Okay, a quick reply to Guest for this review
"Okay obviously you're an attention whore who needs serious help and your story sucks. It's so OOC that it isn't even enjoyable. You need to work on your grammar as well."
Well, RANT TIME! Attention whore, I hate that word. I am an attention whore because I tell my sob story to the internet, real reason I do to get it out, I kind of use these author's notes as a journal, but to an outsider, it understandably could be misunderstood that I'm telling it to get sympathy. Or help, something you (guest who wrote the review) said I need. You guys have been amazing, helping me to get up, giving me reasons to live * (someone, pretty sure Wednesday101 but I could be wrong, said I need to stay alive to get laid. Although my parents would not agree with it, a great reason to stay alive. Getting laid is awesome (I don't know personally, I am a virgin, (gasp, a virgin writing a romance, what are you doing, you have no experience. To this I say, the imagination is a wonderful thing my friends ;) (what then hell, parenthesis inside parenthesis inside parenthesis, parenthesis-ception)) but I have non-virgin friends who say it's great. And even if you've already been laid, there's nothing wrong with getting laid again. And again. And again. Shhh, don't tell my parents I feel this way) (way to many parenthesis where am I even continuing my sentence from. I'll put a * sign to tell you)) . (The Lone Period, the sequel to The Lone Ranger. Johnny Depp stars as the period. He had to fight a lady who hit puberty really late, and then was always pregnant so she only had to deal with her period once, for the part. He won by getting some of her 102 kids on his side by bribing them with autographs.)
Okay, sorry, I got lost in whatever the fuck I was doing with the many side stories. I'm going to start over.
I hate the word attention whore. People who are "attention whores" are people who say stuff (I'm so ugly) just to get attention, or compliments, or whatever. A girl posts, "Ugh, I hate my hair, it's so ugly" gets comments calling her an attention whore among the comments, "but your hair is so pretty." So maybe she doesn't actually think her hair is ugly, and just wanted to be told it looks good. So what. Everyone can use compliments. Everyone has insecurities. If someone posts something like that, they clearly have something they aren't okay with about their self, and would could use some praise. Instead of writing, "I want compliments about my hair," they write "my hair is ugly." Yes, it's a little annoying, but if they are insecure enough to go to that tactic, the last thing they need is being called some derogatory name. In the movie, "Cyberbully" (one of my favs) the main character, Taylor, was talking to the gay guy who was bullied for being gay. She says something about how she feels that it hurts more being called a slut when she isn't one, than it would be to be called a homo if she actually was gay. I can't remember the actual quote, but he replies something about how it doesn't matter if it's true or not what theyre (the bullies) are saying, it still hurts.
It's the same thing with "attention whore." It's embarrassing to have something youre doing (obviously I mean something negative) being pointed out. Yes, it's true she (the girl who originally posted my hypothetical post) was being an "attention whore," but it's still not nice to point it out. She needs some love about her hair, give her some love. The best way to help her is to give her what she needs.
That word, "needs", could be controversial. Maybe she's the most popular girl at school. Maybe she's dating the football quarterback and has gorgeous, perfectly straight, thick long blonde hair that can be done up beautifully and easily in a million different ways, or could be left alone and still look just as good. And she knows it. Does she really need another compliment on her hair?
The answer is yes. Obviously if she's posting something an "attention whore" would post about her hair (oh, it's just so ugly), she has some insecurity (my hair's so straight and limp, so and so has beautiful curly brown hair with lots of body, she's so much prettier than me) and needs some reinforcement compliments.
Or maybe she has some other insecurity (my tan skin with my blonde hair looks like I'm that fake bitch so and so who gets way to many spray tans (even though that "fake bitch" gets spray tans because she's insecure about her own skin tone, and now that she's tanner feels better about herself)) and is using her pretty hair to get compliments, any compliments, to help boost her self-esteem in general.
