I threw in better transitions, took away that potty mouth on Ruby, and put in everyone's landing strategy. I also added some conversation boosters so you get an idea of what's going on in their emotions and who is talking.

Show Me What You've Got!

Ruby awoke and began to gather her things making sure to get some of the pancakes they were serving with some juice. She sat down next to Yang bumping into the boy in the red hoodie on her way there. She turned back to look at him, a blank expressions fixed on his face, and Yang obviously noticed.

"Taking an interest in tall, dark, and shady?" She said with a smirk.

"NO!" She cried, "It's just," She sighed and looked at her sister with those silvery orbs of compassion, "he was the boy who they carted off last night; the one with the nightmares."

"Oh really?" Yang said surprised as she looked as he walked, "Is he okay?" She asked with concern.

"I couldn't tell, he seemed lost in thought, is it weird that all he had for breakfast was an apple?" Ruby asked as she quickly filled her mouth with syrupy pancakes.

Yang leaned back, "Well it's better than princess over there." She said pointing at Weiss who had a grapefruit and some water while her friend, or butler, she couldn't tell, cut up a piece of meat with precision and grace, making sure to leave some for Weiss.

"It's heiress actually," She corrected her sister who looked at her as if she was unamused, "and yeah I see what you mean."

A boy in a blue and gold coat sat down across from them, his hat balanced gently in his hand as he set it on the table. "Hello ladies, have you heard about the initiation this morning?"

"No, what's there to know?" Yang said sensing Ruby's discomfort.

"It'll be a combat trial to test our prowess and ability to work with people who we're paired with. I'd advise pairing with someone you trust. As for me, I've got my sights set on an individual of note already, and what a beauty you are." He said as he smiled gently at Yang, his eyes revealing a sharp intelligence.

"Oh, a flirt, you're kinda cute you know." She said trying to beat him at his own game, as their eyes shared a mutual drive to win.

"And rich and talented, but those things don't matter to me. I'm here to make a difference and to find love, and I think Lady Luck is on my side because I've found both. So Yang, would you like to form a team with me?" He said giving her a bat of soft violet eyes.

Ruby was agitated to say the least, this guy didn't know them, he was full of himself, and he wanted to separate her from Yang! What a jerk! "Sorry sweet thing, but I'm going to just late fate take its course and pair up with whoever clicks with me." Yang said, looking at Ruby with a smile.

He smiled, "I understand, and truly you are kind to protect your sister by not excluding her from the group. You are truly as dazzling as the sun, and I hope fortune favors you. As for me I will roll the dice elsewhere and let the wind guide my choice, au revoir amour!" He said as he stood and waved as he walked away.

"Well that was different." Ruby said.

"Yeah." Yang said dreamily as she looked at him.

"You can't be serious…" Ruby said with a half full mouth.

"What!? I love to watch him walk away, nice ass…" She said with a purr.

"Yang!" Ruby squealed in a pitch high enough to break glass.

"Kidding, I was kidding, but maybe he was right. Maybe we should branch out." She said giving her sister an encouraging look.

"Lalalalala I'm not listening!" The younger sister cried as she plugged her ears.

Caradin Cross

Everyone gathered in the locker room and began gathering their weapons, Professor Ozpin had advised Caradin to leave his coffin, but the coffin was more than a carrier for his weapon, it was a part of him. He carried it proudly as a part of him. He did however store his more precious items in the locker. His gauntlets; they were made of leather and had Dust in vials on the backs of them, with his family crest which also functioned as an aiming scope. Luckily with his last name nobody knew he was related to Beatrice "Barrier" Blake. He just played off the heritage and lived the life of a gun for hire. "Those gauntlets are not something a common street thug would have now would they, Caradin Cross."

He turned around and saw the kid in the red hoodie from earlier. "Oh, I uh, I guess not."

"I've seen gauntlets like these before, on some bounty hunters who also shared the last name Cross, they can be used for terrible things. And it's something only a high ranking family would have, someone like Beatrice Blake?"

He wheeled around and slammed the kid into the locker, "If you know what's good for you, you won't bring it up to anyone!"

The kid looked at him, his red slit eyes asking for a fight, "What'll you do huh? Beat me up? Don't make me laugh, I've fought a thousand like you and none of them were all that special; if you really want to be stealthy you'd better be careful how you display your abilities."

