I'm dying, sorry minna for the very late update...just like I said before. I have 2 extra lesson for 5 times a week. I barely get enough time to rest...
Well, I will graduate next year so if I want to go to top unversity, I have to study...much.
And as always I will respond a review from
Hana-mochi8507
Hello again, here is my reply to what you said about my previous review.
First of all, please don't tell me to stop reading your fic just because I don't like it or because it makes me uncomfortable, it's such an easy way to dismiss my criticism as "my problem" or a matter of different tastes. I read what I choose to, not all of it something I enjoy or something that makes me happy. Your story has a problematic moral message regardless of whether I'm reading it.
Also don't bother to argue that you don't intend the story to be romantic when you have placed it in the Romance category. I get what you mean, and I don't think you're portraying an ideal relationship without conflict and angst, and that's fine, but my issue is that you still portray the characters as being in love, or at least loving each other, and yet have one of them rape the other. That you treat the character you made into a rapist sympathetically and have the victim character forgive and continue to love him is belittling of rape as a heinous crime one just does not commit against someone they care about. Am I right to assume that's not something you would want to do? It's entirely possible to write about rape without being insulting to real life rape victims even by accident.
I'm not going to tell you how to write your story, though; that wasn't why I first reviewed it. I wanted to bring to your attention what I find questionable about it and to make you think about those problems from a point of view I suspected you might not have given sufficient thought. I don't expect you to do anything else. This may be "just a fic", but you are not "just a fic author"; what you write about says something about your views and influences outside fanfiction.
I hope you don't feel like I'm attacking you, though I understand if you do feel that way. Actually I wrote my first review out of concern for you, as condescending as that may sound. I'm attacking the attitudes that influence your work, but like I said before, I don't believe they are wholly your own but acquired. I believe you're a good person, but that you could also stand to ask yourself more thoroughly why you want to write what you want to write.
Anyway, I guess that's all. I wish you all the best on your writing career and in your life. I hope I've given you something to think about.
Oh my, now I lose all my idea how to deal with you. I'm glad that you care enough to review my fic though, thanks. Maybe the problem is in the my way of thinking. No matter how you describe it, I still don't understand why you feel uneasy (even after I responded to you all time). Because what you think is bad I think it isn't. I don't know...well. It is troubling maybe for someone who raped but fall in love to the rapist. Maybe if it happen to me, well...I don't know how to deal it. But, as always, I just have different way of thinking. I know what I do is bad, but I can't stop to like it. You know, I have plenty more ideas of fic which are too dark, sadist, and disgusting to write. This fic isn't a compare with those idea. I'm glad I didn't write those ideas into fics.
Yeah, maybe the problem we have here is discommunication. No matter I explain to you, you don't understand. And me too, no matter how you explain to me, I don't understand. It starting to get funny for me. I don't know how to deal you anymore. If I respond you more than this, in the end I will explode (too stress because I can't find a way to make you 'statisfy') and abandon this fic. Haha, let's pray that will not happen.
So, I'm lost against you. I don't know how to respond you anymore. But, I will not abandon this fic since there are readers who always read this fic
In the end, what can I do for you is to say "I'm sorry"
Naruto was trying to sleep in his room in Gaara's house. It was different to his little apartment, Gaara's house was big, with a lot of room, Naruto was sure that this home was more suited to be a hotel. Because of that, the sand siblings didn't worry too much if some of the rooms were destroyed because of arguments, they still had more rooms. What ridiculous siblings.
Naruto rolled over on his bed, finally glad it was one of those rare times he used double bed, not single bed. He always fell off his bed at home.
The blonde was restless. Of course, it was hard to sleep after what he done today. He had said that he would marry Gaara. Both had agreed to marry. Gaara wanted to step down as the Kazekage, and Kankurou would be the new Kazekage.
Too many things were happening today.
Naruto got up from the bed. Well, he was restless but he was still tired. But, before he went to sleep, he needed to go to bathroom. Naruto scratched his head and walked out of the room. He was stunned when he saw the scarily dark corridor. Man, this wasn't the best time to be scared. Naruto had openly admitted he was afraid of ghosts, and he had never gotten over that weakness. He was afraid a ghost was going to appear in the gloomy darkness of the corridor.
