A/N Okay a few things first if you want to bitch and moan about a new entry perhaps you would have taken a hint to just oh I don't know not read it? So if you want to bitch and moan about "it's gone on too long" or "Rage is a Mary Sue" Oh which by the way is wrong he can't be a Mary Sue because Rage is male not a female so it would be a Gary Stue. If you are complaining about the stories themselves well guess what I enjoy writing them and because it's something I enjoy I am not going to stop so if you don't like them use a little thing all humans have called common sense and just don't read them. If you don't have any common sense get some it can save your life. Also I have gotten a few things on OC's and here is my responds it's the same as the first chapter unless I say otherwise they are not being accepted.
Now I AM PETCH look I have a few things to say to you because you clearly can't take a hint. Your reviews are bullshit they have no relevance to anything going on in any of my stories! Quit trying to post them you would think after blocking your actual account you would take a hint. Clearly that is too much for your dumb little head to comprehend. Trying to post as a guest won't help you either. I have said before I have moderation on because of dicks like you. Yeah and it's spelled dick not deck cause you clearly have no idea how to spell. If I were you and knew what was good for you I would take this as a hint and fuck off. You're bullshit will not get through onto the reviews page no matter what you try you will always fail. make a new account I block it, try to post as a guest I delete it in moderation. I will always win no matter how you look at it. Take your bullshit somewhere else because you clearly need to learn when to quit. Also to the numerous other guest reviews that are similar take this as a hint too there is a difference between criticism Like Senpi is doing and just complete bullshit.
I am fed up with it. within 12 minutes you posted a "review" on each chapter of a 21 chapter story? It is not possible that you read all 21 chapters of a 30,000+ word story and still posted your "reviews" within 12 minutes. It would take anyone about 45 seconds to a minute to scroll to the bottom of a page without reading, type a review, hit the submit button, move on to the next chapter and repeat. That would mean to just submit and move to the next chapter it would take at least 15.75 minutes to do that alone. As for the reading of each chapter as more proof most college graduates read 300 words a minute according to multiple studies by different universities and institutions including University of Nebraska Medical Center, University of Texas, among others. with 30,000 words it would take the average college graduate 100 minutes to read the whole thing not including the maybe 1-3 seconds to buffer the next page and the extra minute to post the "review" making the minimal read and review time for said story 121 minutes or just over two hours. So you can take that or your kindergarten level insults, and spelling somewhere else because you have no power here! Sorry for going way over the top with the mathematics and hard facts but he claims he can so just to prove him wrong here's the facts and the.
As for you Writer you make some valid points and I should have been more clear on somethings. For starts this is a spin-off so it is separate from the original series. While elements from the old ones might be mentioned here or there this story is it's own thing. The whole plot is going to be Rage trying to mend his relations with his old friends and his son Flare. Second on Rage yes he is a huge Gary Stu in the originals I will admit that but in this his power is greatly reduced because here he hasn't used his powers since the 16th story and there won't be any big battles, a few little brawls here and there but nothing huge that requires 5 chapters to do. Which I might add speaking of the original series, nobody has to go read the first 16 because I summed up all of the important plot points in a soliloquy by Twilight. As for the form, Rage has the ability to change forms as needed but because of the cloak he needed it to prevent any unwanted guests from following him. The cloak he needed to fit him until he could make sure he was safe in Equestria. As for RD's death Rage was not the one to revive her another character did that one I do not own. Rage does not have the power to bring others back from the dead, he can only heal. Also on the whole Flare situation, there are reasons that he is with Rage and Rainbow Dash if you really want to find that our it is the first thing in this chapter. considering you read this that is.
Enough of that though time to get going...
Chapter 2: anger
The friends walk in a look at Rage before Flare hits him in the face. "Why did you just leave like that?!" he yells
"That was pretty low Rage, you should have told him." Rainbow says backing the young pony up.
"You haven't even wrote!" Twilight yells "Do you have any idea what it has been like?! When bad things happened that you could have gotten out of no problems we all wished you were here to help us! You abandoned us Rage!"
"You act as if I had a choice!" Rage responds
"You always have a choice!" Flare yells "I grew up without a father for seven years because of you! Do you know what it was like?! Do you know what it is like to not have a father?!"
"I do..." Rage says his emotions quickly switching from anger to depression, Flare had hit a soft spot on the guardian. "...I know what it is like to see both parents killed in front of me... to live without them...knowing they will never return."
"Well it serves you right!" Flare yells "Because what right minded parent could be proud of you?! You just left us! Your son! Your best friends with nothing more then some cheesy words!"
"Hay there partner," Applejack says "I think that's a little too far." she looks at Flare who smiled at Rage's tear filled eyes. Thing was Rage knew that the young Pegasus was right, for all the things he tried to do to protect him and his friends he brought more pain to them then happiness. From the dangerous adventures he never stopped to think how they felt about the possibility of losing him at any point.
"Maybe he is right..." Rage sighs, "Perhaps I am better off alone..."
