Guess whaaaat? I got my first flame! Yay... Apparently I am "boring, unoriginal, use rip-off attacks, and I use too much OOC-ness" So, message back is...
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"Heal, ya damn bastard!" I exclaimed as I was inserting some healing chakra into Sasuke. I looked at Naruto, but I wasn't even gonna try healing him because of his little furry fuck wouldn't let me.
"Don't call him a bastard..." Sakura muttered, as she set up traps.
"Yeah, Umeko, I don't think calling him a bastard is gonna help him heal faster." Daiki said.
"Shut it Blindclops!" I exclaimed.
"Still can't think of anything better?" Daiki asked.
"Utter one more word and no medic alive will be able to glue back what I cut off..." I warned the Hyuga.
He just laughed.
"IWouldn'tBeLaughing, SheIsCompletelySerious." Makoto deadpanned.
Daiki's face went from an amused to a 'WTF' face.
"Alright, you two need to go and fetch water. Now." I said.
"That's at the other side of the Forest!" Daiki whined.
"Oh pity that, now go." I said.
"I will be staying." Makoto said slowly.
'No... I need them to go. I highly doubt that Orochimaru's little pawns will attack if we have two semi-tall boys that are from very famous clans. Nobody's that stupid. Well maybe Naruto... But... No no no! Stop zoning out!' I thought.
"No, your going." I said.
"YourInjured." Makoto said pointing down at my leg.
"Bitch, please. You think I! THE GREAT UMEKO, THAT IS NINJA BY DAY! GOD BY NIGHT! AND BAD ASS 25 HOURS A DAY, CAN BE HURT BY A KUNAI! DON'T MAKE ME LAUGH!" I said loudly, getting up in defiance.
'OH MY GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOD! THIS HURTS LIKE FUCKIN' HELL! IT'S LIKE TWO DRILLS ARE GOING THROUGH MY SHIN, AND THEIR MEETING IN THE MIDDLE!'
"See? No pain at all, now go the fuck away!" I said walking in a circle.
Daiki looked at my face, then at my bandaged leg. He looked at Makoto who was staring at me with a, "That's some bullshit," face.
"Let'sGoFetchWater." Makoto said walking into the forest.
"Okay. Umeko, my eyes will be watching over here to make sure nothing happens." Daiki said as he followed Makoto.
I waved. As soon as they were out of sight I rolled my eyes. I began limping over towards Sakura.
"Umeko stop!" Sakura exclaimed.
I instantly stopped in my tracks.
"There's a trap there." Sakura said.
I looked down and saw a thin rope. If I touched that I would get smashed by a log. So, would I technically be logged. Ooooh, what I would have given to be reborn into Naruto Abridged, or Ninjabridged. Wow, I haven't thought about those in a long time... Hm... Anyway!
I stepped over it and limped over to my twin.
"So, what happened to your teammates?" I asked.
"I was useless... That's what happened. This guy, he attacked us. He didn't want our scroll. He wanted to hurt Sasuke. I was so scared, I forgot everything you taught me. I couldn't do a thing. I didn't throw a punch, I didn't even attempt to get us out of there. It was all Sasuke and Naruto. If I had just fought. Been brave like you tried make me all those years ago, maybe this wouldn't have happened. Maybe Sasuke would be awake without this weird bruise on his neck. Maybe Naruto would be his normal annoying self. Why am I this way? Why am I so weak and useless?" Sakura said, now looking at me with tears in her eyes.
"Oh, that's an easy one. Your weak because that's just how you are. You get afraid and forget everything you learn. Your blinded by your so called love for Sasuke that you can't even protect him. You need to train and train, learn to not fear, learn to kill your feelings. Because unlike me you have those troublesome things. So maybe you should train, learn something useful, get stronger than Sasuke. Maybe kick his ass around a little bit, maybe he'd see you more than just another girl that he can ignore, or in this case the useless girl that almost got him and Naruto killed." I said.
She was now bawling.
"Ugh. Sakura, I suck at these inspirational speeches, so you need to stop expecting some nice Naruto's Believe It Hokage speech, because I'm not charismatic or anything. So, just focus on what I said you need to do and hopefully it will make you want to train or something." I said.
She was silent.
Makoto POV
"So was she just wanting to have some quality time with her sister or something? Cause that doesn't really sound like the bitchy Umeko I know." Daiki asked.
"NotExactly." I said.
We were hiding in a nearby tree watching the two sisters as they did their poor excuse for guarding the two injured members of Team 7.
