Ch. 7

AN: Well, ok. Guys, I'm only writing this because I got five good reviews. BY THE WAY, I won't write the next chapter until I get 10 good reviews! STOP FLAMING OR I'LL REPORT YOU! Ebony isn't a Mary Sue ok? She isn't perfect, SHE'S A SATANIST! She has problems! She's depressed for G*d's sake!

She feels an aversion to activities? I should probably let this go…

*Draco and I held our pale white hands with black nail polish as we went upstairs.*

Two things could be happening:

1. Ebony and Draco are holding hands. Draco is wearing black nail polish. Their hands are pale.

2. Ebony and Draco are holding hands that have been hacked off of some poor guy's body. The cut off hands have been painted with black nail polish and they are pale.

At this point, it honestly could be either of them. I'd rather go with option 1, but I'll let you decide.

I had painted red Satanist signs into my nails. (See, does that sound like a Mary Sue to you?)

Yes. Yes, it does.

I waved at Vampire. *Dark misery was in his depressed eyes.*

1. Vampire/Harry's eyes are a dark colour. Vampire/Harry was miserable. He felt an aversion to activity.

2. Vampire/Harry's eyes are a dark colour. Misery had made a house and was living in his eyes. His eyes felt an aversion to activity.

As always, take your pick. Either of these choices could be true in such a twisted, crazy fanfic; and no, I will not drop the 'aversion to activity' thing. Just think of it as my running gag, or my '**** you' moment. You'll feel much better, just like tea makes me feel better when I correct awful grammar.

I guess he was jealous because he wanted to date me, but I was already dating Draco. Anyways, I went upstairs with Draco. I was excited. We went into his room and locked the door.

Draco shares that room with ten other guys. Did you kick them out of the room before you locked the door?

Then we started kissing passionately. We took off each other's clothes enthusiastically.

Edited Out: passive frenching

He felt me up and then I took off my top. I took off my black leather bra and he took off his pants.

Ok, black leather anything does not sound comfy to me. Isn't it all hot and muggy and rainy in England? How does she survive walking around in tight, black, leather clothing? I can barely survive hot weather in jeans. Do Mary Sue's not sweat, or are they remotely like normal people?

We went onto the bed. We made out. We had sex. (AN: See, is that stupid?)

Your description of it is. There is nothing redeemable in this chapter.

Edited out: capitalization of 'had' and 'sex'.

I orgasmed and screamed, "Draco! Draco!"

Suddenly I saw a tattoo on Draco's arm. It was a heart with a black arrow through it. On the tattoo, in bloody writing 'Vampire' was written.

If this was well written, I could call it a crappy soap opera!

I was so angry.

"You *******!" I shouted angrily. I jumped off of the bed.

You can't just get out of the bed normally? You have to jump? Really?

"No! No! But you don't understand!" Draco pleaded, but I knew what had happened between Draco and Vampire.

I don't understand this fanfic. I can sympathise with Draco completely. He and I are both thinking, "What the **** is Tara doing?*

"No you ****ing idiot! You probably have AID's anyways!"

Huffily, I got dressed and stomped out of the room. Draco ran out even though he was naked.

Draco just had sex in front of an uncertain number of possible guys in his room, and then he runs into the hall naked. He certainly isn't shy.

*He had a really big you-know-what but I was too mad to care.*

Because when I see a guy, all that I think about is the size of his 'you-know-what' and that determines if I will ever be angry at him. Kasz/;…..axZcvbg

I stomped into Professor Snape's class and saw Vampire and other students.

She memorised his timetable? After knowing him for a day? Creepy little girl… My friend writerperson101 knows my timetable, but we've known each other for a while now. Memorizing some guy's timetable after a day is just creepy…

"Vampire Potter, you're a mother****er!" I yelled.

How do you know if he ****'s his mother? Do you stalk him? Shouldn't you be mad at Draco and Vampire, not just Vampire? Speaking of Draco, I hope that he didn't follow her naked into the classroom. That would cause quite a scandal. I'm really surprised that whatever house Ebony is in hasn't lost a billion points by now. They didn't even take any points away from her house when they caught her having sex in the woods! Doesn't that strike you as odd? Shouldn't she be in class? Shouldn't Draco be in class? Evidently the staff at Hogwarts has decided that they just don't give a shit about Ebony, Draco, Vampire/Harry and their issues anymore.