I want to say thank you to The Phophet's Prophet for your review, and for pointing out that the site didn't allow me to post the specific search engine. In case it wasn't obvious, I'm still new to the whole posting and editing process of the site. But I think I'm getting the hang of it! I know that my writing this "story" can come across as arrogant, especially since I know that there will be mistakes in my writing no matter how many times I check my work before posting. Actually the main reason for not posting something like this sooner, is because I was afraid I would come across as arrogant, and people would take it the wrong way. I want to stress that I know my writing needs work, and I would appreciate it if my readers point out my own flaws, so that way we can all learn from my mistakes. Again thanks for the review and for the heads up regarding the fact that this "story" could be taken down.

With that said, onward to Chapter 2!

Chapter 2

Leave yourself out of the story

In some stories there will be instances like this...

Example 1

Sanji's eye's turned into hearts at the sight of the beautiful woman in front of him. (XD)

I know it's not the greatest example ever, but I have read multiple stories where the author tends to write something "funny", and then they feel the need to put in parentheses something along the lines of how funny their previous statement was. Now this is a matter of personal opinion, but I feel that when an author does that, it takes away from the mood and tone of the story.

I don't know why it bothers me so much, but it probably has something to do with my philosophy of how a story should stay a story and that there is a time and place when a writer can address their audience. Think of it like you were reading a really good book, the author keeps the story with the story and saves all the comments towards the back of the book after the epilogue.

I guess what I'm trying to say is that when a writer buts into their story, it kind of comes across as they're laughing at their own joke or that they're breaking up the flow of the story. Not that there is anything wrong with that, but as I stated before, there is a time and place for addressing your audience. Here is a way you can do that without interrupting your story, create a footnote at the bottom of the page. That way, you can still get your opinion in the story, but also keep the flow and pace of the story uninterrupted.

I have something to add to my previously mentioned statement. As you know my dear reader, I said that there is a time and a place for interrupting your story. In stories where the point of view is strictly third person, and the setting has nothing to do with you what so ever, that is when it would be best to use the footnotes to add your opinion to the story. However in stories like this one, where you are addressing the reader, it is OK to add your thoughts to your writing. Just to clarify what I mean, I'll give you examples.

Example 1

Sanji's eye's turned into hearts at the sight of the beautiful woman in front of him (XD). He quickly dropped the money Nami-san had given him for food and darted towards her ( I wish that was me;) )

Example 2

Sanji's eye's turned into hearts at the sight of the beautiful woman in front of him. He quickly dropped the money Nami-san had given him for food and darted towards her.

*Please pretend that this is the end of the "chapter" where the footnote would start

Well everyone thanks for reading!

Man I wish I was the girl Sanji ran after XD

Well until next time.

Again, it's not the best example. But anyway, as you noticed in the first example, It kind of feels like I'm a part of the story, or trying to be. And in the second example, I'm using my opinions as more of a closing statement. Remember that this is a matter of personal opinion, but to me, the story sounds more professional when the opinions are saved until the end.

~Done

I hope it helps you out!

I also want to stress the fact that this "story" is mostly my thoughts and opinions of things I think sound awkward in stories I've read, and how I would go about fixing them if I were to edit them. I am by no means an English scholar, and I'm open to any suggestions that will help me improve my writing. I also want to apologize for any mistakes you may find in my "story" and I would appreciate you telling them to me so I can fix them. This story is just as much a learning experience for me as it is for you.

Thank you for reading. I hope you have a wonderful day/night. Bye~