A/N: Okay, one of you reviewed on DecemberSayer's story that I was writing this Commentary. So, apparently the author has been yelling at me in authors notes in her story to take my Commentary down. In fact, yesterday Cara messaged me to take my story down. It was downright hilarious! So before I commentary on this chapter, I'm going to commentary her message. This is for you Cara!
TAK UR STOIRY! (Um, no thanks.) IM A BETTA RITER DEN U! (In what world?) SO STFU! (I prefer to just keep talking.) IK MORE BOUT HP DEN U DO! (Excuse me? I happen to know how to spell George)I SAW LLL DA MOVEIS! (I have too a ton of times! And I have read the books millions of times, and have been to midnight premieres.) U DINT NO **! (I know what a star is, unlike you) SO FUKIN STOP W/UR COMENTARY! (Again, no thanks) WUT IF I MAD A COMENTAYR OF UR STORYE! (And what would be the point of that? Oh wait; I remember who I'm talking too. There is no point in your writing.)
Anyway, back to commenting on the trash!
A/N: I NO U ALL NICE READERS (Why thank you! I always knew I was nice!) (NOT DEM DUMBASS FLAMERS! (Are you sure the Flamers are the dumbasses here?)) HAVE BEEN WAITIN 4 THE NEXT CHAPTA (Oh no we haven't)! PLZ RD AND GIVE GOOOOOOOD REBVIEWS!
So me and hary opened the door to the coomn room. There was fred amd Jorge (George) sittin there. (GASP!)
"Hello cara. Hello harre" they said.
"Hi!" we said at the same time.
"Gess what?" Harry said.
"What" the twins said inrested.
"Wer dating!" I said cheerfully. They both looked down sadly. (Don't be sad! We'll get that monster away from Harry!) Maybe their is a small chance rhat they do like me.! (And a even bigger chance that they want you destroyed)
"Oh…" said Jorge (George).
"Well I will see u tomarrow" I then went to sleep in my bed. (I like sleeping on my imaginary dog but, that's just me…)
The next morning I walked into the graet hall. I saw harry fred and Joreg (George). So I sat next to haerry. He then pecked me on the lips. (I have a feeling Voldemort is behind this!) I embraces him and saw over his shoulder Fred and Jorge (George) glaring at him. (I think they were glaring at him because he is under the possession of Voldemort)
After I finished eating my wafdfles (Oh! Yummy wafdfles!) and milk I was walking yto potions class. While we waited for snape to show up I sawe ron Nevulle and luna. They seemed tgo be discussing something important. (They must be talking about how to get rid of you!)
"HEY!" I shouted. "IF U WANNA SAY SOMETHIN LET EVERY ONE HERE! ITS NOT NICE TO KEEP SEECRETS!" (And it's not nice to listen on other peoples conversations!) Nevule glared at me. the 3 of them serounded me they all startd to swing(I wonder when they got a swing set in the potions classroom.) at me. Fred then jumped in front of me. Joege (George) grabbed them all fromk behind. I looked over at them.
"U saved me!" I said and hugged them. Jorge (George) dropped the trio on the groind. (What are you, the Hulk?) Dape (A pairing between Draco and Snape? AH BAD IMAGE!) then walked by.
"CARA QUEEN! DETENTION!" (Yay!) HE yelled.
"But I didn" I tried to protest.
"NO DETENTION!" (Snape why did you have to back down!?)
After detentin (I thought she didn't have detention.) I left snapes classroom. I walked by the pond (Hogwarts has a pond?) and sow harry.
"Cara over here" he yelld. I walked over there
"Haarrrrrrrrrrrrryyyyy!"I screamed as I gaver him a hug.
WE discussed many different things like fav. food games class and other stuff. We then got to the topic of quittich (What are you going to quit the itch? Go buy so anti-flee cream or something!).
"Cara we need another chaser (I wonder if Cara's version of a Chaser is to just run around the yard chasing things) or we cant play againt slitheren this year." Harry said sadly. I wondered what I cold do to help hiM! (Leave, you leave and never come back. That's how you can.)
"I will play chaser!" I promclaimed. Being on the quittich (Quit the itch!) team would b fun! I could see fred and jorhe (George) and harry more offen.
"Thank YOU!" He then kissed me. (Voldemort stop it! Stop it now!) It made me feel all fuzzy inside!
The next day I wnert to see my one of my close BFFL, Hermione (No, not Hermione too!). We havent talked alot this year because I was bussy in detention and she was bussy playing cupid (Hemione playing cupid?! HERMIONE!?). She would always give me good adive on dating (Oh. . Cara. . . !) Basicaly everyone went to her (Well, everyone does go to Hermione for advice, NOT playing cupid.). She was an expert on this stuff (Well, Hermione knows all.). She hooked up many different ppl in the past (Hermione hooking people up!? SIRIUSLY?). The only time she failed was helping Dumledore get Snape! (Stop. With. This. Pairing. Now. NOW!) Ok, anyone would fail knowinf all the times snape rejected him. (Thank the wizard god for that…)
I knocked on her door.
"who is it" sje said.
"Cara" I answered. She opened the door. She was wering all pink (NO. NO. NO. NO. NOOO!) . It fit her persona really. (Never will it! NEVER!)
"how may I help u today?" she asked.
"I have a…" I began.
"dating issue" she said. "endeer (PRONGS!) me."
"Mhmmmm. Well i like frerd and Jorge (George) but im dating harry. HE offered me a spot on the quittich (Quit your itch!) team. I think they r jealus? (Definitely not.) Should I brake up with him. (They aren't a bike!) What if jhe thinks im using him. (You ARE using him!) I do kind of like him!"
"I think u should listen to youre heart" (Man, the cliché listen to your heart stuff again. You've done it again Hermione!) I stared at her blankly.
"If u really like harry u should stay with him. if u dont u have to figure out if u like ferd or Jorge (George) more. Dating 2 ppl is cheating you know. Or u could wait and see if they try to make a move." She said. I lightblub flickered in my head. (I knew there wasn't a brain up in there!) I understiood exactly what she is saying. But how do I know if I like Harry.
All day I was day I was debating weather (Just watch the Muggle news, or look on the Daily Prophet or something if your that concerned) or not I should wait on fred..or Jorge (George) or brake up with harry immediately. (How about you just LEAVE all of their lives!) I stared at my feet. Maybe I keep thinking about fred and Jorge (George) too much. I should at least try to b around harry without thinking of them or their super sexy red hair. (Second thing Cara has gotten right. SEXY RED HAIR!) I shoke my head. Harry then walked up to me intterupting my thoughts.
"Hey" he said "meet my by the pond (There is not a pond at Hogwarts, not a pond!) on Saturday. We can have a picnic their" he said. I smiled saterday was tommarow and that would b the perfect time to think souly on harry. And forget Jorge (George) and Fred. (YES, FORGET BOTH OF THEM!)
NXT CHAPTA IS THD PICNIC! PLZ !
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