Ok so after reviewing chapters 5 and 6 I realized that the two chapters are rushed in the description of the new Adjuchas Madara so rather than post a unfinished chapter I'm going to take two days from today and Draw out what I had in mind so that I can properly describe him in the story after I do this I will Post the finished picture on here so that you can see and better understand how he looks as well as remove the struggle I've been having writing these last two chapters. again I'm looking for a beta reader to help me along with all this that way I hoping that by acquiring a beta reader I can stop writing a chapter only to rewrite it another three times because I am unhappy with outcome. again I have to apologize to each of you that follow and favorite the story as I have yet again failed to meet a deadline for the chapters I originally gave in my last Authors note hopefully I can find a beta soon so that this can stop as its mainly due to my flaw to want to give you the best story I possibly can. If your interested in being a beta reader for me email me at Figueroaluigy at gmail
To Mistgun4 : Without revealing any surprises first let me tell you why I want to put them in the story at all. Looking at the Madara Uchiha in Naruto he has evolved through out the story starting with the idealistic 7 year old child he was when he and Hashirama met at the river that wanted to believe that there was a way to change the world so that took his younger brothers from him. This changed when he first activated his sharingan after Hashirama's father attempted to kill Izuna, initially i thought that his determination to protect his little brother caused him to activate it but after a second look at Tobirama's explanation on how the sharingan is acquired in Naruto 619 I think the reason is that in that moment he realized that the dream Hashirama and he shared came with risks he was not willing to make such as trusting a clan that had killed his previous siblings to not kill his last one the realization of just how impossible it would be to unite shinobi clans filled him with a sense of anger, loss, and despair but also determination to become stronger and protect his little brother at all cost. After this incident Madara become harder, colder and filled with rage and depression at the fact that his responsibility to protect his brother then at 17 his clan made him understand the gravity of the risks it would take to chase such a wild dream. Then He was filled with pain and depression at the loss of his brother and his constant losses in battle to Hashirama it became evident to him he could not protect his clan the one thing he had left to cling to even to the point that he welcomed death at Hashirama's hand. Then later again taking a drastic turn for darkness with the influence of black Zetsu long story short the Madara that became an Adjuchas would be the Madara he was in his early days as clan head before losing Izuna although he will remember his entire life till he was betrayed by Zetsu sooner or later as the years pass as a hollow those memories will fade like they do for every Adjuchas leaving just his identity personality and characteristics and way of thinking of The Madara Uchiha he was as a clan head when he craved to change the world but could not contemplate how when he was a solitary Leader driven to do everything in his power to protect those he held dear so I want to give him to Fracciones that will be extremely close to him that at all cost he wanted to protect so they would play an active role in the story. I just don't see away of giving him any of the already existing Arrancar without having to alter some key story line so I think entering two OC characters to fill this role would fit perfectly as it would let me further develop a Madara Uchiha later on with out effecting the background or any point of the history of bleach characters in anyway. And like Longshotqb said "Madara must have his subjects.
to HighLevelJinx :
First of all I want to really appreciate your question it's one of the first, second I am told constantly that I always give huge long explanations every time I answer a question. I can't help it I just assume that everyone is like me and that when you ask a question you don't just want to know the answer to the question but the why behind it and also to see what point of view you may have on it if it differs or if you have your own Idea on then tell me it. So in case you're not like me ill answer your question first than I'll explain my reasoning behind it so that you can choose to read the reasoning behind it or not. No at first he is just a normal Hollow not a Gillian. (Think the type that is always randomly attacking the human like the one in the first and second episode of Bleach when a wounded Rukia Kuchiki gave Ichigo her Shinigami powers. That's why at first when his soul chain dissolved at the end of chapter 2 he first became a hollow and that's why at first he didn't have any form of intelligence, speech, or personality at all just the basics instincts to survive and eat living souls and absorbing a portion of each one it consumes adding it to its own gaining strength and basic functions like speech coherency etc… Every now and then a Hollows hunger is big enough they crave deceased souls/ other Hollows. I assume that the greater the Hollow's hunger then the more they crave souls with greater spiritual pressure resulting in a preference for other Hollow at least I'm pretty sure I have not found anything official that says that but it just seems like a really good reason anyways that's why up until chapter 4 Hollow Madara shows no matching tendencies, characteristics or personality traits to the original Madara Uchiha. In a way I attempted to represent all this with the Mind Scape cut scenes when he is mid transition to a Hollow when Madara's unstable mentality and his chaotic emotional state of mind manifest as The Black lion that destroys him and his Mind Scape in Chapter 3. Gillian is the lowest and weakest level Menos Grande class Hollow they all look alike until their hollow mask develops its own visible characteristics just before progressing to the much stronger Adjuchas class Menos Grande, the third and strongest Menos Grande class being Vasto Lorde the strongest class of hollow before the Arrancar the higher the Menos class before becoming an Arrancar the stronger the Arrancar.