"Maybe she thinks their gonna be attacked and wants us to be away so we won't get hurt, because she secretly cares about us! Little sociopath Ume-Ume is beginning to have feelings instead of the cold anger that is latched within her soul!" Daiki said dramatically.
"NotInTheSlightest." I deadpanned.
"You sassy bastard." Daiki teased.
"Affirmative." I deadpanned once again, forcing myself not to chuckle at the Hyuga's antics. Frankly, I think our pink haired teammate is a bad influence on us.
Suddenly, Daiki fell out of the tree with two senbon around where his thoracic vertebrae, out cold.
I turned around, readying my chakra for a strong genjutsu when a guy with a Sound forehead protector was right there with a kunai at my throat, about to put a hand over my mouth.
My fist flew out and punched him.
I jumped out of the tree and got in a taijutsu position.
'Hopefully my lack of taijutsu knowledge will at least distract them from the genjutsu I have prepared for them. I need to get a hold of Umeko!' I thought.
I bit my thumb and did a few handsign. A bear cub appeared.
"Go to her." I said before I was barraged with a series of punches and kicks, that all hit.
Umeko's POV
"You should go to sleep, Sakura." I said.
"Why? I shouldn't rely on you for everything, it's like being a kid all over a thing." she said.
"Shut up, and sleep." I growled.
Suddenly, a bear ran out of the woods.
It straight to me.
"Makoto..." I said.
'They had to have been attacked. And actually... Knowing them they were right in a nearby tree watching us the entire ti- They were attacked by the Sound Stooges... It's obvious. They should have been back a while ago. Ah... Good thinking, psychopath.'
"Makoto was attacked wasn't he." I said.
The cub nodded.
I sighed. "Alright, go guard them, or see if you can get Mama Bear or something to guard them. Just don't bring them here, okay?" I asked.
The cub nodded.
"And on Makoto is a scroll, guard it with your life, or tell Mama Bear to do that, okay?" I whispered.
The cub nodded again before running into the woods.
"I spoke too soon. Sakura wake up. We're being attacked." I said.
Her eyes widened and she shook like Chihuahua.
"Wha-what?!" she stuttered.
"Yeah, three little Sound cowards are waiting in the trees. Come on out! I've been dying for a good fight. Ahem. OLLY OLLY OXEN BITCHES!" I called mockingly.
"Oh lookie here, two little girls playing ninja? Isn't that cute?" Dosu said.
"Oh look, a woman who doesn't know any better. How cute." I retorted.
"Hey watch your mouth, you little bitch. We're not here to fight either one of you. We're here for Sasuke. So wake him up." Zoku said.
"Oh, you want him? HA! I'd give you a much better fight than him any da-"
"WHO ARE YOU! HOW DO YOU KNOW SASUKE?! IS IT BECAUSE OF OROCHIMARU! I KNOW HE'S BEEN PULLING THE STRINGS! WHATS THE MARK ON SASUKE'S NECK?" Sakura yelled.
"Way to advertise your business stupid." I said.
I sighed, 'Damn, this fight is a little hazy. But I know Sakura gets her ass beat. So, let's steal a little spot light shall we? But, I honestly didn't think I'd have to use this. Hm. Oh well...' I thought.
I took out a storage scroll that was full of healing chakra. It quickly healed my leg, but it didn't have much in there so this was a small fix.
I got up with a slightly healed leg.
I stepped infront of the members of Team 7.
"Damn... I'm gonna need to do something evil really soon before I start to be counted as a protagonist." I said.
"COME AT ME BRO!" I yelled.
Zaku began to run at me when Dosu yelled at him to stop.
He noticed the freshly turned stones and exposed soil. I smirked.
"Your confident for someone with no talent. Such an obvious booby trap." Dosu said.
They jumped up and sprang the real trap and this was all Sakura's doing. I guess she does hang out with Naruto enough to know some trap/pranks.
"No! The trap was above us all along!" Zaku exclaimed.
They blasted the log easily.
All three of them came speeding towards me.
I gave a laugh.
I instantly had my whip in my hand. I whipped it around Zaku's ankle pulling him towards me, giving him a chakra infused punch to the stomach before giving him a strong kick into a tree.
Suddenly, Lee was there and did kicked Dosu who flew into Kin which resulted in them both flat on the ground.
"Nice to see ya, Jumpsuit." I said.
"Name's Rock Lee." he said.
"Umeko, Sakura's sister. I'm guessing your protecting her cause you like her or something. Kay, cool." I said hoping to skip some dialogue.
"Lee! Where did you come from!?" Sakura exclaimed.
