This isn't a fucking chapter. It's just a few things I feel need to be discussed.
Don't talk down about my story, please. This is the first thing I've ever written. Telling me I'm unoriginal isn't really helping me, and considering I came up with the whole plot for this, and a few characters, by myself, I think you're wrong.
NUSA is NOT my own creation. It was created, as far as I know, by Windchimed, and was used in her story Determinant (which is incredible. Read it.) I take NO credit for the New United States of America; full credit goes to Windchimed, and if she'd like me to remove it/rename it, I'll gladly oblige.
That being said, I used NUSA for two reasons. The first being it makes sense to rename a country after multiple wars tore it apart. The second is that it fits perfectly with my story, and for that matter, the original Divergent trilogy. It just works for me, but I can easily change the name if it's too much of an issue.
Now onto the second point of this update
A few unclear things/inconsistencies
1. Peter took the memory serum. To be honest, when I wrote that chapter, I forgot that he took it. But for the purposes of this story, he didn't take it. You'll see why I need Peter to be the old Peter later on.
2. Axel. He's quite mysterious so far, so I'll clear him up.
Axel and Eric are/were identical twins. They were born into Erudite. They lost their parents when they were really young, and they were handed from relative to relative until they ended up up in an orphanage, where Axel stayed until the age of 12 and a half.
During their childhood, Axel was just better than Eric. I can't think of any other way to put it. He was smarter, nicer, more attractive. The only thing Eric did better was fight.
Eric used this to his advantage. Out of jealousy, he beat Axel every day, until the day Axel left Chicago.
I have no clue if this is true, or if it's been previously used, but in my story, the Erudite take a pre-aptitude test at twelve years old. When Eric took his, he got an Erudite result.
Axel got all five factions. And he left, because he knew this wasn't supposed to happen. When living out side the fence, Axel witnessed countless murders, and tons of graphic violence. It scarred him, physically and emotionally. He made his way to South Dakota. The population of South Dakota are all Divergent, whether it be for two factions or all five. This is the result of an experiment that is identical to the experiment in Chicago, but it succeeded for some reason the NUSA government still can't figure out. When the South Dakotans found out they were an experiment, and Divergent, they quietly started a revolution. But somehow, they were found out, and their leader was murdered.
At the time of the murder, Axel had been in South Dakota for almost 4 years, and he had risen to a position of power. When the leader of the People's Resistance was killed, he was elected the new leader. And for the last two years, he's been spying and gathering information. That's pretty much it.
He looks like Eric because he found it convenient. He got all the tattoos, piercings, etc.
One last thing. The South Dakotans felt that they should continue the faction system, even after they found out it was a lie. They developed serums that replicated the traits of each faction, and Axel took the Dauntless one. It made him deadlt in combat, brave, courageous. All the traits of a Dauntless member. He came to Chicago to recruit Tris and Tobias, because he needs them to help overthrow the NUSA government. In two years fron the day the three met, the NUSA are planning to blow up South Dakota. They need to finish their task before then.
So, yeah. Hope that clears up everything, and if you notice any more inconsistencies, let me know and I'll do my best to fix them.
That's pretty much it. I hope you guys enjoy my story. Also, check out my other stories. Reverse, and Pain. Review!