitch black, the other was huge and bloodshot.
A slime like substance trailed down his chin and had begun dripping onto the hard ground. Plop. Pip. Plop. Maka's line of sight moved above it's head and noticed it practically had no neck and it's spine looked as if it would protrude from it's baggy skin.
Maka almost jumped as the kishin's head suddenly snapped to the side to get a closer look at her and the scythe she held. Determination was clearly visible, not only in her features, but also her light emerald eyes.
Looking up into the night sky, it spotted the grinning moon, blood spilling out from it's teeth, just above Death City.
"Let's do this!" Running forward, Maka pulled Soul out from behind her. The kishin's eyes widened with excitement and bloodlust. A nasty smile formed on what you could call his lips. Sharp browning teeth glistened with the slime that trickled down it's chin. A pointed tongue slithered out from behind it's teeth and licked it's thin, cracked lips. The kishin began charging forward, as well. Gangly arms flew witlessly by the kishin's sides.
Just a few feet away from the brute, Maka realized that she underestimated this kishin. It ran faster than she did, and her eyes could barely keep up with it's jerking movements. She almost apprehended this too late. Instantaneously, she rolled to the right and jumped onto the wall.
With her feet planted firmly on the brick surface, she buckled her knees and with a powerful push, she launched herself forward, scythe drawn, ready to penetrate through the sagging skin of the kishin.
Her eyes focused on the creature a few feet ahead of her. She pulled back Soul and began to swing him, striving for the kishin's skinny body.
The kishin's bloodshot eye bulged and noticed Maka's attack. With Soul's blade just a few inches away from it's side, it jumped into the air and landed heavily on the ground.
The tip of Maka's scythe pierced into the alley's wall, which saved her from hitting it dead-on with her face. She placed one foot on the wall to help yank Soul out of the red exterior.
"Maka! Behind you!" Soul realized that killing this...thing... was going to be tougher than he and his meister thought. With as much force as she could gather, she tore Soul out and turned around quickly. She brought up her weapon as a defense.
Just then, the kishin's arms clashed hard against Soul. It stared into Maka's face, head tilted and cackling maniacally. The sound of bone against metal clattered into the night. Maka ground her teeth at the force being pushed against her. She was driven rearward until her back lay flat against the wall.
Mustering up as much strength possible, she brought back her leg and drove her foot directly into the kishin. She heard a crack and felt the pressure on her lighten dramatically. Looking up, she saw the kishin staggering backward. The bone in it's leg broke through the drooping skin. Blood spilled out of the large wound.
"Ahahahah!" The kishin laughed in pain and swayed from side-to-side, arms loosely swinging along with it's body. It's head dropped and it's eyes stared at it's broken leg, blood slowly running down to the small gnarled foot.
Suddenly, it stopped moving altogether. The bald head slowly rose and tilted to look at Maka. A fierce grin reached from ear-to-ear. Laughing and regaining it's balance, it charged, limping and dragging it's leg behind him.
Having a better insight of what this kishin was capable of, Maka was a little more prepared for this attack. Waiting for the right moment, her eyes tracked every movement the kishin made. Soon enough, it was just a few feet ahead of her.
Maka brought Soul back, ready to slash into the kishin's head and kill it in one blow.
"Oi! When this is over, we're gonna invite everyone over to party!" Soul imagined his nice warm bed, crawling into it and snuggling with his blankets.
"Fine with meee!" Maka jumped into the cold night air, high above the carelessly surprised kishin. She flipped once and landed sternly on the ground, behind the kishin.
Throwing all her weight into this one attack, she thrust Soul's blade gracefully into the kishin's side. It screeched into night, only to be carried away by the mist and the slight breeze. It continued to cry out, gurgling in the blood that was collecting in it's mouth and lungs.
Maka gave a hard push and drove Soul deeper into the creature's body. The thick red substance spewed out of it's side, dripping onto the hard pavement beneath their feet. Soft pit pat plops were made from each drop of blood.
Maka let out a heavy sigh that she seemed to have been holding since the beginning of the fight.
The kishin collapsed onto it's boney knees. It grasped at it's side and tried to push the black and red scythe away. It spit blood out of it's mouth and gasped frantically for air.
Maka placed her foot flat on the kishin's face, and pushed off of it to get Soul out. From this movement, more blood poured out it's side. It let out a last wail, then went silent, eyes wide and blank. Quietly, it fell face-first into the ground with a thump.
It wriggled and twitched for a few seconds, only to come to a complete stillness. The night became silent and the mist finally cleared. The kishin's body disintegrated and a small red soul took the empty space as to where the body once lay. It hovered above the ground, waiting to be consumed.
Soul transformed back into human form with a flash of light. He casually walked over to the egg with one hand in his pants pocket. With his other hand, he closed his fingers around the soul and lightly grasped it and brought it before his salivating mouth.
"All of this hard work really does pay off." His trademark grin made it across his face right before opening it widely and placing the red object into his mouth. Gulping down the kishin egg in one bite, he slurped in his drool and smirked over to the now exhausted Maka. "Hm... How about lasagna tonight?"
"Mmm! Sounds great!" Maka tilted her head and smiled with closed eyes.
END OF CHAPTER TWO
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