Episode Thirty-Three: Screwing it All!
Episode 33! Yay! All right everybody, getting down to the nitty gritty here! Only nine left! LET'S DO IT TO IT! (Can't believe I just said that…)
TDU Train, Conductor's Room
"Last time on Total Drama Universe," Chris began. "Contestants visited Yoshi's Island, where they had to find eggs that were accidently spilled by an INTERN, and NOT me. Melaney prophesized Dinkleberg, and Angel was told she was eventually going to end up killing herself. After Sonic and Melaney started dating, the former was quickly thrown off when the others voted without them. What will happen next? Will Angel figure out how to leave the show without violating her contract? Where's Olaf? Find out right here, right now, on Total…Drama…Universe!"
(Screw it all, screw it all, can't take this crap anymore)
Loser Class
Zoey, Joey, and Meowth were sitting on the benches in Loser Class, watching Morgan continuously use her wand to smash a crate in to the wall. "Why do I keep ending up in Loser Class?!" she exclaimed. "It was Joey's fault this time!"
"Hey!" Joey exclaimed. "No it…okay, maybe it was."
"At least you didn't get attacked by Bowser Jr. just to save a stupid koopa egg!" Zoey shouted, standing up. "I'm going to kill Chris, and I mean it!"
"None of you have the right to complain!" Meowth shouted. "I found eggs for the Dorito-head and the twerp! I should be the only one whining over here!"
"Wait, why would you find an egg for Phineas?" Joey asked curiously.
Meowth flinched. "Uh…no reason!"
Bathroom Confessional
(Meowth)
"I gotta watch my big Meowth, or my tail is toast!"
Loser Class
Morgan smacked the crate against the wall one last time, smashing it to pieces. "He probably did it because both of them are evil," she snarled, glaring at Meowth. "I'm not surprised, actually."
"I'm not evil!" Meowth exclaimed nervously. "I'm just…misunderstood."
She scoffed. "Yeah right." She flung the remains of the crate in to the wall.
First Class
Melaney, Tails, Angel, Phineas, and Ash were in First Class, waiting for Chris to burst in to the room at any moment. "I can't believe Sonic got voted off right when we started dating!" Melaney exclaimed, pacing back and forth in front of the couch. "This sucks!"
"I'd say it doesn't…but it'd be a huge lie, really," Tails stated, hugging a pillow to his chest. "Just when I thought the alliance couldn't get any more screwed up…" he sighed. "Could you do me a favor and not get kicked off? I'd like to keep my sanity and my nose in place until the season ends."
"Yeah Tails," Melaney groaned, rolling her eyes. "I'm doing it for you, not the million." She sighed and sat down. "What're you gonna do after the show's over?"
He shrugged. "What I've always done. Fight Eggman with Sonic and invent more stuff…then try to forget everything that happened this season." Melaney grabbed the pillow and slapped him across the face with it. "Ow! What was that for?!"
"For being stupid," she said. "You can't tell me that you want to forget Angel!"
"First thing I'm building when I get home is an amnesia gun," he said, burying his face in the pillow. "The sooner I can get over this the better."
"You're an idiot," Melaney said, rolling her eyes. "You both are. You guys need to suck it up and get back together before somebody blows themselves up."
"She's not going to blow herself up…" he groaned.
"I was talking about you too!" she exclaimed. "You're going to crash a plane or something!"
"Been there done that!" he exclaimed, getting off the couch. "And if there's someone who needs to suck it up, it's her, not me! I've been trying to reason with her about this for the last three days and she still won't listen! She hates me, and I can't change her mind."
Melaney grabbed his shoulders and shook his vigorously. "SHE FREAKING DIED FOR YOU, TAILS! I DON'T THINK THAT'S HATRED! I THINK THAT'S LOVE!"
Tails pushed her away. "That was before…before I turned in to an idiot. Ugh, why'd I do it?! I'm so stupid!"
"Great!" Melaney exclaimed. "At least one of you realizes it!"
"That's not funny…" he groaned. He sighed and stood up. "I'm going to my room." He flew in to the other car, slamming the door behind him.