"I came because you needed me and I'll always be there when you need me!" Lee said.
"Yeah, that's cute and everything, really it is. But I'd much rather focus on the pissed off future sore losers over there!" I said.
"I'll get the men! You can get the girl." Lee said.
"Fuck you, I'll get who I want to. I just happen to feel like kickin' the little girl's ass." I said.
"Oh really? You think some pink haired girly girl can defeat me? Try it." she said with senbon in her hands.
"Oh? Well okay, then. PLUM BLOSSOM PUNCH!" I yelled punching the ground near her feet.
The ground rumbled beneath her and she fell back.
I jumped on top of her and began to repeatedly punch her in the face.
"You know? This is easier than I thought! And it's perfect! I've been waiting for a chance to sit back and just PUNCH TO MY HEART'S CONTENT!" I yelled, punching her on each side of the face. Sometimes switching to her gut.
She yelled in pain each time.
Suddenly I felt a sharp pain in my ear. As I put my hands up against my ear, she shoved me off of her and kicked me away from her. I saw Lee lying on the ground.
"God damn it Lee." I said.
I got up and took my hand from my ear.
"You bitches think you can hurt me with sound? I'M UMEKO! AS CLOSE TO A SUPER HUMAN THERE IS! I'M GOD PERSONIFIED AND I SENTENCE YOU TO HELL A THOUSAND TIMES OVER!" I yelled.
"SHADOW CLONE JUTSU!" I yelled making three of me.
All three of me smirked.
"PLUM BLOSSOM PUNCH!" we all yelled rushing forward and punching the ground.
As the three fell back we all got identical whips out, snapping it around them.
"Fire Style: Dragon Flame Jutsu!" I said, blowing fire on my whip which rushed forward through my whip catching all three of them on fire.
My shadow clones then disappeared since I appeared to be almost out of chakra.
"So, tell me! Are you three flaming? Is the pain seeping through your bones forming a sensation of pain, burning, and torture!?" I said mockingly.
"THIS IS WHAT HAPPENS WHEN YOU MESS WITH GOD!" I yelled.
Then, suddenly the three of them popped.
"What the hell?!" I exclaimed.
"UMEKO!" Sakura yelled.
I was grabbed by a black arm from behind.
I was held to where I couldn't move a muscle. There was an intense ringing going through my ears.
"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!" I screamed in agony.
"Who's going through torture now, girlie?!" I heard.
Sakura's POV
It was hard to believe sometimes that Umeko was the younger twin. She was stronger than me, more confident than me, and better at everything, not including schoolwork.
She was amazing, I looked up to her, even though she should have been looking up to me. I was the older sister, I was the one that is supposed to protect her from everything. But I've done terrible. When I looked at her trapped with that damned ringing in her ears it made me angry. I was already pissed from what happened to Sasuke, Naruto, and Lee. But this, this right here, this was my limit. I love Sasuke, but blood is thicker than water. I could almost feel the pain my sister was feeling through her blood curdling scream.
No.
NO.
"CHA!" I yelled running as fast as I could forward and punching Dosu's weird sound arm band.
He glared at me than looked at his arm band.
It was severely dented with a fist print right in the middle of it.
"WHAT THE HELL DID YOU DO?!" he yelled. He tried to punch me but I jumped back, throwing shuriken at him.
Suddenly Zaku was in front of Dosu and he made a wall of air, repelling my shuriken.
Then, I felt myself being forced on my knees.
That girl, Kin had me by my long hair.
"Lovely hair, so much more bounce and shine than mine has! What jutsu is that? Deep Conditioning no Jutsu? You're a disgrace to all ninja, fussing with your looks when you should be concentrating on your training!" Kin said.
It made me think back to my little sister, what she said with no care for feelings. Here I was hearing it all over again from a girl who didn't even know me.
'She's right...'
"Zaku... Why don't you finish Sasuke or maybe her other pink haired friend. Right in front of the love sick little least we can do is entertain her." Kin said.
"Ha! Good one!" Zaku commented.
'I can't. I'm just a burden to them. Just someone they haave to protect! I never help! All I do is hurt people. Be useless. I care about them all. Even Naruto, even Umeko... Even if I've done a thing for her. She helped me train, after I abandoned her. If I give up, if I don't help the people I care about. It's the same as abandoning them. I'll never abandon anyone again. I'm going to be different. I need to help the people I love!' I thought with tears running down my face.
I gripped my kunai tightly.
"Your tricks are useless against me, little girl." Kin said.
