Kingdom Hearts: A World Beyond

by A New Pencil

Inspired by The OC Maniac's "May Your Heart Go Beyond". With the Keyblade War finished and the price of misusing the power of waking paid, Sora assumed he would fade away for good. But it seems destiny isn't done with him yet, as he is now stranded in a brand new world with a darkness that can't be fought alone. Can he find his way back to the world he knows?

38. Chapter ?: Reflection

I'm going to say it.

I think I made a mess with my story.

Over the past year, I've been looking back at A World Beyond, which is not even a year old, and honestly, I can't help but wonder if what I've written was great at all. Sure, the ideas are good, but execution-wise, I think I fell short. The reviews have helped me see a lot of where I messed up.

Sora was written way out of proportion during the Sports Festival, and it's been weighing on me since I wrote Chapter 28. My attempt at trying to give Sora some form of struggle actually seems to have backfired in my face. I feel like I've actually made a whole different character instead of the goofball we know and love, and I hate it.

Even the visions of Sora seeing Riku and Kairi in Shoto and Momo. Like seriously? I honestly think this was a stupid move on my part.

His interactions with Class 1-A have been pretty minimal, as well, looking back. It feels like what Anti-Sora said in 33 was true. It felt like Sora was merely pretending to be their friend. At this point, the MHA cast feel more like side characters, and that's something I can't stomach.

33 had Riku and Sora talking about guiding them too, but not mentioning anything about befriending them. Honestly, that was terrible on my part. They should be helping and befriending them, not... whatever the heck I wrote.

And let's not begin to talk about the prologue. While I'm proud of what I wrote there, I feel like I could've done something better with it. Again, decent ideas. Terrible execution.

Overall... it doesn't feel like KH x MHA anymore. It just honestly feels like one side is glorified and the other is regulated to the background. The Heroes should be doing more in the story, and I've ignored that for far too long. That's something I can't stand.

Which is why... I'm considering a rewrite of this story entirely.

I'm not completely sure if I should do so, considering how far I've made it with this story (A whole 37 chapters), and I don't want to kill it early. But I feel like I could've done a better job with this story, and I want to show it. My goal with this isn't just to express my form of writing, but also to make a story that people can enjoy reading.

So I have but one question, directed to you.

What are your thoughts on me rewriting the story?

Would you be okay with it, or would you see me continue with what I have?

Though I feel like I know what decision I need to take, I want to ask you, my readers, if you have any feelings on this matter. Don't be soft. If you have criticisms, then voice them.

Until our paths cross again!