Bathroom Confessional
(Tails)
"She can't be right…Angel said that she hated me. But it wouldn't be the first time she's hid something…"
(Phineas)
"If those two get back together, I'm going to kill them, the cat, AND the Yoshi! One of them's got to leave today…"
First Class, Ash's Room
Ash had his stereo cranked up on high, feeling slightly better about the news of his father. He was still depressed, but had realized that he couldn't dwell on it forever. "I wanna be the very best, like no one ever was," he sang along, Pikachu sitting on his head. "To catch them is my test, to train them is my cause…" He grinned up at Pikachu. "We definitely would've failed that test, huh buddy?" Pikachu nodded in agreement.
"ASH!" Melaney's voice came from outside. "YOU CAN'T SING! NOW OPEN THE DANG DOOR ALREADY!"
He sighed and threw a shoe at the speaker, hitting the off button. He opened the door. "What's up?"
"I need your help to get Twitterpated back together," she answered. He slammed the door in her face. "Please don't shut me out again! Please don't slam the door! You don't have to keep your—"
He opened the door. "You can't sing either."
"C'mon, Ash," she pleaded, walking in to his room. "I know you can't stand Angel anymore, but she still wants to be your friend!"
"Hm, sounds familiar, doesn't it?" Ash said, putting down his water bottle after taking a sip. "It's just like that with her and Tails. She can't stand him anymore, but he still wants to be her boyfriend!"
"That's different!" Melaney exclaimed.
"How so?" he asked.
"Because you'd already figured your dad would never come back anyway!" she explained. "Even if he's dead, you already labelled him as a bad person! Angel didn't know Tails would do that. C'mon Ash—"
"No," he said quickly. He sat on the bed. "A life is still worth more than a relationship. There are plenty of Magikarp in the sea. They'll both move on."
She sat down next to him. "But there's only one shiny Magikarp," she said quietly. "What if they're both shiny for each other? With perfect UV's—"
"IVs," he corrected. He sighed. "I hate it when you people use Pokemon logic to convince me of stuff…fine."
"Yay!" Melaney exclaimed. "We have to wait for the right moment though."
"Yeah, yeah, whatever," he said, pushing her out the door. "Bye-bye."
Bathroom Confessional
(Melaney)
"That was progress…I think."
First Class, Angel's Room
Angel had been cleaning out her closet, ready to leave the competition. And by cleaning out, I mean chucking everything out the window. "I never really don't wear this stuff," she said, looking at the Young & Reckless hat and the dress she wore when Dinkleberg happened. She flung the window open and dropped both, watching them fly away in the wind. She reached in to her pocket and pulled out the sapphire Tails had given her. She closed her eyes and sighed. "He doesn't love you anymore, Angel. It's worthless…" With a shaky hand she was about to throw it out the window, right before Chris burst in to the room.
"It's challenge time!"
Angel sighed and placed the gem back in her pocket. I'll let go later.
Arendelle, Town Square
"Welcome to Arendelle!" Chris announced. "Again." The small kingdom was exactly the way it had been before, filled with people bustling around the town.
"Hi, I'm Olaf and I like warm hugs!" Olaf said, waving to a man who got distracted and walked straight in to a pole.
Chris cleared his throat. "I'd say today's challenge is easy, but it really isn't. So I'll say…today's challenge is like hell. Because it's based off Sonic the Hedgehog."
"That doesn't sound too bad," Melaney said with a shrug.
"2006."
Tails almost had a heart attack at that moment.
Bathroom Confessional
(Angel)
"I picked a good day to plan on leaving!"
(Tails)
"What?! HASN'T CHRIS LEARNED THAT EVERYONE HATES THAT GAME?! Wait a minute…people watch playthroughs on line to see people rage quit…oh God! Sonic, you're so lucky to be off this stupid show!"
Arendelle, Town Square
"Yup," Chris said with a smirk, watching Tails puke in to a nearby bush. "Today's challenge is based off of Sonic 06. For the challenge, you'll have to save Princess Elise from the skinny, not-fat, totally doesn't look like Eggman Dr. Eggman. And by Elise and Eggman, I mean Princess Anna of Arendelle and Marshmallow the snow monster."
"PUT ME DOWN, MARSHMALLOW!" a voice came from behind a large building. Marshmallow emerged from behind it, Anna in his hand. "Oh wow, we're up high…" she said nervously. She spotted Chris and glared at him. "YOU!"
