HEY GUYS! So, this morning I was on 6 reviews and then by 5pm it was on 10 reviews! OMG, thank you to everyone who has helped support me. It means so much as I love writing…it is my passion and it makes me feel good when people compliment my work. I also love sharing my stories with you guys!
Review Responses:
Guest chapter 2 . May 30
It's amazing! :) xx
Thank you for the review! Happy to know you're enjoying it. Xx
Jubilee Chalmers chapter 3 . May 30
It's amazeballs! Will you include Tosh and/or Suzie? Although Suzie did betray them... It's really good :) I love it! You must watch more Raqueelllllll! :D
Thank's Jub Jub! (and yes, we're friends in real life – hence our nick names for each other). I will include Tosh and you will have to wait and see as to whether I add Suzie. Also, I have watched more! It's AMAZEBALLS! Luv Ya! :) xx
Lilian Katora chapter 2 . 7h ago
I like it... This mysterious power Ellie's mum had and that she might have is intriguing. I gotta find out more!
Like the story so far, by the way :)
Glad you like it! All will be revealed about the powers. Xx
Lilian Katora chapter 4 . 6h ago
Loving it! This is a great story, and I can't wait to read more!
I think, maybe, you should slow down a bit with Jack and Ellie's father daughter relationship. Like, have Ellie tell jack more about her lie to him, and he to her, maybe have some problems between them like for instance boys? I don't know, but I feel as if there could be more. Anyway, I feel like a dumbo saying all this, because I really like this story and I feel like I'm judging it...
Anyway, I am enjoying this story, and I thonmk Ellie should perhaps join Torchwood in the long run- well, maybe be sick of the lifestyle for a while, because it does change you, and Ellie's only thirteen, and...
Right. Whichever way you take it, I'm excited to see!
Yeah…I know I need to slow down. I will now as there is soooo much I want to write. I will have a chapter which will be Ellie/Jack bonding time and there will be some problems between them but that's what father's and daughter's are like. I don't feel like you're judging it. I like constructive criticism. Thanks for answering my questions as well. :D xx
unshakespearean chapter 3 . 3h ago
Correction: Colleagues, not colleges. Just sayin.
Thank you for the shoutout and lovely job as always, darling! Keep Torchwooding! Also, is there going to be any sort of ships in this one? Curious...
Thanks for the correction (I suck at spelling sometimes). I will keep Torchwooding…it is now my life! There will be ships! :P xx
unshakespearean chapter 4 . 3h ago
I love you. I just freaking love you. You are fantastic and amazing. Thank you as always and stuff.
1. She should be trained and join da team.
2. Obviously yes, and she should fight back.
3. Well. The team, particularly Owen, will be a bit jealous of the attention she gets at first but she will be loved.
4. Of course I love it!
5. And Liakate (that's my name) said, Let there be ships. And there were ships. Preferably Gwen/Jack but I know nobody actually ships that but me.
Thank you for the AMAZING support.
I agree that she should join the team.
I agree that the Luvendan should find her and she WILL fight back!
That definitely sounds like Owen. Getting jealous of the new girl but she will be loved by them all eventually.
There will be ships and I will ship Gwen/Jack. I SHIP THEM TOO! :D xx
[Ellie's P.O.V]
I knocked on the door of Jack's office before entering.
"Gwen said you wanted to see me?" I explained.
"Yes. Sit down." He said, motioning to the seat opposite him. I closed the door before taking a seat in the chair.
"So…" I said, waiting for him to explain why he wanted to see me.
"I want to talk to you about what's going to happen to you, long term." He clarified.
"Ok." I replied casually, leaning back.
"I want you to join the team. You have good skills and we could use them to our advantage. I do want to train you though because it's only a matter of time until the Luvendan try to find you and when that time comes I want you to be prepared." He stated. I nodded in response.
"What about school?" I asked.
"Gwen asked the exact same thing…" He laughed.
I giggled at that statement. Even though school can be boring; it's important and I would still like to have a 'kind of normal' life.
"Home schooling. We're all going to teach you." He alleged.
"Ok." I answered.
"Now that's over with, come here." He said, opening his arms.
I got out of the chair and sat on his lap, burying my head into his shoulder.
"Listen, I want you to be able to talk to me about anything, ok?" He reassured me.
"Urm…what if it's…you know – girly stuff." I stuttered. This was agonising attempting to talk to my father about girl things.
"Go to Gwen or Tosh." He said quickly, understanding what I meant and wanting to avoid the subject.
"O-k…" I agreed unconvincingly.
[Later that day]
"Owen, go and get pizza, will you?" Jack said, coming out of his office.
He nodded before leaving through the cog door.
Everyone was just chilling until the pizza came and I wasn't sure what to do. Gwen was sat on the sofa reading a magazine and I decided to join her as she was alone.
"Can I join you?" I asked sweetly.
"Course, take a seat." Gwen replied, budging herself along and letting me take a seat next to her.
"Can I – talk to you about something." I asked hesitantly.
"Sure thing kiddo. What is it?" She questioned.
"It's a…girly thing." I said, preparing her for what was to come next.
"Oh, I see. Well, I don't mind talking about these things with you. I know Jack would be absolutely useless at it." She said.
"Yeah, I gathered when he quickly pulled away from the subject." I stated.
We both laughed.
"Urm…what do I do when I start?" (and yeah, she's 13. People vary between when they start their period so don't try and correct me saying she's 13 she should have started already cause in this she hasn't. Continue reading...)
"Come to me, and I'll give you what you need. If I'm not here…go to Tosh. I'll warn her that you may go to her and she'll be just as normal and cool about it as I am, ok?" She alleged. I nodded.
"Pizza!" Owen called, placing the pizza's on the table.
We all went and sat down before digging into our pizza's.
"Dad, what are we going to do about the whole 'prodigal' thing?"
"See if any power's come on. If not, then-" I stopped him.
"My powers may have already come on." I whispered.
"What!?" He quizzed sternly.
"Before I met you. There was one time. I don't know what happened." I sighed.
"What did you do?" He asked strictly.
And I'm going to leave it there. One, I'm out of idea's. What is it she did? Two, I wanted to leave you guys in a cliff hanger. Thanks for the TREMENDOUS support.
Rachel :) xx