A slight distance away from the scene an [not so] inconspicuous [suspicious] shadow [seriously, there's a trail sewn to the cloak] sneaks [she wishes] stealthily [...really?] up from behind a [oh-so-conveniently-placed] stone-pillar and inspects the surroundings inconspicuously [you used that word already] before letting down its hood [can it get anymore cliché?!] and smirks [...yes, it can]... evilly [...sigh...just get on with it].
Rubbing her hands she lets out a cry of vic- [ALRIGHT! Yes, THIS surely must be the "ANTAGONIST", just get to the point!] tory before slipping back into the shadows.
[...]
[...that's it?]
Well, you used up all the words.
