My Immortal - The Edited Version

by TheGodKings

Yes, you read that right. The edited version. This is what happens when two snarky, sarcastic college students decide they have nothing better to do with their time than spell and grammar check the infamous 'My Immortal'. Come on guys, if we can edit this monstrosity, you can read it. Rated T for Light's swearing and because it's My Immortal.

5. The One Where Draco LOVES HER

Editor's Note- Come at me, chapter 5! From this point on 'My Immortal' will be co-edited. My esteemed colleague will edit the even numbered chapters and I'll be editing the odd numbered. Be nice to her- she has very fragile self-esteem =)

-Light.

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AN: STOP flaming! If you flame it means you're a prep or a poser! The only reason Dumbledore swore is because he had a headache, ok?And on top of that, he was mad at them for having sex! PS: I'm not updating until I get five good reviews!

Dumbledore made and Draco and I follow him. He kept shouting at us angrily.

"You ludicrous fools!" he shouted.

I started to cry tears of blood down my pale face. Draco comforted me. When we got back to the castle Dumbledore took us to Professor Snape and Professor McGonagall who were both looking very angry.

"They were having sexual intercourse in the Forbidden Forest!" he yelled in a furious voice.

"Why did you do such a thing, you mediocre dunces?" asked Professor McGonagall.

"How dare you?" demanded Professor Snape.

And then Draco shrieked. "BECAUSE I LOVE HER!"

Everyone was quiet. Dumbledore and Professor McGonagall still looked mad but Professor Snape said. "Fine. Very well. You may go up to your rooms."

Draco and I went upstairs while the teachers glared at us.

"Are you okay, Ebony?" Draco asked me gently.

"Yeah, I guess." I lied. I went to the girls' dorm and brushed my teeth and my hair and changed into a low-cut black floor-length dress with red lace all around it and black high heels. When I came out Draco was standing in front of the bathroom and he started to sing 'I Just Wanna Live' by Good Charlotte. I was so flattered, even though he wasn't supposed to be there. We hugged and kissed. After that, we said goodnight and he reluctantly went back into his room.

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Editor's Note- There was actually fuck all I had to do with this chapter. It's not up to me to fix her complete disregard for cannon. Like boys not being allowed in the girls' dorm or Snape being so passive about the whole situation. I'd also like to say that I wish my old secondary school was so accepting of having sex on school grounds. But I guess it's okay, because they're in love -_-

I can't figure out why she'd be flattered that Draco sung that song to her, either.

-Light.