"Yes?" Chris asked, a giant grin on his face.
Anna tried to escape Marshmallow's grip, but failed. She sighed. "Where's Elsa? Or Jack or Kristoff or Sven or anybody?!"
Chris shrugged. "The Queen's probably doing some kingdom business, Jack is with the Guardians, and Kristoff and Sven are probably off doing something with ice." Anna chucked a snowball at his face. "I probably deserved that."
Angel was about to sneak out of sight when Tails saw her. "Angel, where are you going?" he asked. The others turned and looked at her.
Bathroom Confessional
(Angel)
"So…so close."
Arendelle, Town Square
She crossed her arms. "I'm ditching this stupid show…and all of you guys."
"Why?!" Melaney exclaimed.
"Because I can't take this crap anymore!" she shouted. "Between him and Chris and getting told I'm gonna die, the money's not worth it! And it's not like I can spend it without getting arrested, so what's the point?!"
Chris held up a stack of about a dozen papers. "Well, according to your contract here, if you leave the show by any means other than getting voted off by your fellow competitors, I get to turn you in to the police from your home world!" he began laughing, then stopped when she ripped up the contract. "Yeah…" he took out another stack. "The good thing about lawyers is that they make lots of copies."
Angel took the stack and ripped it in to little pieces. "Chris, does it look like I give a sh—"
"Whoa, whoa, whoa," Anna said, finally escaping Marshmallow's grip. She landed in Chef's arms and patted his chest before getting down. "Thanks, Chef." She turned to Angel. "Are you really going to give up your freedom just to get off the show, Angel?"
She nodded. "Anna, I can't keep trying to defy who I am. Thank you for everything…and tell Elsa too." She started walking away.
"Wait!" Tails exclaimed, following her. "Angel, you can't do this! If they find out where you are, they'll kill you! You can't—"
"And what do you care?!" she exclaimed, face him. "There's no reason for you to worry about me! You said it yourself, the feeling's mutual. I don't care about you anymore, so—" Tails tried to grab her hand, but ended up pulling the glove off instead. "Give me my glove!" she exclaimed.
"Uh-oh," Anna whispered.
"Not until you promise that you won't get yourself killed!" he exclaimed, holding it away from her.
"I'm never promising you anything ever again!" she yelled. She started to back away again. "If it was the other way around you'd break it, so why should I keep mine? I've had enough of your lies!"
Tails followed her, feeling the ice she left on the ground through his shoes. "I'm not lying!" he shouted. "I was just mad! I never stopped caring—I still do care! Just please, listen to me for once—"
"I said I've had ENOUGH!" she screamed. A blast of ice escaped her hand almost hitting him. He ducked out of the way just in time, causing it to hit the fjord. The water began turning in to ice, spreading across the boats and growing close to the square. She backed away slowly before breaking in to a sprint toward the North Mountain through the ice and snow.
Anna looked around, then pointed at a common person. "You," she said, getting his attention. "Please, find Queen Elsa. She'll know what to do." The man nodded, then ran toward the castle. She turned to Chris. "Chris, you need to cancel the challenge. If you don't we'll all freeze to death! Including you!"
"Sorry, no can do," he said with a shrug. "We're running out of time to get this season finished with. I can't—" Anna grabbed him by the collar of his shirt and punched him in the face. "All right! We'll do the challenge somewhere else. Jeez…" he turned to the contestants. "Two of you—and Olaf—"
"Yay!" Olaf exclaimed.
"Are going to go up the North Mountain and find Angel by tomorrow so we can unfreeze the place and leave," he continued. "Whoever does it gets immunity for the next two challenges."
"I volunteer as tribute," Melaney stated. Joey sighed in relief as he realized she wasn't going to volunteer him, but was still shoved on the ground.
"I'll go too," Tails offered.
"No!" everyone else shouted.
"You're the reason why we're in this mess!" Morgan exclaimed. "You couldn't have just left her alone, could you—"
Ash stepped forward, stopping the argument. "I'll go with Melaney. If there's anyone she'll listen to, it's the two of us." They began walking toward the mountain with Olaf, soon disappearing in to the blankets of snow.
