BOOOOOM!
A black wall was blown apart by Keldeo's Focus Blast.
No matter what we say or do,
Keldeo activated his Secret Sword and swung it, causing the screen to burst.
It's never up to me and you,
Victini rose into the air, his ears glowing with the power of V-Create.
We smile now and sing a cheer!
Keldeo and Santa Paws screamed in horror as huge burst of dark purple energy erupted in front of them.
Ghost Pony Rider roared.
Kyurem and Cryogonal the Critics both screamed as a zombie Lucario with a chainsaw appeared on their TV.
Keldeo screamed in horror, but sprayed himself with water to snap out of it.
Imperator Justinian was seated behind a desk in his study, with Keldeo standing on the other side.
The show must go on!
"FORESHADOWING!" Munna exclaimed.
"NO SHIP, SHERCLOCK!" the Intoxiquer shouted.
"SPOILERS!" Zorua exclaimed.
The show must go on!
Jack Storm sprung awake in shock.
Matthais Unidostres and BrickBrony1894 bro-hoofed.
Meloetta sat down with Madoka the Fennekin and Damian the Meloetta on either side of her.
A Greninja stood ominously next to a Lucario with red Aura.
Keldeo and Ryan the Lucario fought on a cliff top, Secret Sword and Bone Rush clashing over and over.
Never fear . . .
Button Mash and Sweetie Belle bonked heads as they tried playing Wonderbolt Free Fliers.
Keldeo burst out of the ice encasing him in an explosion of light.
The show! Will! Go! On!
Keldeo reared up on his hind legs, his expression serious and his Secret Sword raised and glowing brightly.
Keldeo the Critic
Season 4 Episode 1: Kevin and Buizel REWRITE by SukottoDeragon
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Keldeo stood smiling on his rock platform in the Moor of Icirrus and wearing his Mystic Water around his neck with pride. "It's me! Keldeo the Critic! I review it so you don't have to!" he said, "Remember back in season one when I reviewed Kevin and Buizel by SukottoDeragon? It was the second story I ever reviewed, so . . ."
Keldeo smiled sheepishly.
"It was kind of a shaky review. I mean, I kinda made a big deal about something that wasn't there, I made a joke about during the end, and at one point I kinda went on a rant about a Riolu evolving at the wrong time. I actually called SukottoDeragon a Team Plasma Grunt. A Team Plasma Grunt! I honestly can't believe I went that far! Anyway, it wasn't definitely flawed."
Keldeo replaced his sheepish smile with a hopeful one, "But luckily, I get a chance to redeem myself by reviewing SukottoDeragon's rewrite of the fic that started it all! Kevin and Buizel!"
Kevin and Buizel
By: SukottoDeragon
A tale of Buizel and a musician named Kevin who wishes he could understand his Buizel grows hectic as he suddenly goes missing. With all of the personal belongings and pokemon left behind, it is not only to wonder what had happened trainer, but what happened to Buizel as the pokemon begins displaying strange behaviour as it seems that Buizel feels Kevin as close as family.
"This fanfic is a brand new experience, with new characters, new interpretations of characters, new plot points, new, new, new! But of course, new isn't always necessarily better. So, is the rewrite better than the original? Let's find out! This is Kevin and Buizel!"
"Now be prepared, I'm gonna bring up the original story, which you can still read on SukottoDeragon's site, a lot during this review, mostly to point out notable differences and stuff like that. First let's start with the beginning, which is pretty much the same as the original."
Prologue:
"One of the things I really enjoy the most about being with my best friend, Buizel, is to simply relax and enjoy the company of each other. The only thing I would wish however is the absolute opposite, I wish I could talk to my Buizel because throughout the years I've always felt that he himself has something to tell me... "
Kevin thought to himself while looking at his pokemon friend just relaxing alongside him.
"What must I do to know what you want to tell me? I'll do whatever is required..."
Kevin's mind was restless as he looked at his companion, such a good friend was always beside him. The fact that forever might pass and he would never understand what he wants to tell him has made his hopes sink, that maybe he will never be able to share more of his friendship with his pokemon.
