Thanks guys, for reading. And PrincessofFlames for the complaints(I say that as a good thing) that I'm going to talk about for the next few chapters. Anything else? I don't think so.

Oh yeah. I don't own PJO/ HOO.

"Better," Annabeth nodded, more satisfied with Percy's structure. "What else do you have?"

"I have,

At capm, all of hte gurls wer faling for Percy. He was hot, col, msulcrau(muscular), and a Son of Poseidon, one of the big three. Espeshully a certain dauter of Athena named Anabth.-"

"Stop! First of all, when we were twelve you were, skinny, average, weak, slow, and insecure. And second of all, I liked you, but I wasn't 'falling' for you. And the other girls definitely weren't."

"How do you know?"

"I'm no daughter of Aphrodite, but all girls know."

"Suuree they do."

3. Hey, People!

So what was wrong with Percy's description of himself? Everything. First of all, he had no actual details such as black hair and green eyes. Second of all, theres almost no way that is true of any new camper(I can believe the older ones that have trained and fought longer have six packs and muscles and stuff, but not the new campers). And lastly, it's completely untrue.

These idealistic people have names. They're called Mary Sues(or Gary Sues for the guys). These are the six pack without even trying, or excersizing, unnaturally hot, nearly invincible people. They have all these cool powers, blessed by all the Olympians or something, and can like, read minds and weird stuff. Even Percy and Annabeth get hurt.

Read "Attack of the Plot Bunnies" by Nightmare Before Halloween and "When Sues Attack" by Fandoms Foreva if you have time. They may seem badly written at first glance, but they're meant to be parodies and are pretty accurate. I have most of my 'Mary Sue' information from "When Sues Attack" because I had no idea what they were before I read that fanfiction.

If you don't have tme to read it at all, and I'm sure you do since you're reading this now, so if you are too lazy to read it, here's a general description of a Mary Sue and other things you should do/not do.

1. Mary Sues are perfect in every way and practically undefeated. They're beautiful, sometimes smart, powerful, and everything comes easily to them.

2. Don't give them weird names unless it's a parody or you make fun of it in your story or something.

3. Don't contradict yourself

These are the three main things to remember about characters. Number 3 means, don't give them straight hair in one chapter, forget, then say that they have wavy hair in the next chapter. It really confuses a reader. Or at least this reader.

Don't make a character completely opposite from the actual character, unless you specifically say OOC/AU or like fem! whatever.

Be detailed in a character description though. It's a bit tough. You don't want to describe something for so long that it bores the reader out of his/her mind, but you don't want to just be like, he was hot.

Basically, make your character at least realistic and descriptive.

Another thing is the person's personality throughout the whole story. Just because you say Percy's funny doesn't mean he is. You have to make him crack a few jokes to support the claim. Just because you say Thalia is violent doesn't mean she is. You can't go,

Thalia is pretty violent.

And in the next chapter:

When we were crossing the street, she helped an old lady across the street. She then proceeded to walk her home and opened the door for her.

You see what I mean?

I feel like I forgot about a ton of stuff in this chapter, so if you can, just remind me! And as always, what do you hate/love when reading, what do you disagree with, and thanks for reading! Sorry for this short chapter. It was like 'Test and workload' week at school. I know, I know, stupid excuses. I can't help it though...sorry!