Chris turned to his remaining contestants. "Perfect! A sucky cast for a sucky game!" Morgan sprayed him with an Aguamenti Charm. "WILL YOU STOP HURTING ME?!"
North Mountain
The stars glow bright in the sky tonight
No moonlight to be seen
An angel in isolation…and it looks like…that's me
The wind is howling like that Plasma girl inside
Couldn't keep her in, heaven knows I've tried
You let them in, you let them see
Now be the bad girl you're always meant to be
Conceal, don't feel, don't go and fall
Don't go and fall! (throws Elsa's glove to the wind)
Screw it all, screw it all!
Can't take this crap anymore!
Screw it all, screw it all!
He'll never be my Four!
I don't care what the world will say
Let the fights rage on
The drama never bothered me anyway. (hat flies away)
It's funny how a blizzard makes the fire die away
And the flames that once controlled me can't get to me today!
It's time to see where I can go
To really see this ice and snow (repairs stairs to ice castle)
No good, no bad, no sides for me!
I'm free! (begins running up stairs)
Screw it all, screw it all!
I am one with the snow and sky!
Screw it all, screw it all!
Like an angel I can fly!
Here I stand, and here I stay (bursts through doors in to ice castle)
Let the fights rage on
My power flurries through the air and all around
My spear's the weapon that will freeze their souls right to the ground
And one world crystallizes with an icy blast (recreates ice chandelier)
Of course I'm turning back, I can't run from my past! (flings sapphire away)
Screw it all, screw it all!
And I'll transform like dusk to dawn (uses ice to change in to Team Plasma uniform)
Screw it all, screw it all!
That Plasma girl's not gone!
Here she stands in the light of day (walks out on to repaired balcony)
Let the fights rage on!
The drama never bothered me anyway. (slams door)
Angel sighed. "Why the hell did I just sing that whole song?" She turned and looked at her reflection in the ice pillars. Her DC apparel had been replaced with the gray uniform, a mini-skirt, a V-neck blouse that ended just below her ribcage, and a gray boot for her real leg. To top it off was a headband similar to the one from the night of Dinkleberg, the snowflake replaced with the Plasma logo.
Agent 452—Angelica Icirrus—was back.
Arendelle, Castle
Anna crossed her arms. "How is this any better?" she exclaimed. The group was standing in the ballroom of the castle, the temperature steadily declining outside. "You should've gone somewhere where it isn't freezing! AND LEFT ME HERE!" She sighed as Marshmallow picked her up again.
"Sheesh," Chris muttered. "I thought you were supposed to be the happy bubbly one."
"I am," Anna said. "I just don't like it when I'm forced to be kidnapped by snow monsters for entertainment. Why didn't you go back and time and attack Snow White or something?"
Chris shrugged. "The ratings." He turned to the remaining contestants. "So…yeah. Battle Marshmallow. Save the princess. Raise my paycheck. Oh yeah, and if you hurt her, we'll all probably all get turned in to ice statues by the Queen…"
"If we don't freeze to death first," Morgan muttered.
"Either way I won't have to deal with you people anymore!" Chris exclaimed. "Ready? GO!"
Joey ran head first at Marshmallow. "SAVE THE PRINCESS AND WIN THE MILLION!" he screeched. He crashed in to its leg, just barely missing one of its sharp icicles. He began climbing up, unnoticed by the snow monster. "I'll save you Princess Anna!" he exclaimed.
Marshmallow looked down, realizing that Joey was climbing its leg. It groaned and flung him at the wall, causing him to crash through the window. "And Joey's out!" Chris shouted. "Next!"
"My turn!" Morgan exclaimed. She used her wand to form a snowball in her hand, then flung it at Marshmallow.
Bathroom Confessional
(Anna)
"These people…they learned nothing from the movie…"
Arendelle, Castle
Anna covered her ears as the snowball landed with a tiny plop. Marshmallow roared, more icicles jutting out of its arms, legs, and mouth. It threw Morgan aside, slamming her against the wall. "I'd say it's not nice to throw people…" Anna began. "But she kinda deserved that one."
"I'll go next," Meowth said bravely.
"No, I will," Zoey snapped, shoving it out of the way.
"Okay," Meowth said nervously.
