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An: ok so u pplz r VERY rude. i sugest u fcking stop it RITE NOW. its pathtic! serriousy, pplz saying im ugly, n pplz
saying all kinds of other shit. its horible. i am writing, NO1 CAN STOP ME. OK. IF U DNT LIEK IT THEN DNT READ IT (But it's funny to comment on it)
IDOTS! HONETLY U PPLZ R ALL RETARDED. (You are retarded) I U ALL KEEP SAYING HOW MUCHB U HATEB MY STORY BUT u ALL FCKING LEEP READING IT (Yes, we leep reading it)
ANYWAYS.
THATS RETARTRED. ok so 4 those pplz u actualy care,hers th e rest of myt story!
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ron an i where walking outside 2gether. we were holding each others hands. his hands where so soft, yet hard at the same (Okay)
tmie. they where amzing hands. they where sio much biger then my hands so my hands git perfectly into his hans. (I know someone who's name is Hans. Oh and this is stupid) he made me
fel protected u c. (No, I don't see)
we where walking down the great hall sdteps 2gether outside the great hall. every1 outside turned 2 star at us. (I'm just watching A Very Potter Musical for the 200th time)
"Is that Tahirah with RON WEASLEY?" I herd every1 saying. (Yes, because everyone cares so much about you)
"I herd that ron dndt go out with any girls!" (So that means he's gay?) I herd other pplz saying.
"She must b sumthing special." I herd other pplz saying who never said naything tht was said above. (I don't get it)
i blushed becuz i was embarsed. (Yeah, sure. I bet you love it) but i was happy 2 becuz ron was super sexi and hawt and coot and emo. his skinny jeans showed
his bum prefectly i reely wanted 2 grab it but i resited. (You are disgusting) he akso had on a plain wite tshirt. it went over his mucles
perfectly and showed of his realy sexii arms! i put my arms arund his arms and felt his strong muscles. SOOOO HAWT! (Okay?)
"lets sit under the tree" ron said
"k" i said bac
"k" ron said bac (This year you bet gonna get out of here. The reign of Malfoy is drawing near. I'll have the greatest wizard-career it's gonna be totally awesome! This conversation is stupid)
and the 2 of us went and sat under the tree. we never said much we just sat there. pretty soon a hole bunch of girlks satated (It took me about a minute to figure out that this was supposed to mean started)
2 sloly come up 2 us quitly and under the bushes but i saw them first. they were realy young liek in 2nd year or sumthing
ithink but i wasnt sure.
"GTFO OUT OF HREE BITCHES!" (Don't call the second-years bitches!) iscramed at the top of my longs and they all went runing awy.
"stopid bitches" i said 2 ron
"there just jealus" ron said bac
"i no" i said bac 2 ron
"dnt let them bother u" ron said bac 2 me
"i wont" i said bac 2 ron
"good" ron said bac 2 me. (This is so stupid)
then ron tuned 2 me and ooked me stait in the eye. (I hope it hurt)
"ur the most icirdible (What?) grli ever met" he said 2 me
"ur the msot incridible boy i ever net" i said bac 2 him
then, he bliked his hawt, sexi eyes and brushed his hawt sexi red hir out ofhis eyes. sloyl he leened in. (Okay. This is weird) we where geting
close, closer, closer!
"OMG! U FCKING BASTARD!" i scarmed (Why?)
i ran away a fast as i culd. omg omg omg. he was a grifindor! how culd i have forgten?
i had forgoteen! (Oh no!)
NOO!
NOOO!
NOOOOOOO! (It's not that horrible)
i betayed slitheinb. (But actually a lot of students are dating someone from another house)
he was a bastard! he tied 2 sedoce me! with his good looks ans his sexii smile, and air, and eyes, and (His air?)
skinty jeans, and bum.
