So, hi everybody! Its been, wow, a year? I'm so sorry, I let all of you guys down. After I finished chapter 8, I reread the whole fanfic, and frankly, I was shocked. I mean, I know that Winx and Slugs isn't my best piece of work, because I've never written something in that specific style before, but after looking at it...I mean, really? It's horrible. I would write one chapter, then change my ideas about the whole origin and everything before writing the next chapter. I honestly think that this story is worth burning to pieces. But just as I was about to take my finals, I saw that someone by the name of horselover64 read this story and reviewed it. No alert was sent to my email, and if it wasn't for my friend Catrina, I wouldn't have ever seen the review. Because of both horselover64's and Cat's pestering, I contacted Nentone and wrote a chapter. He edited it, we talked about some more details, and I never published. This chapter though, is basically meant to restart the whole story, with Bloom still as the main character though.
Last night I received an alert, telling me I had another review. This one was from a Guest, who asked me to continue it. After lying awake thinking all last night, I made a decision. Although I think the story is bad, I will try to write more, to update, and to make it better. But I can only do so if you help me. You guys have a choice. Review, PM, whatever. Just help me out, please.
There are three choices for how I'm going to continue this:
Option One: Edit the already existing chapters and continue to write off of those.
Option Two: Rewrite the whole story, using either A) The original plotline, or B) A new plotline, based off of the aforementioned chapter, which will be placed below.
Option Three: Go with either Option One or Two, but change the main character to Musa, partially cause she's my favorite, partially cause I think she looks more like a Shane than Bloom. Musa Shane. Plus, her dad on Melody is old enough that he can be her dad's (Will Shane) older by a decade brother, Musa and Eli's uncle.
So, tell me what I should do, and I promise that I'll do my best to update at least once a month, hopefully once every two weeks. Here is the Restart Chapter mentioned in Option Two, btw.
Darkness ...
A whimper.
... Flames ...
Eyes clenched shut.
... PAIN!
A sudden raw scream. Echoing. Glass-shattering. Horrible. Twisted. So much it was, her ears rang as fast as her heart.
"Who's ... screams?" someone rasped. Groan. Cough. And for a dim second, she realized her throat hoarse, raw— oh, of course it had been her ... screaming ... barely speaking.
Her head throbbed. Why ... why can't I remember?
The feel of sensation slowly returned. Yet she can barely move a limb without hearing a jangling, metallic sound. Her vision swam in and out, flashing darkness, flashing blurred flames.
Where am I? And then the dizziness vanished. Blurry vision sharpening. Who am I?
She found herself kneeling on a cold concrete floor, head bowed. Neck bounded. Aching arms outstretched at her sides, held up by chains tightening at her wrists.
She managed what strength she had to look straight ahead. But instantly regretted doing so.
Lit torches surrounded her with sweaty heat— thirteen of them, in some sort of ritualistic circle.
But that hardly fazed her. Rather, the sight as further as she saw was far worse. The surrounding torches illuminating ghastly figures ahead.
Chained to the sides of enclosing rocky walls unlike her, were three groups of people that seemed awfully familiar ... she squinted, ... somehow. All battered and bloodied, they looked more like ragdolls than alive ... at all.
And then, like water bursting through a crack, her head drummed as memories blitzed through her brain the speed of a bullet train.
Her eyes widened in horror, realizing. A chill shimming down her spine. No ... no! This couldn't be!
Yet ... it is.
The Winx.
The Specialists.
The Shane Gang.
But where are their leaders? Where's—?
Instantly, she hears something drip to her left. Like red, like blood. She managed twisting her head for a glance. And felt her heart jolt dead, cold.
A sight of Eli Shane, chained as the others, hands raised straight above his head and bound together. But no, nothing could prepare her more a ghastly sight than the twin blades stabbed through his bloodied chest— gleaming white, both of handle and of edge.
Bile rose to her throat, as she quickly glanced away.