Zoey stepped forward, slingshot in hand. "All right, Marshmallow," she said bravely. "I'm going to win this challenge and save Anna, even though everyone prefers her sister more for some reason!" Instead of shooting at it, she took out Elsa's old tiara. "Looking for this?"
Marshmallow gasped, its icicles fading away. It took the tiara from Zoey's hands, then dropped Anna on Meowth's head. "Huh," she said thoughtfully. "Your fur is soft."
Phineas growled.
Bathroom Confessional
(Phineas)
"I'm not letting some Indie Chick steal my ticket to First Class!"
Arendelle, Castle
"I'm not losing!" Phineas shouted. He jumped up and knocked the tiara out of Marshmallow's hand. The snow monster roared even louder this time, more icicles jutting out of its body than ever before.
"Oh no," Anna said, backing away. Phineas took out one of his devices, transforming it in to a flamethrower.
"Burned marshmallow time," he growled. He was about to shoot, but stopped when the flamethrower was knocked out of his hands. "What the?!" He turned around to see Tails standing behind him. "Get out of here, fox. I'm winning this challenge!" Tails punched him in the nose, knocking him to the ground. He stood up and laughed. "What's the matter, Tails?"
"I'm not going to let you hurt it," he growled. Phineas retaliated, kicking him in the stomach, then in the side when he landed on the ground. The others were too busy to help Tails, trying to get Marshmallow back under control.
"What, you feel like you have to defend a pile of snow?" he scoffed, dodging a punch. "You could save a thousand Ice-types and she would still hate you! Stop kidding yourself!" He punched him in the jaw with a sickening crack.
Tails shook his head. "She doesn't hate me…I know she doesn't. She's just hurt…" His eyes were stinging with tears from pain and frustration. He formed his tails in to an X, slamming them down on Phineas' head. "I heard what she said in that tower when I was dying. She said she loved me, always will and always have!"
Phineas kicked him in the shin. "Then why'd she leave you? In fact, I don't think she's the first person to do it! Your family walked out on you, didn't they? When you were little they didn't want a mutant like you."
"Stop!" Tails yelled, driving his elbow in to the boy's collarbone. "And I'm not the only one with parents that walked out on me! What about you? Where's your real dad?!"
Phineas dodged a punch and cut behind him, kicking the back of his knee. "My real father died in a car crash when I was little!" he exclaimed. "Yours left because they couldn't stand you! You're the reason for your own problems!" He grabbed the fox's arm and pinned it to his back, threatening to rip it out of its socket. "And at least I don't have to go to my brother to fight my battles for me." He gave his arm a harsh tug, dislocating his shoulder. Tails yelped in pain, his vision black at the edges. He collapsed on the ground, about to black out.
Anna handed Marshmallow the tiara, allowing the others to see the outcome of the fight. "Tails," Zoey whispered. She rushed over to him, rolling him on to his back and trying to keep him awake. "Hey, don't fall asleep, okay?"
He slowly opened his eyes, having just enough strength to open them half way. "Zoey…"
"And Zoey wins the challenge!" Chris announced, rubbing his cheek where Anna had punched him. "She gets First Class—"
"Yeah, yeah," Zoey said uncaringly. She picked Tails up and turned to Anna. "Thanks for helping out with Marshmallow."
"Eh," Anna said with a shrug. "No big deal. Just like dealing with the crazy side of my sister." She walked back to the others, leaving Zoey and Tails alone.
He looked up at her. "You're Commando…why'd…you save me…"
She rolled her eyes. "Commando or not, my whole reason for joining the show's been to make friends." She smiled weakly. "You remind me of Cameron a lot, I guess." She cut him off before he could ask any more questions. "You can black out now, you know."
"Thank you," he whispered, then allowed the darkness to surround him.
Hospital Car, Room 3
Tails woke up in the Hospital Car, his arm numb in a sling. He opened his eyes to see Zoey sitting next to his bed. She seemed worried. "Did they already have the Elimination Ceremony?" he asked weakly.
She nodded. "They um, voted off you. For making Angel freeze over Arendelle."
He sat up stiffly. "Are you serious?" he whispered.
"I wish I could say I was kidding," she sighed. "But if it means anything to you…I voted for Phineas." She stood up and opened the door for him. "Don't worry," she whispered as soon as they were in the hall. "One of us'll take his down…I promise."