NOOO!
he used me! (Why should he use you? What point would he have in using you?)
noooooo!
i ran up 2 the commum room and there i took out a rasor blad and used it 2 cut mysekf in the rists over aned over and over
and over again. (Like I said, it's not that horrible!)
my rists where beleding (Of course they are bleeding if you cut them with a razor!) ZBUT I DIDNT CARE!
ron was a bastard
"hes a bastard"! i scramed at the top of my lungs! (You just thought that. God, you're so stupid!)
"fck him dead!" i screamed again at ht top of my longs! (I bet you would love to do that)
"i deserve beter!" i screamed against the top of my lung!Q! (No, you don't)
(Where is Draco in this? I love Draco. But then again it's probably better that he's not in it)
soon the blod was going EVERYWHERE
EVERYWHERE (No shit)
it was all over the place ansd so iwas losing 2 much OMG OMG!
OMG!(And now I'm watching Potter Puppet Pals. I don't know why, but I love it)
I WAS FANTING ! (Die! Die!)
i felt ligheaded!
the ropm was spinng faster and fastesr and FASTER AND FASTER AND FASTER!
nooooo
noooooooo
nooooooooooooooooo1!
everything wenty blac! (DIE!)
!RONS POV! (Why is there are there two exclamation points?)
omg? why did she just doo tht 2 me?
wht did i do?
i dnt no!
i stated 2 cry rite there under the tree. (This is really OOC. And I wouldn't cry because of her) i didnt no wat to do. Tay had just brokn my hart! i gave he4r everything! (You didn't give her anything!)
and then she tok it up and broke it into amilion smitlerinzines! (What is that supposed to mean?) how culd she do this 2 me? HOWWW? i didnt no.
all i new was that Tay had sumthing wrong (What?) with me and i intentd 2 find out wht. so i march ran (You march run?)as quicly as i culd up 2 go 2
the castle and opebn the front sdoors 2 the grate hall. but thts when i saw harry, and he waved me foward.
"ron is the romor tru?" harry scarmed at me and he loked angry. (I like Harry)
"what romor?" i said bac 2 harry
"that u are dateing a slitherin!" harry yeled as lud bas he culd 2 me grls close by trned arond and
stared at the 2 of us. they were kind of coot. but not realy. and then i thoght oh Tahira and my hart gave a guilt tugy
feling. i looked bac at the grls and they looked ugly now. (Where is Hermione in this story? And Luna? And Ginny? And Dean? And Seamus? And I don't know – EVERYONE?)
"soooooooooo!"""" harry sdcar,ed bac 2 me again. i looked harry rite in the eys. harry was soo hawt. his sexi eyes and hair.
i even saw heis abs evry nite when he took of his shirt 2 go 2 bed. they where perfect! i then tought
ofTahirah. she was mad at me. and i didnt no why. … mayb it ws a hint that harry was my tru luv!" (If you don't date Hermione then at least date Harry. Everyone is better than Tay)
"those romors are FALSE" (YAY!) i scareamed 2 harry. he smiled and he looked so sexi at the same time. i didnt reget my desision. (I wouldn't regret it either)
"good" harry said bac 2 me.
i never confeshed my tru fellings 2 harry b4. (You just discovered them) i think he new i was bisexieul. i thought tht wuld b the time. (What time?) so ileaned
4ward, and oloking harry rite in the eyes i kised him. (Why do I FIND this cute?) i puled away from my lips his lisp (His lisp?)ands we stared at each iother 4 a
second. the grls tht were next 2 us gasped in suprise. harry turn raound 2 them.
"OBVIBULAE" (What spell is that supposed to be?) he scareamed 2 them.
"wht did u do" i asked harry
"whipped there meories" he said (Oh, so obvibulae whips memories? Okay)
"now stop talking and kiss me agan" he said 2 me.
i leened 2ward and kised harry again. this time with more pasiont. we kissed in2 the bloom cupbord and clsed the door bhind
us! (Lovely)
2 b continued (SHOCING CHAPTER! (Every chapter you write is shocking) i no! tell me way u think. (I hate it) i no it was boring at first, (It's still boring) but thins are staring 2 heet up! (Thins are starting to heat up? Oh god))