Only to see another similar sight, of another similar set of blades sticking through the heart of the Specialists' leader— Sky.
Her breath now heaved in short, quick pants, hyperventilating. If Eli to my left ... Sky my right ... then that means ... she looked up, that means ...
With an unmistakable fiery-red of hair dripping like blood, the sight of a severed head dangling from a chain stared back, with wide blank eyes and lips parted.
The chained girl soon heard shrieking a second after— herself.
Bloom!
And then, everything went black.
So, yeah. Kinda dark, but yeah. So, what should I do? Also, for the Guest that wrote:
Do all of the Winx have a brother and/or sister? And as for Neotone, is he afraid of huge all–bark–but–no–bite dogs, before he finds out that it's a scaredy-dog? (evil smile)
Sorry I didn't respond, that's another review that I never received an alert about, but no. The idea is that only two of the Winx, and one Specialist has any siblings. For the Nentone part, I think so! ;)
Also, here's the information that goes with this story; Lucky you guys, getting a behind the scenes look! WARNING: These are copied directly from my PM's, starting when horselover64 and Cat began pestering me, and ending around the beginning of June-I think.
Dragonfan47:
Sooooooo...the Tech's finally let me go...and I finally got into highschool...and after finals and SAT's I'll be able to write again...and I'm alive...still up for helping me?
~DF
Dragonfan47:
That is, if your still alive...
Nentone:
hooray -_- more trouble for me.
Yeah, but I guess I missed your humiliating existence ... a bit. So again, hooray -_-
Nentone:
and I'll help you out.
So tell me, is this about the Winx and Slugs? Tell me :D
Dragonfan47:
HUMILIATING! YOURE ONE TO TALK!
Dragonfan47:
and yeah, sorta. i want to re-write the whole thing, mostly cause i had i different story plot in mind for each chappie. heh heh...
Dragonfan47:
*mutters* glad to know im soooooo loved...thx a lot Nt
Dragonfan47:
btw...keyboard assassin?...only if u count dropping them/tripping over them XD
Dragonfan47:
ok, on from the funniness.
Nentone:
That aside, could you please tell me your plot? The characters, the events and the whole shebang, I mean.
Nentone:
Bloom edged closer, warning hand to holster. "Let go of the kid now, Darcy."
But Darcy edged away. Her grip seemed crushing against the eight-year old. "Or what?"
Don't mind my rambling. I'm just plain bored -_-
Nentone:
BTW, you really are awk-WEIRD ;D
Nentone:
OK, where's the ideas? I'm still waiting here, you know.
Dragonfan47:
Did u just seriously call me weird?! Seriously, c'mon. Coming from u?
Dragonfan47:
LOL
Dragonfan47: I need to re-write the whole plot line. Btw, what's ur real name? Yeah, random, but we virtually beat/torture/kill each other sooooo...why not at least tell each other our names hm?
Dragonfan47:
Btw: I'm not trouble. The Techs are. And just cause I introduced them doesn't mean I created them! Ok I did, but I got the idea from another story! Which still kinda gives me nightmares lol...
Nentone:
okay, now can we talk about ideas now -_- tell me.
Nentone:
and why the heck would I tell you my real name— it's too awesome for you to hear.
Dragonfan47:
So my original intention was to have Bloom be a sibling (preferably twin) of Eli, and Eli needs help so she goes to help and the others find out about Slugterra cause of the picture mistake, and they follow her thinking she is dating Eli, and find out about the whole twin thing and then somehow the Trix are involved cause face it, they always are ^_^
Nentone:
Re-write the whole plot line? Please explain.
Nentone:
So does this means that Eli went to Slugterra a year before Bloom went to Alfea? Hmmm ...
Nentone:
Then probably through those years, Bloom and Eli must have developed some sort of sibling bond (which Bloom must have done accidental magic when they were a wee younger). So the farther apart both grew (Eli to Slugterra. Bloom to Magix), the bond became dormant, a bit weak.
