Percy's Story
Title: Swim Like a Fish!
By: BlueDude
Summary: Ummm, read to find out!
Chapters: 1
Rating: K+
Chapter 1:
You know what my favorite thing to do is (besides kissing Annabeth)?
Swimming, of course! Since my dad is the god of the sea, I can breathe underwater... Just like a fishy!
And if I don't want to, I don't even need to get wet cuz I have mystical Posiedon Powers!
I know I'm awesome, so it won't be a surprise if you tell me I am!
The end.
Forum for this Story:
BlueDude- So,tell me what you think!
WiseGirl- In paragraph 1, you used incorrect grammar. You should have put "Do" at the beginning. In the second chapter, there is no such thing as a "fishy". It's just fish. In the third paragraph, you can't start a sentence with "And" and "Cuz" isn't a word. The proper term is "because". Finally, in the fourth paragraph, you are FAR from awesome.
BlueDude- o.o
WiseGirl- Also, the rating should be changed from K+ to K since you used primitive vocabulary and you chose a silly topic.
GoatGuy- O.o
TravisStole- o.o
ConnorStole- dude, you just got pwned by your girlfriend!
WiseGirl- "Dude" should be capitalized since it is at the beginning of the sentence and yes, he got "pwned".
BlueDude- *Facepalm*
I know this chapter is a bit short and fishy (lol) but its a start.
Next is Annabeth's chapter and I need ideas!
Enjoy,review, and thanks,
NessaMei