Elimination Ceremony
"Are you ready to be thrown off?" Chris asked with a smirk. Tails looked at the open door, the ground flying beneath them. He nodded.
"Wait," Phineas said, stepping in front of Chef. "I want to do the honors." Chef only shrugged. Phineas approached Tails and picked him up by the neck, then lowered his voice so no one would hear him. "You know how you kissed Amy?" he asked. "I made you do that. So in a way, I'm the one who froze over Arendelle." He smirked. "Thanks for taking the blame all this time, fox boy." He dropped him out the door of the train before walking away.
Zoey picked up something on the floor…a small blue bracelet. "He dropped his," she whispered, then pocketed it.
Chris turned to the camera. "That's another one gone. Who will win the next challenge? Will Melaney and Ash be able to drag Angel back? If they do, how will they get back to the competition? The answers to come on Total…Drama…Universe!"
Episode 33's done! Yay! Okay, sorry this didn't focus on the challenge that much, but I needed this chapter to go further with the plot. And hopefully I didn't get in trouble with the song. Technically I didn't just copy and paste a song someone else wrote, so I think I'm all good there. Anyway, sorry it took a while to update. I just got Pokemon Y the other day and I've been distracted with that. I swear to God, every guy in Team Flare is either gay, metrosexual, or Cilan in disguise. THEY WON'T SHUT UP ABOUT STYLE AND LOOKING GOOD! JEEZ! But I have to say, this is definitely my favorite Pokemon game. You meet Pokemon from all six regions, the graphics are beautiful, and I kinda like the rivals. I thought Shaunee (I think that's her name) was going to be really annoying, but after you watch the fireworks with her, I changed my mind. And Mega Evolution is awesome. And Poke Puffs. And Sylveon. Anyway, Q of the Week: Your reaction to Tails leaving? But before you review, some of you need to be TAUGHT how to leave a review. Last chapter I got some really poor reviews. I got a couple really awesome ones, but others of you need to learn how to do this right.
So in a general sense, there are five types of reviews. Encouragement, well thought-out, flames, constructive criticism, and crap reviews. I'll explain each one and give an example.
Type One: Encouragement. Encouragement reviews are the types that make the author smile when they're read, and sometimes have humor. They often contain excessive emotion, usually shown through exclamation points. This type of review makes the author feel appreciated for their work. Examples:
"Ah! the feels are attacking! HELP! :P amazing chapter, amazing story, and to top it all off, an absolutely awesome writer! I hope this story keeps going for a long time! also I don't get the whole deal about why ferbdoesn't talk much, is that a reference to an episode or am I just dumb?" –thechimpmunk01, Ch. 17 Pokemon Tower
"okay I'm starting with divergent. okay so yes, morgan is totally candor! she really can't lie! especially when giving spoiler alerts :/ ugh! ho many things are you going to give away?! and ya, joey is totally factionless! I'd get a kick out of seeing him living on the streets like a hobo! lol! and omg angel is turning into abnegation! holy sugar nuggets! "bravery and selflessness are often the same thing," I was freaking out at that part! OH MY LANTA! FYI I would totally be divergent...
now for the question. I think phineas is a retard. is that an acceptable answer? whatever it's my answer
and great job! I have an idea for the next chapter so text me! or you can go on that website that you STILL haven't visited. lol good job!
(p.s I actually so say oh my lanta and holy sugar nuggets in real life. I also say gosh darnit... don't judge me...)" –Melaney, Ch. 15 Gilligan's Island!
"lemon cookies? om nom nom nom! :p I have to say that my favorite OC is definitely angel, whe's tough yet caring and she can freeze stuff. awesomeness!" –thechipmunk01, Ch. 16 Robots, Knives, and Spears
Okay, so yeah, pretty much all of their reviews are really good for encouragement, especially thechipmunk01's, since they always make me laugh. So keep up the good work you two!
Type Two: Well-Thought Out. These reviews are one of my favorite types. Well-thought out reviews not only answer the question, but they go deep in to what the reader is thinking. These reviews have pretty much perfect grammar and look professional.