What it narrows down to is everyone has insecurities. Be nice, don't purposely say mean things, and compliment people even if youre sure they don't need it. Everyone can use a compliment. Maybe it'll just bounce off, maybe it will sink in and stay with that person forever as an opinion from an outsider. I have a forever ongoing challenge to compliment at least one person every day. It's a great challenge, I think everyone should try it. Compliments can be something stupid ("I want to marry your snowsuit." What the fuck was I thinking,) or something meaningful (I really love the way youre always smiling. You may not see it but it really lights up the room. Whenever you come it, everything becomes a little bit better for everyone just because your showing off your pearly whites.) Compliment the nine year old girl in front of you in line for your theatre ticket on her dress. Trust me, pre-teens love getting compliments from teenagers. I have a ten year old little sister, I know. Compliment the little girl on her frilly bikini at the pool. Compliment the elderly man at your parents work Christmas party on his cool socks. Compliment the mom with two little toddlers running around her and hanging on her legs on her hair. Compliment people your age. It doesn't matter who.
Everyone, and I mean everyone is beautiful in at least some way. Some people's beauty is more apparent than others, but no one is "ugly," another word I hate. I challenge you, next time you see someone who you don't think is very attractive, stop, and take another look. Really look at them, and I guarantee you, you will find something attractive about them. The longer you look them, if youre looking with a truly open mind, their "ugliness" will start to fade away and you'll start noticing their good traits.
The same thing goes with inner beauty. No one is mean through and through. Some people have more inner beauty than others, but no one is "ugly," even inside. Everyone has some good personality traits about them. Even that weird loser kid who makes all of those jokes that aren't even funny. Even that sexist popular guy who loves "slap ass Friday" and goes through girls like water. Even Justin Beiber (Somewhere). If you look, it's there, I promise.
Even Sebastian. I assume he's what you were talking about when you said "[your story] is so OOC it isn't even enjoyable." (if youre talking about chapter six, sorry, I don't even have anything to say for that monstrosity. Sometimes I just get in these moods.) Yes, Sebastian isn't the same here (this fic) as he is in the book. Or is he? The Mortal Instruments, as much as I love them, only show one side of Sebastian, (I'm thinking of him as a real person who's rounded and different sides, even though he's fictional. Come on guys, were in the fandom world, every character is just as real as nonp-fictional people to us) which is the villain. The bad guy.
But what about COLS? That's my favorite book in the whole series because it shows behind enemy lines. It gives the most evidence to Sebastian's soft side. Remember in Paris? I can't remember exactly how it all came together, but somehow Sebastian and Clary ended up alone together on Paris's streets. He gave her his scarf, settled her down on a park bench and made his scarf into a pillow for her, carried her, etc. She asked about his family, and he answered fully.
You may think Sebastian doesn't have a soft side because of his demon blood, but that isn't true. He isn't just all hard warrior. COLS, page 354, "'I like it here,' Sebastian said, following her gaze, 'because it's as if you were in a past century. No noise of cars, no neon lights. Just – peaceful.'" That right there is a glimpse into Sebastian's humanity. He is more than what he is mostly displayed as. Sorry, this example probably doesn't display it as perfectly as it could, but when I opened the book this is the first one I saw.
Yes, I am probably displaying him as a little softer than what he actually is, but I'm trying my best. Be patient with me. Also remember, I am viewing Sebastian through a veil of bias. I love him so much and want so badly for him to be lovable. Please keep that in mind before making comments like "[your story] is so OOC it isn't even enjoyable." Also keep in mind before you make comments like that, that if youre going off the book, it's also written through veil of bias. It is all told through Clary's perspective, and sometimes Jace's or Jocelyn's or whatever. It doesn't mattter exactly who, just that it is always through someone who hates Sebastian. Please keep that in mind too.
Sorry I don't have a chapter for you yet. I know, I haven't updated in FOREVER. I'm so sorry. I'm partway through chapter 11. I wrote half, and then I stopped and didn't open my computer in forever. I was over at Akakushinigami's house and I was like, "oh yeah my fanfiction," so I pulled it up on my phone and I saw that review and I was like OH HELLLLLL NO BITCH. Posting this was important to me, and this was a little long, even by my standards, to just put as a little something before the actual chapter. I know, were not supposed to put author's notes as whole chapters, whatever, just please don't flag me. I felt this was important to get out, even though I don't have the chapter finished.
Okay, I had COLS open, and I just looked over and saw this and I was like OMFGHWOIEMJFIOPWMEIOPOVM and I feel I need to put it very strongly.
It's page 355, at the bottom of the page. "'Well, let me ask you something now,' Sebastian said. 'Do you think you can forgive me? I mean, do you think forgiveness is possible for someone like me?'"
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