He was shocked this kid was so ruthless and reckless. Did he really have a death wish? "What is your problem?" Caradin asked with confusion as he set him down.

"People who get in my way, and people who get in over their head. Now if you'll excuse me I have to go." He said walking off.

He saw the kid walk over three lockers and draw two blades. One was an ornate kilij and the other was an X-21 Chain-blade. He mounted one on his tailbone and the other on his back. He threw up his hood and some light armor and walked out of the locker room. Caradin took a moment to gather himself before heading out to Beacon Cliff, it would be a long day.

Deverou Tenebrous

Deverou stood on the launch pad with the other students and listened to Ozpin's speech about partners and teams. Weiss had talked to him earlier about getting Pyrrha on their team but it looked like she hadn't had any luck. Knowing Weiss though, she had some scheme to work out the details of the partnering contract to get her on their team. He watched the students get launched one by one and he tracked Weiss trajectory as they fell towards the forest. It was up to them how they wanted to land so when he grew close to the trees he used his chain-scythe to wrap around one of the tree limbs and swing to the forest floor. As he landed he looked up to see where Weiss had gone only to lock eyes with the boy in the blue and gold coat from earlier, "What a surprise, I was hoping to run into you again."

Luxus Rayfor von Würfel

The minute he felt the launch pad lurch he began focusing his Semblance in order to slow his descent. If he had tried to stop all at once, his clothes would stay there and he'd be flying naked into a forest full of Grim. He slowed his descent and floated down to the tree making sure to check his weapons as he went. On his belt he held three clips of basic ammo, and he had Dust rounds on the shoulder holster where he kept his high powered revolver Red King and the two cylinder's for it that contained armor piercing and shredder rounds. He checked Lilith and Esmeralda at his sides and his deck of cards to make sure everything was in order as he rested gently on the branch to see Deverou Tenebrous tuck and roll onto the ground in front of him.

Deverou Tenebrous

His jaw sunk and he felt all hope he had for forming a team with Weiss dissipate. As the boy with the coffin crash landed next to them and locked eyes with Deverou and the other man he smiled, "Cool I got Luxus and the Tenebrous kid, score!"

Deverou felt his confidence slowly draining, he was with two people he didn't know and didn't understand, and on top of that only one slot was available for Weiss now. He would have to speak up, "Excuse me, I was wondering if we might find Lady Weiss. I am needed and plus she would make a great asset to our group."

"I could do without the pampered princess." Luxus said.

"Same here." Caradin added.

"Besides, the last member of our party will be arriving shortly." As he said this, a boy with a red hoodie ran out from behind a tree and bumped into Caradin. His hood flying off and his red slit eyes meeting with Luxus' as he smiled, "And now he's here."

Bloody Knives

Knives knew in free fall he'd have to be careful about displaying his powers, so he pulled out "The Ripper" and revved the blade jamming it into a tree truck, and rode it down the tree like a skateboard. He hadn't accounted for all the wood chips, because when he landed he spent a good bit of time picking them out of his skin. But as soon as they were out the wounds would close up. He had the fastest healing rate that the program had seen, Cain used to say. He didn't know how that was possible as GH37 was a failure, but he knew it must have had something to do with his aura. He threw his hood up and decided he'd avoid eye contact, if he could do that he could get away and make it to the temple with ease. He ran out from his landing spot and immediately ran into the buffoon from earlier and his eyes locked with the boy in the blue and gold coat, "And now he's here." He said.

"What!?" Caradin yelled, "This asshole can't be on our team!"

"I agree, Weiss would be much better suited to…" Deverou spoke up.

"And you wish to go against the headmaster's orders?" Luxus chimed.

"I, uh," He stammered trying to get it out before resigning, "no…" Deverou replied with weary resignation.

"Besides, I could easily overpass Weiss seeing as I know every single one of you and all about you, as does Knives over there." Luxus smugly replied.

"Knives, as in Bloody Knives, the street assassin who was said to be impossible to kill!?" Caradin cried.

"Not impossible, nobody just ever tried hard enough." The kid commented, "Look Luxus I agreed to help you out because you said you would trust me, if you want these two added to your master plan I don't care, just remember this." He threw up his hood and shouldered his way past Deverou and Caradin, "Stay out of my way and we'll get along fine."

Luxus smiled, "Just show me what you've got and we'll see."

They walked off deeper into the forest and took the first step towards becoming Hunters.

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