Llamas Eviscerate 'jO Bekke at HUgwRts'

by Angelus Nox

Here is our first fan fiction commentary! Join us as we read through a story riddled with plot holes, total character personality derailment, and a Mary Sue main character who can't seem to remember her own name. Will we, along with our editing llama, be able to tear the story apart?

15. Chapter 15

aN Stup flaMIN MI STURY!1111111111111111111111111 Dayrryl is AmAZIN!111111111111111

I doubt that anyone is flaming Dayrryl. Just the story.

Well, he is "editing". I'd flame him too.

I LVUU U DARRYL

CHAPTr 15 Da secret of HARMONY

"To have harmony, you must learn grammar and spelling. Only then can there be peace on earth."

And mercy mild. "Grammar. Spelling. Sentence structure. Characterization. Long ago, the four writing traits lived together in harmony. Then, everything changed when jo Bekke attacked. Only a good beta, master of all four traits, could stop her. But, when the world needed one most, they vanished."

So HARMONY told us she had a secrit 2 tll us. i got all exited. "WUT is it,' ei esked.

Then the hugwetrs epres got there. We got of.

And, you know, HARMONY didn't take the five seconds required to tell them what the secret was.

den we saw hamlet

Hamlet! Not again! Leave! Get out of this place!

and he was aall lik, "FIRST YEERS GET UR BUTS OVR HER!11111111111"

Ah. So professional. And, I know that I say "was like" a lot, but really? " he was aall lik"?

So we got oovr der. Hamlet den sed, "now evry1 get on a tracter."

A tractor. Really? I guess HUgwRts doesn't have the funding for thestrals like Hogwarts does.

we AKK got on tractors 2g2 hugwrts. The rid der waz relly cull. EXCEPT… … … … … … … … … … … …. .. .. ..

...and?

HARMONY FELL OFF DA TRACTER!

Oh no!

2 B CONTNUDE\

Dude! No nudity! Seriously! This is supposed to be somewhat kid friendly ish.

Yeah... Totally...