Chapter 1: Harmonic Friendship
The green meadow felt excellent and the wind blew gently on the grassy field, everything was so quiet; so quiet that you could hear your breathing and the wind itself. A young trainer of seventeen years old was on his knees in the calm meadow, he has dark brown hair, he wears a blue shirt decorated with white palm trees, his favourite since it reminds him of the beach he likes to go at. He has beige shorts and he is wearing common running shoes; these were red and had no particular design. At his right was what appeared to be, his Pokémon, a Buizel that had all the normal attributes of a Buizel, orange and peach fur colorings, the yellow float sac in his neck, his tails that worked as propellers… a normal Buizel. And you could tell that his Buizel was male due to the two peach ovals in his back. The only different thing that this Buizel had was a necklace with a stone hanging from it, which appeared to be a common rock at first glance, but it was in fact, an everstone. Maybe Kevin didn't want his buizel to evolve, or perhaps Buizel was resisting his evolution.
"Ahh, feel that Buizel?" His trainer said while closing his eyes as he felt the wind blow.
"Bui bui!" His pokemon said happily.
"So we get a nice description of our main characters who are just relaxing, Kevin starts playing his guitar, which attracts the attention of Ash, Brock, and Dawn."
"It's an incredible day in the meadow for our heroes as Ash is planning to get his last and eighth medal at Sunnyshore city, although his adventure might have to stop for a while as our heroes get to see that a young trainer is sitting in the grass at the distance with a song that is impossible to ignore."
"Oh yeah, and the Narrator too," Keldeo said with a straight face, "Literally, the Narrator is character. Why do I say this? Because when Ash and the gang leave the story, the Narrator leaves too! Seriously, the Narrator does not come back in this story. It's like, he came in, took his paycheck, and left. In fact, he left so quickly that he called the Gym Badge a 'medal.' Now that's just sad."
"Well, anyway, like in the original, Ash and the gang follow the music, we have a meet and greet, and they all share a meal."
"WOW! This is soooo good! Finally a great meal!" Kevin said as he ate, he was definitely enjoying his plate, although the rest stared at him oddly.
"What's with you? It's just soup…" Ash said curiously.
Kevin realized later that he was being looked at, he put his plate down and explained, "well... it's that…" Kevin was thinking, "I travel alone with Buizel and I don't know how to cook, I can't seem to prepare good food unless you count canned stuff, and I made tofu but... ugh." Kevin explained as he remembered his dislike for tofu, he continued to eat the soup that was served to him.
"Then, what did you eat?- Ash wondered, "You must've had something more than just canned food, or tofu." Ash asked. There was definitely something else that Kevin ate, he didn't want to said it though but to just get over it he confessed.
"Sometimes, Pokémon food…- Kevin said with a bit of shame. Everyone looked at Kevin awkwardly by hearing this, the musician got a bit startled, "It doesn't taste that bad after a while, alot better than tofu if you ask me." Kevin shrugged.
"FORESHADOWING!" Munna said as she flew in front of Keldeo.
"We also get introduced to the evil villain of the story: Paul- I mean Adam!" Keldeo quickly corrected himself.
Ash remembered about Kevin's Pikachu, he just had to ask about this. "I noticed that your Pikachu has some cuts, how did these happen?" Kevin's calm quickly became that of preocupation.
"I still can't believe that he would do that to his own Pokemon." Ash didn't understand what he meant by that, Kevin took a while to realize this, but he quickly explained to him. "I'm not Pikachu's original trainer, Adam was a trainer that did this to poor Pikachu, I still don't understand... he just told me one day that he did it to make him "tough" but I think it might've affected him a bit..." Kevin was instantly sad after this. "If only I could talk to pokemon, then I'd know what they want or what they feel..." Kevin said as he then pondered to himself, Buizel came near his trainer and patted his back. "Thanks buddy."
"So then we have an entertaining Pokemon battle between Kevin's Riolu and Ash's Buizel, after which our heroes get visited by-."
Kevin and Ash were abouut to leave but a couple of female voices were calling out for Kevin from afar, two young ladies with books were running towards them with excitement.
"Keviiiin! Waiiit" One of the ladies said before they got close to them, both of them dressed the same dresses, the only differeance was their hair color, one had short blue hair and the other one had a violet long hair. "We were wondering if we could get your autograph please?"
"Oh gee. I wonder who they could be." Keldeo said in a dead-pan tone.
Kevin was about to say something to him but before he could the ground beneath them collapsed and everyone fell into a pit, Kevin just managed to grab a hold of the edge, Buizel also hanging from his trainer's shoulder, Kevin put all his strength into getting back up to the dirt road and quickly searched for the young ladies, instead of them he saw an air balloon with the shape of a Meowth in it and two guys with some really strange outfits that had an "R" design at the very center.