"Awesome reference to Sonic Boom! If I had to pick someone it would be Stubo, Steven, stupho, whatever his name is (jk I know it is Stephan). I choose Him simply because he is beginning to lose purpose and could make sense given his recent "loss". Other than him, maybe Amy because she is likely to go murder people here shortly given her recent revelations. Or she could be the agent of elimination." –Darkshado457, Ch. 29 Race Down Mt. Moon!
"I would prefer to see an Angel and Tails finale. Again it seems cliché given what happened with Mike and Zoey but that was more of a Mal vs Zoey. Otherwise I think Tails vs Phineas would be a good finale. For the challenge, some sort of battle. Angel vs Tails, I think a head to head battle that tests physical strength, mental capability, and will would be good. Kinda like a triathlon. For Tails vs Phineas, a battle to the death either gladiatorial or technological style. Kinda like Cameron did vs Lightning." –Darkshado457, Ch. 28 Host Hatchet
Again, pretty much all of Darkshado457's reviews. Not only do they answer the question, but they go beyond what's asked and offer a second option, and talk about the chapter. This type of review shows that the reader is truly thinking about the story. So Darkshado457, keep on reviewing! Hopefully you'll be there during the sequel!
Type Three: Flames. Flames are reviews that completely bash a story/chapter due to an event that happened in the plot, or maybe the story was just terribly written. I'm not sure if this counts as a flame because the 3 month thing lasted like 12 hours, but I guess it works.
"Omg. Dinkleberg... You suck. That's all I'm gonna say. You suck. I hate you. I hate Phineas. I hate Tails. I hate Amy. I hate Angel. I hate you. Shut up an never talk to me for 3 months." –Melaney, Ch. 30 Dinkleberg
…I think that's what everyone was really thinking in a nutshell.
Type Four: Constructive Criticism. Concrit is a way to help the writer improve their skills by pointing out mistakes, or leaving suggestions for improvement. It usually isn't mean-spirited, but can seem that way to people who are overly sensitive (not me).
"Cosmo, Cream and now Angel.
Her name doesn't even start with a C! Shuuuuun. This one should be in the crossovers section because a Sonic fan is bound to get confused by the persistent presence of non-Sonic concepts that are never explained.
The story is one-dimensional. Sadness happens and it keeps going. The end. For all the opportunity combining fandoms brings, this one chooses the lazy straight path. And it shows explicitly in the descriptions. Why does Tails start every sentence with "I"? Is he so sad he's completely self-absorbed? It's kind of amusing to think this way: he cares about this Angel so much, he focuses entirely on himself. Then again, I'm certain it's just tacky editing.
Subtlety, twists, variety. These will make your one shots memorable.
Have a nice, abuse-free day." –Lord Kelvin, Sonic, Pokemon, and the Hunger Games: Angel's Ending
See? I can improve that story using this review when I get time. This directly points out flaws that needs to be addressed. In fact, don't go read that story. Not until I fix it. It's actually painful for me to read my old stories now. But that's a good thing, because it means I've improved.
Type Five: Crappy Reviews. THIS is the type that I hate, and I've been getting a lot of them lately. Crappy reviews only answer the questions I ask without explaining thoughts whatsoever. Seriously, if your answer is 2-10 words long, you're not doing a good job. It only takes me five or six minutes to leave a 1000 word concrit. If you can't take literally two minutes to leave a good review, then what's the point?
Not only that, but these reviews lack all emotion. There's no punctuation whatsoever, and absolutely no reaction. I could write a chapter filled with feels and still get crappy reviews. Oh wait, I did, and I still got one. I'll show it, but I won't tell you who's it is, even though you can go back in to the reviews and see. You probably won't be surprised. This is from the Pokemon Tower chapter:
"I think that the next one to go is Phineas because he just lost his tempter."
Dude! I just wrote probably the most dramatic episode in the story, and THAT'S your reaction?! For God's sake, didn't you see the rest of the reviews for that chapter?! There isn't one review that doesn't talk about feels except for this one. If any of your reviews look like this one, then you need to take a good look at your posts and figure out what you're doing. I write for three reasons: to get reactions, improve my writing, and unleash my imagination. So please guys, follow the examples I used to write your reviews. And the better the reviews, the faster I update! I don't want to offend people, but take what I said in to consideration. Remember to answer the Q of the Week! Bye!