Naruto gulped and laughed nervously, trying to get rid of the stupid feeling. He stood still, slightly shocked.
Did he even know where the bathroom was?
He sighed and mentally kicked himself. Today was the first time he had ever entered Gaara's house. He could find the bathroom by himself, but he was scared, what happens if a ghost did jump out of the shadows?
I don't believe you will be father soon. I think the world will end before that happens.
Naruto jumped when the Kyuubi's voice echoed in his head.
Wh…what! What did you say? It's normal to be afraid of something you can't fight, right?
Sometimes I regret being sealed inside you
Shut up! I'm not happy either!
Naruto's face was flushed when he heard Kyuubi laughing. That damn fox, he was really annoying these days. Usually that monster fox only talked to him when he wanted to get out. But now, he talked like they were roommates, okay, that wasn't really wrong.
Naruto slapped his cheeks to wake himself up properly. This house maybe big, but he would find that bathroom. The blonde was ninja, a shinobi who would be Hokage soon; he couldn't get scared of a bit of darkness!
Naruto started to wander round Gaara's house. He began walking; hoping his instincts were right, but they had led him to Kankurou's room. He knew it was his room straight after he had heard the loud snoring, which echoed off all walls. At first, he thought it was ghost, getting ready to attack him but it was the puppeteer's snoring.
Actually, he wanted to pull a prank on the sleeping Kankurou but he didn't want to risk being beaten up again.
He began walking again and sighed when he was greeted with the end of the corridor. It meant he had taken a wrong turn. He was about to turn back but he noticed a door in the corner was open slightly. A dim light filtered through the small opening.
With irritation clear in his movements, he opened the door straight away and looking inside. Gaara was sleeping in his rather large bed. The room was huge and Gaara looked really small in comparison. Well… it was the Kazekage's room after all. The room was very neat, but Naruto saw stacks of papers and book in every corner of the room. A large red wardrobe was positioned on the right side of the room. A desk, which was piled high with papers, pens and books was placed on the left side. Aside from that there were a few chairs and other bits of furniture.
He blushed lightly when he noticed he had entered someone's … no, his future mates room, without permission. He couldn't close the door and walk away; instead he entered the room and approached the sleeping Gaara. He wanted to see the redhead's face whilst he was asleep.
The blonde smiled tenderly when he saw Gaara slept peacefully. The blanket covered most of his body, leaving his face and shoulders free.
It was good to see the redhead so peaceful.
Naruto sighed heavily. If it wasn't for him, Gaara would be even more peaceful. He couldn't believe he had destroyed Gaara's future and he could do nothing about it. He could only feel guilty about his actions. The thing was, Gaara wasn't mad, it would be natural for the redhead to be angry, to hate him, but he didn't.
Maybe it would be better if Gaara had beaten him; the burden would be lighter then.
But no, Gaara wanted to marry him. It was ridiculous; Naruto didn't know Gaara was this nice.
That kindness made the guilt grow more. Gaara deserved better than this, better than him. None of them had a choice though. They were stuck with each other.
Naruto knelt beside the bed and watched the redhead sleep. If he could, he would turn back time, to the time he raped Gaara. He would fix everything so Gaara didn't have to suffer for his mistakes. But Life wasn't a game which could be 'reset' when he did something wrong. All he could do was wait and then pay the consequences.
Yeah, it was useless being depressed.
Naruto smiled again when Gaara began mumbling in his sleep. He slowly stroked the others forehead, being careful not to wake him. The smile widened when the redhead began leaning into his touch, even though he was asleep. He gently removed his hand and walked out of the room. It would be awkward if Gaara found him sneaking around his room, in the middle of the night.
Before he closed the door, the blonde looked back into the room, just to see Gaara once more and then the door silently closed.
He wanted to make Gaara happy.
