I know see what happened, with the writing all in one big block. I have now (hopefully) resolved the issue. I'm sorry for the terrible update last time, so hopefully this is better.

Dawn wandered out of the theatre after Ash. She was looking around for the ebony haired boy she seemed to be falling in love with. Dawn thought she saw him near a burger stand, and she was heading over there when she heard something in the bushes

"Psssst!"

'What the hell?' Thought Dawn. She turned and faced the bush. She reached her hand into it. Something grabbed her and pulled her in.

"Eeeeeep!" Squealed Dawn.

A hand went over her mouth to stifle her scream.

"Chillax Dawn, it's me." Dawn looked up and saw, to her dismay... May. (A/N haha lol, I made a rhyme)

"It's time we had a little talk..." Said May sternly.

Ash heard a squeal behind him. He turned suddenly, dropping the burger in his hand.

"Dawn? Was that..."

Dawn was nowhere to be found.

'Meh' thought Ash. He picked up his burger and dusted it off. He stared lovingly at his burger and began scarfing it down. (A/N if you've ever watched Pokemon you'll realize that sometimes, for Ash, food comes first).

May looked angrily at Dawn, from their hiding place in the bush.

"Why him? Why Ash? I swear, you had Gary under your thumb, and now your with... Loner Ketchum?"

May looked questioningly at Dawn.

"I can't help it," said Dawn, "he's just so attractive..."

"He's a loser! A LOSER! What is attractive about him?"

May shouted at Dawn.

"He's incredible" Dawn said dreamily.

"I honestly don't understand you. Dawn, you leave me no choice. You aren't allowed to hang out with Ash anymore."

"What the hell do you mean by that?! You don't control me! Fuck you May!"

Dawn climbed out of the bush in a huff.

"Dawn? Dawn! Get back here or else!"

Dawn turned and gave her the finger. May gasped, taken aback. 'I just disowned my best friend over Ash' thought Dawn. She couldn't believe herself.

Ash saw Dawn heading over to him.

"Hey Dawn!"

"Hey Ash. What ya doing?"

Ash looked at his hands, which were covered in ketchup and mustard.

"Eating. I just finished my sixth burger! Hey, want a bite of number seven?"

Ash pushed a slobbery, half eaten burger toward her.

"Uh, I'm good. Listen Ash, I need to go home."

"Already? Let me walk you."

And so they began to walk. After about five minutes, Dawn grabbed Ash's hand. He looked up and blushed.

"D-Dawn?"

Dawn looked over and smiled.

"Yes?"

"Do... Y-You, uh... I... N-never mind..."

They walked home hand in hand. The pair soon arrived at Dawn's house. Ash was still blushing furiously.

"So Ash, do you want to hang out sometime else?"

Dawn still hadn't let go of his hand.

"I... Uh, I would l-love to hang out with... Um, you..."

"Great!" Said Dawn.

Then, blushing furiously, she leaned in and kissed Ash on the cheek.

"See ya tomorrow."

Dawn quickly rushed inside. For a moment, Ash stood there, blushing, with a looked of bemusement on his face.

"YESSSSSS!" He shouted, pumping his fist. This was the best night Ash had ever had.

Hopefully, the format has been changed. I also modified a few things to make this better, like removing Pokemon from the story and fixing the dialogue. If it still sucks, I will stop updating.