Nentone:
hello? Still there?
Dragonfan47:
Yeah, and that makes a ton of sense. As for the plot line, I need to have something definite before I start writing again
Dragonfan47:
Keyboard klutz
Dragonfan47:
;)
Nentone:
Ask yourself this: What would make Eli call Bloom to Slugterra? I know you might say the Trix, but they'll come later. And I don't want us to create too many OCs.
Dragonfan47:
But we never had any at all? And idk, Blakk or something
Nentone:
hmm, let's see ... uh, what was the entire plot line again?Nentone:
Here's what I was thinking of this crossover story: Why not integrate Wind Club into the Slugterra Universe? At least, it won't be cliché for Bloom to be all powerful with magic. I mean, c'mon, even a flash Stella's light could scare those darkbaines out of their pits.
All in all, magic with the Wind Club just seems all too 'strong' to the reader who is reading this story. Yes, we are designing this story, but we must also think of how the reader would feel. Sure, it's awesome and all, but as the reader, what would you say?
Nentone:
dragonfan, are you still there?
Dragonfan47:
That...makes a ton of sense. And no, I'm not here. I decided to move to Mars...
:)
Nentone:
so, tell me everything about the story. And I'll share what I can. Seriously, we need a more better way to PM. You keep spacing out, not replying back. Not cool :(
Dragonfan47:
I'm not spacing out, not really. I had to work this morning for 3 and a half hours and had no access to my phone. Also, we live in two different time zones, remember? I think your 6 or 7 hours ahead of me. But yeah, your right.
Dragonfan47:
Email won't work...so what?
Nentone:
I apologize. I was a bit too ahead of myself right there. Soo, is my integration idea okay?
Dragonfan47:
Yeah, definitely. And don't apologize, I thought the same until I did the math
Nentone:
You remember one of my ideas?
About Anna Shane being experimented on, about her DNA crossed with that of an Infurnus Slug by Viktor Valtor.
About her being exiled from Slugterra after going on a hallucinating rampage.
About her, giving birth to Eli and Bloom. The latter inheriting her mother's pyronetic ability and also inadvertently creating a dormant bond with Eli.
About Vanessa being a friend of Will Shane (and also his past admirer), who took care of Bloom and Eli.
You getting any of this?
Nentone:
Now how the heck do we fit Stella and co. in?
Dragonfan47:
Yes, and I have no idea. Well, maybe one. What do u know about zeta tubes?
Nentone:
Is it those kind of tubes you enter like a portal?
Dragonfan47:
Yeah. What if there are multiple underground worlds connected by zeta and Slugterra is just separate and u can only get there from the Surface world?
Nentone:
So easy way in, hard way out, right? Hmm, guess that's nice. But I still say that tube that Eli dropped to Slugterra is still okay. I mean, don't get me wrong: Zeta tubes are cool, but having multiple seems like you're planning to invite a crowd.
Yet I like the Zeta tube idea :D
Dragonfan47:
:)
So the zeta's will just connect the different cavern/worlds together, like Sparx and Solaria...just underground, and in Sparks there's a secret passage (idk if it should be zeta or not) to the Shane house on the surface...that opens next to the Drop into Slugterra...?
Nentone:
Now I want us to start writing immediately. I was so bored I found myself daydreaming of integration calculus (who the hell does that?) -_-
Please, I beg of you, send me a draft before calculus drives me to obsession to insanity.
Nentone:
f(x)= x^2
f(x+dx)= (x+dx)^2
f(x+dx)= x^2+2dx+dx^2 …
What the heck am I writing? This isn't a story!
Dragonfan! You gotta help me here. I think the school has had me brainwashed.
Please I beg of you to send me the draft.
Psst! And PS, not anything short though ;)
And that's all you're seeing today! Please tell me what I should do! Help me to write more for you guys!