Okay. I will write a chapter, but first I just want to adress some very hurtful things said by the AF Critic.

Rating for Chapter 1-16: 1 out of 10

First of all, whoever told you that putting lyrics to "My Little Sunshine" would get you sued is plain ignorant. Because music producers from the dawn of time just LOVE to troll on Fanfiction, looking for teen authors to sue. NO. They would rather roll in their money stacks in heaven. (Um, no. Actually the creators of this website told me that the song was not in the public domain. Therefore, if I didn't take it down, I could get sued and lose my account.)

Secondly, Length. LengthlengthLENGTH! AN unwritten rule of FF is that every chapter is at LEAST 1000 words. It's more of a courtesy to your readers, who decided to actually go on FF and read your story instead of doing a bajillion other, more productive, things to do. (Frigg you. Have you ever even written a story? Because it's not that easy. When I write a chapter, I write it all in one sitting. This is because I have a terrible tendency to procrastinate. If I write half,then save it, it's never going to get published. Also, I have a life. I don't have the time to sit down for half an hour, writing and perfecting thousand word chapters.)

-Winces- In on the third chapter, and the word MARY SUE flashed through my mind

In case you don't know (It took me a while to grasp what it really meant) a Mary Sue (or Gary Stu) is basically a perfect character or a wish fulfillment of an author on Fanfiction. There are a lot on FF, and it is very hard not to write an Original character without it being a Mary Sue. It can also mean, "Self-Insertion." Which I believe, is your case.

(Okay. Can somebody please explain to me how Dani is a Mary Sue? Because she is not perfect. She gets bullied. She breaks down. She gets upset about stupid things. She is human. And, as for the self insertion, no. She was created solely for the purpose of showing people how awful bullying can be, and how much words can hurt. *Cough, Cough*)

What the...Ok. At chapter 13. A DREAM? -looks to all the other chapters- Those were all a dream? Why didn't you put them in one chapter? It makes no sense. (Because. I wanted the audience to have some time to realize. And there were some people who did. Its not my fault you weren't smart enough to see the signs)

And...What the HELL is Myles doing with a gun? No...Just no.

(He same Dani being threatened, and figured he needed to scare them off. Duh.)

OOC on Beckett and Myles are polar opposites. Myles is like Artemis. Proper, intelligent, computer genius, and always wears a suit. Beckett wears jeans, and is basically a regular boy. Beckett isn't as OOC as Myles, but… -shakes head- (Okay. I realize that I made Myles different than Colder imagined him. But just think about it. He grew up with pretty much everyone in his life a positive influence, especially Beckett. Artemis grew up with a dad who was the head of a criminal empire. And, even with how he was when Holly met him, she changed him in just a few years. Just imagine if he'd grown up with her. That's why I decided to make Myles this way.)

Chapter 14- I GIVE UP!

It was cute. I liked the idea of Myles falling in love with someone. But honestly, NO! I just...Cant . It was too confusing, and no amount of explanation is going to make me see this story in a different light. Too short, too OOC, and too….Well, did you even read the books and understand that Myles and Beckett are TWINS? They have the same birthday!

(Yes I read the books, Jackass. I have a special shelf where I have a paperback and hardcover copy of each. And when did I indicate that they weren't twins? When did I say anything about their birthdays? If you're referring to that one authors note, I WAS LYING IN BED WITH A FEVER OF 102 DEGREES MORON!)

Like I said. There's too much to even begin to fix. I give up.

(Good. I don't want to fix it. I and the majority of my audience like my story the way it is. So. Go screw yourself.)

to the story!

-Dani-

Juliet adjusted my veil one last time, being careful to not mess up my hair.

"There."She said, satisfied. "Perfect." My father stepped in.

"Dani, it's almost time. Are you ready?" I nodded. It was a simple ceremony we had planned. Juliet as my maid of honor. No bridesmaids. Beckett as the best man. Juliet walked out first. The crown gasped. Juliet, despite my adamancy that I wanted a blue dress for her, had chosen a bright pink, sleeveless dress. She was absolutely stunning. The piano changed, and I heard the rustle of many many people standing up. I grasped my father's arm tightly, and we began to walk. There was Artemis, Myles and Becketts older brother, playing the piano, and his wife Holly, sitting in the first row. They had invited Minerva, and Trouble. Trouble was curiously short. So was Holly, for that matter. But I didn't ask, not wanting to be rude. Mr and Mrs Fowl were in the audience somewhere, and so was my own mother. Butler was probably somewhere in the shadows, in case someone tried to attack. I finally reached the father placed my hands in Myles's, and walked back down the aisle to his seat. We repeated the age old vows so many people had spoken.

"I do." Myles said.

"And you, Dani, take Myles to be your lawfully wedded husband, to have or to hold,for better or worse, in sickness and in health, until death or zombies do you part?" That was my idea.

"I do."

"I now pronounce you Husband and Wife. You may now kiss the bride." Myles leaned down to kiss me, than picked me up bridal style.

"Aaggh! Myles! Put me down!" He just chuckled at me.

The reception was amazing. Juliet had really outdone herself. As Myles and I spun around on the floor, I couldn't believe how happy I was.

"Absolutely nothing could make this any more perfect." Myles said. I grinned at him.

"I'm pregnant." Myles gasped.

"Really?"

"Yup. Only about a month along, but . . ." Myles's smile grew even bigger. At the end of the reception,despite my protests, he picked me up bridal style, and carried me through the rice storm. Outside, Myles's car was waiting, decorated by Juliet and Beckett. We laughed so hard we thought we would cry as the car sped off.

I couldn't imagine it. I would get to be this happy for the rest of my life.

Forever.