Golden Eagle

by TheNotoriousNovelist

Alicia Blaise was a 15-year-old girl with anxiety issues that just wanted to be brave. When she moves to Paris to live with her father and attend school, she finds herself in possession of the Eagle Miraculous inhabited by a Kwami named Donno. Now the superhero Golden Eagle, she must team up with Ladybug and Cat Noir to save Paris from Hawk Moth and his evil akuma. DISCONNECTED

16. Another Author's Note (I'm sorry!)

Alas... I've been disillusioned with this story. I wanted it to have a solid plot that made it so Golden Eagle was vital to the team but she's just become a third wheel to Ladybug and Cat Noir. She isn't vital! And the chapters have become episodic in nature when that's not what I wanted.

I wanted to focus on Alicia and her relation to the Eagle Miraculous! Golden eagles are usually a symbol of bravery and freedom. Alicia suffers from social anxiety so she needs to learn to be brave and to feel free.

And the story's moving too fast! A month hasn't even passed yet Alicia seems to have all but conquered her fears!

I enjoyed the villains, though! Screen Queen, Guardian, Animeniac, The Prankster... They were a joy! And I had more villain ideas too! But I didn't feel like I represented them very well...

This is not the story I wanted to write. I think I might discontinue this story, have a good think and start a rewrite.

In preparation for a rewrite, here are some things I want to talk about:

Villains - Did you like them? What didn't you like about them? Were they missing anything? Would you like to see them again in the rewrite? Do you have any ideas for other villains?

Plot - What do you think is needed for the plot? Should it focus more on Alicia or more on Golden Eagle? Have any ideas?

Relationships - Alicia befriended a lot of people very fast. I don't like this and feel that it should have taken longer, even with the main group's kindness. It would have taken longer for her to open up to them. However, I do ultimately want them all to be friends!

Things I hope will return for the rewrite and what I'd like to add:

1. Alicia gaining the scar on her hand.

2. Alicia's Irish-French heritage and family history with the Eagle Miraculous.

3. The anime references (loved them!)

4. A continuous storyline.

5. Better timing.

6. Something only Golden Eagle can do!

I'm sorry if you'll miss this version of the story. I'll be leaving it up for you! I'll also be posting what I had written of Chapter XIV (14). Hey, do you want the Roman Numerals to return too?

-Noto