I realised at the beginning of this FanFic I said that I would do Review Responses at the beginning of each chapter and haven't actually done that, but…I will from now on!
Review Responses:
unshakespearean chapter 1 . May 24
Oh. My. Freaking. God. Keep. Going. Yes. This. Is. FANTASTIC SO AWESOME
Thankyou so much! I really appreciate your review. It means a lot to me!
TorchwoodFan4Eva chapter 1 . May 23
Good first chapter. I think I have an idea where this is going but I'm not sure. Please update soon.
Also, could you do a chapter or section about Jack's thoughts of Ellie. It was obvious he wasn't really expecting to meet her but he did and I just wonder how he felt. Also, loving the cover image. It's Bo from Believe!
Thanks for the review! I will do Jack's thoughts – It will be a separate chapter and I will add it when I think it's the right time. Also, glad to know you're a Believe fan too!
RosetheOwlchapter 2 . May 28
Please update soon! I can't wait to find out what happens in the next chapter!
Glad to know you're interested! Thanks for the support!
unshakespearean chapter 2 . May 29
Nice. Love. Hugs to you.
Soooo sweet! Thank you very much! :)
[Jack's P.O.V]
I stayed in the hub all night with Ellie and let her stay in a back room which was going to be hers from now on. I came through to the entrance to see Ianto, Gwen and Owen chatting. I held back to hear what they were talking about.
"What do you think of her Gwen?" Owen asked.
"I'm not sure. We don't know her so I'm not going to judge her." Gwen replied.
"But she's one of them. You know what Luvendan hunt and I'm telling you, she's one of them!" Owen said.
I walked up to them and stood behind them with my hands on my hips.
"She is no danger to you lot." I said sternly.
"We know that Jack. We just don't know what to think of her. One minute everything's normal and the next we have a little kid in base?!" Gwen said.
"I'm not little." A voice said from behind us.
We all turned around to see Ellie stood there. She was wearing Aztec Leggings and a white vest top.
"I'm 13." She continued.
"Sorry." Gwen said. Ellie just shrugged.
"How long were you stood there?" Owen asked, looking at Ellie.
"Long enough." She replied. "By the way…I'm not 'one of them'. Well, I am but there is a name for it. Jack filled me in last night in detail." Ellie added.
"We know there's a name Ellie." Owen said.
"Then why not use it. I'm not offended if you call me: 'A prodigal child'." She answered. "Though, I'd prefer you not to call me that." Ellie finished.
"It's not she can join the team Jack. She needs to be good at something." Ianto argued.
"Like?" She asked, seeming intrigued.
"Like: Computer-Techy stuff, Paperwork; Defence." He answered.
"Computer-Techy stuff – Simple. If I can hack into NASA and Governmental files I'm sure I can do anything on the computers that you ask me to do. And if you're wondering…my Step-Dad taught me. Paperwork – Simple. Mum was a journalist and I helped her out quite a bit. I went through her paperwork and did all the boring stuff but I didn't mind doing it. Defence – Well…I'm agile if that helps and Mum made me do a year of self defence classes when Martin started getting…urm - violent." Ellie explained, whispering the end.
"Oh. Urm…Anything else?" Gwen asked.
"You can so tell this is my kid." I interrupted, sounding proud.
"I'm a dancer/cheerleader…? If that's any help." She responded.
"Can you do acrobatics?" I asked. She nodded happily.
"Let's see what you've got!" Owen said.
"Is that a challenge to prove to you I can do everything I claim to be able to do?" She asked.
"Maybe…" Owen answered smirking.
"You're on!" Ellie replied, shaking his hand.
We all made our way to a nearby room which was nice and spacious. We all stood at the edge while Ellie walked to the middle of the room.
[Ellie's P.O.V]
I stood in the middle of the room and took a deep breath. They were all looking at me intently, waiting for me to do something.
I went into a round-off, back handspring double before ending in a back tuck. I did some flips and more acrobatics. I showed them my flexibility and how agile I was before turning to face them.
"Believe me now?" I said, looking at Owen and smirking.
"Yeah, but now I need to see if you can work the computers." He answered.
He passed me a laptop and I sat at a nearby desk, the others crowding around me.
In around 30 seconds I had hacked MI5's entire database undetected and got out undetected.
"Is that enough?" I asked.
They all nodded.
"Listen, Ellie…why don't you go to your room and try on your new clothes. Gwen got them this morning. We guessed your size but we reckon they'll fit." Jack said looking at me. I nodded before running off.
I got to my room and had a mini fashion show with myself, trying on all of the new clothes in which Gwen had bought me. I settled with wearing black leggings, a skinny strapped t shirt with New York City on it and Blue converses.
[Meanwhile… Jack's P.O.V]
"That is a pretty cool 13 year old daughter you got there Jack." Owen said, giving me a smile.
"Thanks. Now listen, she's joining the team." I said.
"What about school?" Gwen asked. Trust her to think of that.
"She will be home schooled. We can all help teach her." I explained.
They all nodded, a little hesitant about the decision but happy enough that they weren't going to argue.
"Good. Now, I think we should all get back to work. Gwen, could you go and get Ellie. I want to talk to her about what's going to happen to her long term." I stated.
"Sure." She answered.
Hey guys! So I hope you enjoyed the chapter.
Listen, I need your ideas so please could you answer these questions for me.
1. What should happen to Ellie in the long-run?
2. Should the Luvendan find her? (If so, what should happen)?
3. How will Ellie settle to Life in Torchwood?
4. Are you enjoying this FanFiction? (Please no hateful comments – I don't mind constructive criticism)
5. Is there anything I can improve on in this story?
Thank you for the support so far!
Rachel :) xx