IoI
Gaara blushed slightly and turned away. Naruto was staring at him with sharp blue eyes, in one hand holding the chopsticks.
"Come on, Gaara. Open your mouth," Naruto spoke up, trying his best to persuade the redhead. Gaara quickly looked at his siblings, who were both ignoring them. Yeah, it was breakfast time and Naruto was extremely worried when he found out Gaara barely ate, all because he was pregnant. Now, Naruto was trying to feed him.
Gaara shook his head, it wasn't because Naruto was feeding him, no. It was because every time he ate, he felt like throwing up.
"Gaara, you have to eat for two people now, so please, eat," Naruto pleaded, his hand was aching from hanging in the air too long.
The redhead was beginning to give up. He knew that, for the baby, he had to eat, but he couldn't. Just the thought of throwing up all day made him shudder.
Naruto sighed and put the chopsticks back in the bowl. He hadn't eaten yet, because … he was busy with Gaara.
Gaara looked at Naruto, guilt clear in his eyes. The blonde looked sad and disappointed.
'Am I a bad mother?' he asked himself whilst stroking his belly slowly.
"Okay I will eat," Gaara had given up. Naruto turned to him, and his smile grew. He was happy once again. Gaara smiled too and began eating. The blonde kept that smile on his face when he saw the other trying his best to eat. His face looked like he was being forced or maybe in pain, but it slightly amused him.
"Don't think it's bad when you are eating Gaara. Just … imagine it's something you like," Naruto spoke enthusiastically, trying to ease the sickness the redhead felt. Gaara nodded and carried on eating. He was … happier, usually it was Temari and Kankurou that were forcing him to eat, but Naruto was better at it. His heart was warming … and then he began wondering … why was that?
In her seat, Temari watched the couple. It was nice, how Naruto would cheer Gaara on and sometimes he would make some funny movement or make a funny comment and Gaara would laugh. The sandy haired girl smiled when she noticed that the blonde hadn't touched his food. Her doubt began disappearing. She knew the two were only friends, so something must have happened between them for Gaara to become pregnant. Well, she didn't mind as long as Gaara was happy.
IoI
Naruto ate his food whilst under the close watch of Gaara. After one hour of effort and struggle, he had gotten Gaara to eat without throwing up. Temari and Kankurou had left long ago, to finish their own jobs. The redhead was waiting, mainly because it was his fault that Naruto hadn't finished his meal on time.
"I didn't know Temari could cook," Naruto spoke up, trying to break the silence.
"Yeah, she can cook, she has to take the motherly role for me and Kankurou," Gaara spoke up; unaware he was stroking his belly again. Mother … he would be a mother soon.
"Oh … I see," the blonde began eating again.
"I will learn to cook too," this startled Naruto a bit, the image of Gaara wearing an apron appeared in his mind. Naruto coughed and dropped his chopsticks, trying to calm himself down.
Damn, he was choking on food.
Gaara began panicking; he quickly got up from his chair and grabbed a glass and filled it up with water. He offered the glass to Naruto, who accepted it but grabbed his hand instead. The redhead was startled and couldn't fight. He hit Naruto's chest softly and fell onto his lap. The water was long forgotten and had been spilt. Neither cared when they had noticed the position they were in.
Gaara was sitting on Naruto's lap, one hand gripped the blonde's shirt tightly and the other hand was holding the empty glass. Naruto was staring down at Gaara who was sitting on his lap, they were so close, and both felt the heat of each other's breath on their faces.
Gaara's hand gripped the shirt tighter whilst his face became flushed and was as red as a boiled octopus. Naruto was blushing too, and had stopped choking for a while.
But, after a few silent seconds, Naruto began coughing again, this time harder. It distracted them from their position.
"Sorry … cough ... Gaara, I d-didn't … cough … mean … to … cough …," the blonde covered his mouth with his hand and began coughing harder. He hit his chest roughly, hating how every time he coughed, his throat began burning. Gaara was startled slightly and was pulled back to the real world. He tried to get off Naruto, but lost his footing and ended up pushing Naruto to the ground, along with the chair. Naruto was shocked but he caught Gaara right away because it was Gaara that had lost his balance.
