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Hooooly Zeus ! Thank you so much for the feedback, it is overwhelming. I started writing this mainly for my own enjoyment and hoped maybe a couple people would read it. Thank you so much, this inspires me to continue writing.
Tell me what aspects of my writing are lacking the most, I wish to improve them.
Poseidon stood on a beach in Virginia watching trees getting uprooted while 50 foot waves pounded against his back. He watched in awe not even he, the Stormbringer had only made a hurricane this large once. On that occasion he had to rest for days before he could make even a small Category 1 hurricane. He could not pinpoint Percy's location due to the storm, so he had to make the storm bring him to Percy.
'If Percy ain't the single most powerful demigod ever, my name is Zeus.' Poseidon thought to himself before dissolving into water and letting the storm carry him away.
After a surprisingly tiring struggle against rampaging winds Poseidon made his way to the center of the storm. He descended into the clearing where seven demigods had enjoyed their victory feast not even an hour ago. He solidified back into human form and looked around.
The first thing his eyes found was his son, hovering in the air. His hands stretched out to either side, his upper body arched backwards and his face looking straight up. One continues scream could be heard throughout the entire clearing, the sound sent a jolt of pain through Poseidon's hearth. He wondered what could invoke such pain, rage and suffering in the young demigod. However he did not take any time to ponder it, but instead started running towards his son. He barely noticed the stench of blood that filled the air, but it made him look around. The sight that met him made him stumble, he could feel tears streaming down his face. What could have done this? Who would do this to his son?
He knelt a second beside Sally's limp body before making a three fingered claw over his hearth and pushing outwards. He would have married Sally had ne not already had a wife, she was a queen from Ancient Times reborn as a simple peasant. He would have made her a queen again. He tor himself away from her side and continued his sprint towards his son.
"PERCY, PERCY!" He shouted at the top of his lungs.
"Percy, calm down, PERCY!"
As he got closer he all of a sudden realized how thin Percy looked, like all the mussels in his body had all of a sudden disappeared. Poseidon remembered what Percy had told him about the Mount St. Helens event and came to a scaring conclusion. Percy was consuming his own body in order to power the storm. He would kill himself if not stopped.
Poseidon jolted into action and managed to put even more speed into his sprint. The second he was within reach he jumped with all his might towards Percy. If he could break Percy's concentration he might be able to stop the hurricane.
Poseidon felt like he had hit the side of a mountain. Percy did not move an inch. He seemed, however, to notice something hitting him. His face turned and the sight of his face broke Poseidon's hearth. His eyes were so swollen from crying you could just barely see the bloodshot eyes if you tried. The entire front of his shirt was wet from tears. Percy's eyes found Poseidon's and recognition was visible across his face.
"Dad?" the croak was so hoarse it was a miracle he was not coughing blood.
"Yes, it is me, ma'Boy, im here."
"Dad," Percy's voice was quaking and the power of the storm with it.
"I love you, son."
At the word son Percy started sobbing into Poseidon's shoulder.
"It's gonna be alright, you'll…." Poseidon was cut off when Percy fainted against his shoulder and they both fell.
Poseidon dissolved them into water before solidifying them besides Percy's mother. Poseidon snapped his fingers and stretchers appeared besides each body. Poseidon levitated the bodies onto the stretchers. Once he had secured his hold on Percy the stretchers, the Sea god and his son disappeared in a flash of light.
"Apollo! Tend to Percy! Artemis! TELL ME WHAT HAPPENED!" For the second time in less than an hour Zeus had to pick himself up from the Throne Room floor. He was about to yell back at Poseidon when he noticed the stretchers.
"APOLLO! ARTEMIS! DO AS YOU WERE TOLD! NOW!"