"You think so? Think again, you dirty bitch!" I said cutting my hair out of Kin's grasp.
'I'd always thought of myself as a full-fledged ninja. Equal with my teammates. Crushing on Sasuke, Scolding Naruto. Watching them safely from the background. While they would both risk anything to protect me. Lee says he likes me too. He risked his life to come between me and danger. And Umeko, my precious sister. While I've never did a thing for her. Never even given her a birthday present, she helped me. Risked her life for me, after I abandoned her and left her alone. She had no friends, she only had me. The only one that was there for her. She still helped me. You're all my teachers and you've shown me what I want to be... Like you... All of you. Now it's your turn to watch my back!'
Oh my god! I am kind of emotional right now, just from writing this. It's like it's not sad or anything, but it just gives me a feeling of... I don't know. Empowerment. Like Sakura over here is actually redeeming herself! Yes! And she will be different after this experience, I hope. HAHAHA! It's not like I plan or anything, cause I don't.
SatsuUzumaki: I was thinking for Hinata, Sunflower Strike, because her name can mean sunflower... You know me, all combining suggestions and stuffz. But I feel like one of my reviewers will have a better idea. And, I can't tell you... Spoilziez and stuffz.
Bloodshot111: Sorry! That chapter I kind of forced myself to do, because I wanted to get to this one (I'm excited about this one like seriously). So, if your too confused, will you tell me so that I can explain better maybe in a PM or next chapter A/N. Kay? ^-^
NoIdea135: I know for sure I wanna use Strike (I've had two reviewers use strike) What do you think of Sunflower Strike? I explained why for that one on the first response I did this chapter.
Counting Sinful Stars: YES! YESYESYES! I tried so hard to make a Mary Sue but it was like. It's hard to do it on purpose! It was like I knew the cliché stuff, but I suck with cliché (call me a hipster if you will, but I'm not... I read Naruto for crying out loud... NEVERMIND) And what do you think of Sunflower Strike? I wanna use strike so baaaad!
Umeko: That damn Mari is a bitch. She needs to go choke on dat sand. Hmph.
Gueststar: So I successfully made Mari unlikable?! YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY! Is she Mary-Sue-ish? I named her Mari for a reason XD (Mari=Mary) TEEHEE
Umeko: Why are you hiding under a bed? That idiot author woman can't think of anything all that good anyway...
Legendz25: Mari? Because I wanted everyone to hate her... I was expecting a bunch of 'I HATE MARI! SHE NEEDS TA GTFO! ASDFJKL;FDFKAJGFJLVFFGFDGKF' I got a bit of that, but nothing too bad, because my reviewers are hilarious! XD And thanks Legendz! Means a lot!
Madarra9999: Sorry, Suzume is my servant. I changed her name to Nail. Now when I rule the world I can be like Super Kami Guru! And I'm the ruler of the world... Forever AND EVER BWUHAHAHAHAHA!
Please excuse her, she accepts. (Good luck)
MADARRA9999! GATHER THE DRAGON BALLS AND WISH FOR ME A PLASMA TV!
Wrong universe, Umeko.. Wrong universe...
Anon-chan: Wow! Thanks for all the reviews! So now to answering all of them. YES! MAKOTO IS JUST SO ADORABLE! If I met him he would faint because I would glomp him. Glomp him so hard. Yup. Just through in a sexual innuendo while talking about a 12 year old. I'm disgusting (15 year old, go figure). And frankly, Umeko and Sakura's parents are very tolerant. But, I think the only reason Umeko hasn't been knocked out/kicked out is because her Dad's there for her. And YES ANOTHER MARI HATER! (I am on the Die Mari Train too!)
Umeko: CHOO CHOO MOTHER FUCKERS!
EasilyAddictedGirl: Spoiler, she is the rival. And I believe you'll be getting to know her better either next chapter or the chapter after. It depends on whether I want to do like an Omake about her or not. And Gaara's amazing! Gaara is love, Gaara is life. Not Shrek. It's the Kazekage with the love tattoo! XD
Bacon of Doom: UMEKOOOOOO! WE HAVE ANOTHER ONE ON THE DIE MARI TRAIN!
Umeko: CHOO CHOO MOTHER FUCKERS!
I was thinking Sunflower Strike combining what you said with what a few other said.
Umeko: Hey, BakaChan is too chicken to ask you if she should play Homestuck. She just started and is confused and doesn't know if she should continue. So, yeah...
BakaChan: Don't do it! That fandom! It's everywhere! It's like Hetalia on Tumblr! Not that I'm complaining... I love me some Hetalia...