I just wanted to say something. Don't worry, I'm going to delete this once I have chapter 5, but I just want to tell every reader something.
I've came a LONG way from my original writing style.
Before:
Favorite Story Type(Anime, Comic, etc): Anime
Favorite Type of Story(Story, Crossover): Crossover
Favorite Crossover Pairing(Animes, etc): DBZ + Sora no Otoshimono/DBZ + Naruto
Favorite Character: Teen Gohan SSJ2(the one that fought Cell. And it HAD to be SSJ2 Gohan)
OC: Didn't like OC's in stories
Demonstration Of Writing Style:
Gohan fought Chaos. He punched at her, but she dodged, She used her blades to cut him since his arm was still out. He got cut, and the poison went into him.
-TIME SKIP-
"Wow, you are so weak. Your father must be really(idk i forgot. this was an actual story i wrote before btw, and it was so bad sombody started hating me for it. also, i wrote a BIT better than how i am making it out, it's just hard to recreate this scene when not using my current style of writing)"
Gohan rose from the hole he was in.
"Don't you dare talk about my dad!" he yelled, his power rising. The poison burst out of his wounds as he screamed. His hair rose, and changed colors. He was surrounded by a golden aura. His eyes became teal. He was a Super Saiyan 2 now, yaaayayayayayaay.
Now:
Favorite Story Type(Anime, Comic, etc): Anime/Games(certain visual novels)
Favorite Type of Story(Story, Crossover): Crossover
Favorite Crossover Pairing(Animes, etc): DBZ + Any Good Anime's(sometimes in the misc category there's something good)
Favorite Character: Goku/Teen Gohan(Cell Game)
OC: Itsuki Kurosaki, half-brother to Gohan and Goten, son of Goku(I also read fanfics with OCs)
Demonstration Of Writing Style:
Gohan chased Deados, not letting her escape from his barrage of blows. She continuous dodged each strike and each kick, every single attack going to waste. Chaos grew tired of the little game she was playing, and decided to go onto the offensive. With her blades, she striked Gohan's arm, causing a huge gash were the blade struck.
Gohan backed away from Chaos, and examined his arm. His arm was barely attached anymore. That's going to require some stitches.
And worse, yet, Gohan felt dizzy. Off balance, and woozy. Poison! Chaos must have her blades tipped in it!
-TIME SKIP-
"Ha ha! Wow, that was much easier than I thought it'd be!" Chaos laughed. Gohan was defeated. There was nothing left for him to do, but succumb to the poison.
"D-Dad.. I'm sorry, but I couldn't do it! She's just too strong! Besides, I just got finished beating Cell! I haven't had time to recover!" Gohan cried.
"Gohan, do you remember how you felt when Android 16 died?" His fathers detached voice asked him.
"Dad? Is that you, again?" Gohan asked.
"Yes, son. Now answer me!"
"...Yes, I do." Gohan answered.
"Well, #16 was only one peace loving creature. If you don't stop Chaos, billions will die!" Goku said.
"B-But! I don't have any strength left in me!" Gohan said. It was true. He was empty.
"That's what you said in that Kamehameha-battle against Cell, and you won that!" Goku said.
"But, that was because of Vegeta!" Gohan argued. "If he hadn't distracted Cell, we all would have died!"
"While that may be true... You can still find the hidden rage within you to transform again!"
"How am I supposed to do that?!" Gohan asked.
"Just think about what makes you absolutely angry! Focus on it, and you should ascend again!" Goku said, sounding pretty sure.
"Okay, Dad! I'll try it!" Gohan said, standing up from the grave Chaos dug for him.
"...Maybe I hit him too hard?" Chaos pondered, wondering why the Saiyan was talking to himself. "I knew I should killed him instantly."
"Chaos!" Gohan shouted, calling her attention.
"Oh? What is it? Ready to die?" She asked, looking down at him.
"What are your plans... After you kill... me?" Gohan asked her, a serious expression marking his face,
"Well, I'm going to kill more people, silly! What'd you think I was going to do?" She said, sticking her tongue out at him.
'It's as if she thinks this is a game!'
"I... thought so.." Gohan sighed, closing his eyes.
"Are you accepting your fate? Awww... I wanted to play with you more!" she whined.
Gohan's eyes open, suddenly, and his irises changed from black to teal. His hair and eyebrows became golden, and he was surrounded in a golden aura.
"HAAAHHH!" Gohan roared, and with it, his power increased. The severity of his energy caused the winds to pick up, threatening a twister, or tornado. The ground shaked- No, the entire atmosphere shook as Gohan's power increased.
"Huh? What's this? Your hair changed colors. Neat." Chaos remarked.
Gohan's hair slowly rose. It struggled, as if his body wasn't able to handle the form's severity of power. Gohan's muscled became a bit larger, and more defined.
"Whoa, I can feel that from up here!" Chaos exclaimed, kind of impressed. "But if you wanna beat me, you're going to need more power than that!"
Gohan's transformation was almost complete, but it wouldn't finish. Sure, Gohan was angry, but he needed more rage to summon the raw power of Super Saiyan 2.
'Come on, come on! I need something, anything!' Gohan thought, trying to find a rage source, His mind was exhausted, and he did't really feel like thinking back, as it gave him a headache.
"Well, I'm going to kill more people, silly! What'd you think I was going to do?" Gohan remembered Chaos say earlier.
The thought of billions being slaughtered, for them to die... All of them against their will... Innocent people...
'It's as if she thinks this is a game!'
"HAAAAAAH!" Gohan cried. His power exploded, his hair locked into place, and the transformation locked.
"W-What?! What's this power I'm feeling?" Chaos questioned.
When the smoke and dust cleared, Gohan was revealed. His hair lifted, and his expression cold.
"'You'll kill more', huh? I'd say "Over my dead body," but we all know that isn't going to happen."
So, what do you think? My 'now' is probably better, right? Anyways, Chapter 5 coming SOOON