Aside from Naruto's cough, both began to fall silent again. The back of the chair was digging into Naruto's back but he didn't move a millimeter because his body was pressed against Gaara's. The blonde's legs hung over the seat of the chair whilst Gaara's were straddling his body. The cough began dying down and he noticed the nice body heat radiating off the redhead. Gaara's face was on his chest, one hand gripped the shirt again. The blonde's hands were on Gaara's sides, to protect him from the harsh landing.
Slowly, Gaara tried sitting up, placing two hands on his chest and pushing his body up. His face was bright red and found it hard to look Naruto directly in the eyes. Heart pounding and stomach stirring, Gaara didn't feel sick. Naruto's scent, body heat … everything was driving him mad. His body felt uncomfortably hot and he couldn't calm his rapid heartbeat.
"Sorry … Naruto," he spoke slowly, still blushing madly. Naruto raised his body slowly; whilst the other was unaware he was still sat on the blonde's stomach.
"It's alright, at least I'm not choking anymore," Naruto chuckled nervously; he gently placed his hands under Gaara's arms and got up, with the redhead. He slowly put Gaara back down on his feet. The redhead blushed more, if possible, and looked down. Naruto, scratched his head nervously, a kind smile graced his lips.
Meanwhile, Temari was smiling to herself; she had witnessed the awkwardness between them.
IoI
"Eh? Next two weeks?" Naruto jumped from his seat. Gaara gasped quietly and Kankuro's eyes widened.
"Yeah, the elders have decided you will marry Gaara in the next two weeks, in Konoha. It will cause more trouble if we delay the marriage any longer because Gaara's belly will grow a lot in 4 months," Temari spoke calmly. The boys were still trying to regain their senses.
"O-okay, next two weeks …" Naruto's face was a mask of horror. Gaara looked worried and Kankurou looked like he was going to throw up.
"And the elders have sent a message to Konoha," Naruto screamed in horror when Temari spoke.
Naruto was stressing about how Tsunade and all his friends would know about it. He would have to marry Gaara because he made the redhead pregnant.
Tsunade was going to hit him, hard and probably Sakura too … Sai might congratulate him, Kakashi would give him two thumbs up, Iruka would probably scold him all day long and the others would give different opinions.
"Naruto please calm down," Temari spoke softly. The blonde took a deep breath and sat back down.
"Does that mean I will have to live in Naruto's house?" Gaara asked, finally regaining his senses. Naruto turned, slightly stunned, he had never thought about that.
Gaara glanced at Naruto and blushed. He didn't mind living in Konoha or Suna, both were the same. Konoha seemed a bit nicer though, the weather was better and Tsunade was there to help him with the pregnancy.
Naruto blushed too, it was now his new habit, when Gaara blush so would he. He couldn't help it, the redhead looked cute.
"What! Gaara will live in Konoha? No! I'm against it!" Kankurou shouted loudly, distracting both Jinchuuriki.
"Kankurou, if Naruto lived here with Gaara, you will be fighting with him every day," Temari looked tired. Gaara smiled when he heard those words, not caring that Kankurou and Naruto were glaring at each other.
"Then, I will welcome you to my apartment Gaara," Naruto smiled, ignoring Kankurou. Gaara nodded and blushed deeply.
They would … marry soon …
Fluff, it feels to fast for them to fall in love. But no, I think more problem with raise in the future.
Okay, I want to say, this fic will be very long (over 20 chapter maybe) because I just can't cut some points in this fic. So, if someone who hate too long fic please say it to me, maybe I can split this story into some fic. It will be very troublesome, but if you want please tell me.
The second is, there a reviewer who wants to see Naruto and Gaara in parenting moment. So, it mean there will be an OC for the baby. I don't really like OC as the reader but I don't mind OC as the author. So, maybe some of you don't really like OC. But, probably I will make a story about Naruto and Gaara with their baby, but I don't know if I will put it at here or not.
Please give your opinion
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