"Rage..." Rainbow says as he runs off.
"Serves him right." Rarity says
"How can you say that Rarity?!" Rainbow asks
"He abandoned us Rainbow Dash all of us!" Twilight says "As far as I am concerned he is no friend of ours!"
"But Twiligth what about-" Rainbow begins but Applejack stops her
"Enough Rainbow Dash!" she hollers "They're right, he isn't who we all thought he was."
"We didn't need to be quite as harsh about it though." Fluttershy says
"Whatever do you mean darling?" Rarity asks "He just needs to understand the situation that's that."
"How can you all do this to him?!" Rainbow asks but the others were gone they had left the room. With a grunt of anger Rainbow flew off to find Rage. She was mad at him as well but...she was the Element of Loyalty and it wouldn't be very loyal to leave him alone like that. Thing is where would he go? Would he just leave? Rainbow decided the first place to check would be the tundra around The Crystal Empire perhaps somewhere secluded, away from everypony.
Rage was sitting in a cave somewhere crying. "It's not like I wanted to go..." he sobs, his eyes were drying up from the excessive amount of crying and no tears were left. "I know Flare wanted a father... I haven't been there for him like I should have been... I know why Rainbow wanted to adopt him given where he came from and my objections to why but she talked me into it... what kind of monster am I? I am better off alone as I was before I can't make friends only destroy them...or kill all I have ever done in my life is kill and shed blood...everywhere I go a trail of blood follows... my blood, my enemies blood...innocent blood." Rage's thoughts were interrupted by the sound of Rainbow's voice echoing
"Rage?" she calls "Rage I know your in there come on out so we can talk!"
"Go away!" Rage yells in response "Go back to your friends! Leave me here!"
"I can't do that." Rainbow sighs walking in and searching for him soon she came across him. "Rage you know I am a loyal pony I am not going to just leave you." she sighs thinking "Look we are all upset about it you did a pretty bad thing leaving us for so long, when you left we thought it was going to be a month at best but after about three or four we felt abandoned. After seeing you suddenly after seven years it was just a stir of emotions. Happiness, sadness, anger and hate. Flare asked all the time when you would return and it was the hardest thing to tell him I didn't know if you would ever return. Please come back to Ponyville tell the others why you had to leave maybe it would cheer them up and clear your head as well."
"I don't know RD..." Rage says looking at the cold stone ground covered in tears. "...After what I have done I am not sure I can do that."
"What happened to the Rage always looking to the brighter side of things?" RD asks him "I thought you always said to live life to the fullest!" A silence filled the air for a few minutes as the two sat there in the cold, dark, damp cave Rainbow looking at Rage who was looking at the ground. Rage then finally looks up
"Alright Rainbow Dash I will try..." he says softly
"Thank you!" she says hugging him tightly
"Too...tight..." Rage pants and she lets go
"I thought you were tougher then that!" she says "Slashed at, burned, frozen, electrocuted, mauled, impaled, shot and sometimes all at once!"
"I haven't seen that kind of action for over 7 years Dash." Rage sighs "I haven't even used a single Chaos Spear since then... no even Chaos Control...in fact it has been so long that my body has adjusted to not using any that most of my mid-power to high powered attack would hurt me just by using them. Or even kill me."
"Wow..." Rainbow says as the two walk out of the cave "And flying?"
"You don't want to see that." Rage sighs
"Come on." she says "For old time's sake?"
"Fine..." Rage sighs after a few seconds and he takes off slowly. he was having trouble balancing and Rainbow flies up to him.
"Come on, I thought you could travel faster then the speed of light Rage!" she taunts
"Rainbow Dash please..." Rage says "You know I can."
"Prove it." she smiles making him sigh again before taking off at a high speed soon he crashes into the grasses just outside of the tundra. Rainbow then comes down chuckling at the mud on him "here let me help with that." she says bringing a cloud over and kicking it to wash him off. A lot like she had done to Twilight when she first met her back after Twilight moved to Ponyville before they defeated Nightmare Moon together.
"Can we walk?" he asks
"Certainly." Rainbow answers following him down the dirt path. "Remember why we adopted Flare?"
"Yeah," Rage sighs "It was for him, not us so he could have a better shot at happiness...his parents didn't want him and threw him out...now look at what I have done... I screwed it all up! I have to make it up to him somehow..."
"You'll think of something." Rainbow says
"How do you know that?" Rage asks looking at her doubtfully
"Rage you killed the living embodiment of Darkness, saved Equestria and Mobius by doing so. You built some sort of flying machine for Celestia's sake!"
"That machine wasn't all me I had a lot of help." Rage answers "But I get where you are going with this...I owe not only Flare but the others a lot for what I have done...I am going to make it up to them somehow you'll see. By the way why were you guys so calm until we reached the Palace of Friendship?"
"There were other ponies outside Rage, we didn't want to make a scene! We aren't fillies after all." Rainbow says with a sigh 'for all the things he has done in his life you would think he'd know better by now' she thinks
to be continued