Ash got angry, "that's Team Rocket! They are just a bunch of bandits who steal pokemon!" Ash said as he got up, he was absolutely upset to see them. Kevin was scared as he heard this, not only because he didn't want his pokemon to be stolen, but because an old memory came back to him.
"No... not again." Kevin said softly to himself in disbelief. Both of the members of Team Rocket laughed as they stood in the skies, the lady with the long purple hair stood upfront and began yelling from high above.
"Listen, is that a twerpish voice I hear?" After her part, the man with the Blue straight hair spoke next.
"It's shrieking to me loud and clear."
"On the wind!"
"Past the stars!"
"In your ear!" A third entirely different voice spoke, Kevin couldn't quite make out if there was someone else at that moment.
"Bringing chaos at a breakneck pace." The woman resumed.
"Dashing hope, putting fear in its place." The man continued.
"A rose by any other name is just as sweet"
"When everything's worse, our work is complete."
"Jessie!"
"And it's James!"
"I hate to break your motto," Kevin yelled at them from below, "but last time I checked Sunnyshore city didn't include a comedy act!" Kevin said at them angrily.
Jessie snapped and yelled back at Kevin below "How dare you interrupt our motto you twerp?!" Jessie said with her fist clenched tight.
"You of all should know better to interrupt such acts of art!" James yelled at Kevin as well.
"Well at least Sukotto used the correct motto this time," Keldeo remarked.
"So Team Rocket snatch up Pikachu again, but Kevin and Buizel have a secret weapon to save the day."
"Buizel, you know what to do! Use Hyperbeam!" Kevin yelled as he pointed at the air balloon. Ash and the rest were shocked at hearing what move Kevin commanded to his pokemon. Buizel separated his feet on the ground to be able to focus well on charging his move, Buizel looked at his target, he began to focus his inner energy on the balloon, and he began to power up. He charged the hyper beam on his mouth, he almost lost his foooting by the power he was holding, but he fired it at the balloon. The members of team rocket appeared to be scared to death, the powerful beam of eccentric energy quickly pierced the balloon, Team Rocket quickly descended and crash-landed, Ash and the rest went towards Team Rocket, Buizel however fell at the ground completely exhausted, Kevin rushed towards his pokemon and hugged him tight,
"You did really good buddy! I'm proud of you." Kevin said as he carried Buizel in his arms and ran towards Ash and the rest.
When Kevin reached the rest, Ash was already battling against Team Rocket with Pikachu by his side. Although the only pokemon that Team Rocket happened to have out was a Meowth, Pikachu was charging a thundershock that was going to hit Team Rocket.
Jessie, James and Meowth all looked at Pikachu and braced themselves for the what they expected to happen.
Meowth began to scream. "oh well... at least we got those autographs!" Meowth said as Team Rocket was struck with Pikachu's thundershock, the balloon air exploded and the three of them went soaring through the skies.
"Team rocket blast off again!" They all yelled in unison as they went through the air until they were not seen again, a bright light sparked in the distance, everyone could finallly relax.
Kevin was amazed as he saw them fly at the distance, it seemed as they were landing somewhat near Sunnyshore city, Kevin was not impressed by how far they flew, neither by Pikachu's electric power, but it was something more important for him. Ash and the travelers ran near Kevin and thanked him for stopping Team Rocket from escaping with Pikachu; Kevin was still lost in his own thoughts. Ash watched as he was completely spaced out, he tried to get his attention.
"Kevin? What's the matter?" Ash asked him, Kevin still looking at the horizon couldn't avoid wondering about that Meowth.
"Did that pokemon... talk?" Kevin said in disbelief as he wondered on if his wish from long ago was that close from coming true, "if only" he wondered.
"So Team Rocket makes plans to capture Buizel to use him to steal Pikachu, you know, the usual stupid plans those guys think up, while Kevin and the others arrive at a Pokemon Center. While they're there, Kevin actually shares a bit of his past with his new friends."
"This is a journal I used to write when I was younger. I used to write very mundane things, but I tore away those pages and only have the story of how I met Buizel and on how our friendship grew till this day." He smiled while opening his diary. Ash and the others were paying close attention to what Kevin said "This is the story of my first song..."
"You see, 4 years ago, my mom and dad wanted me to be a great traditional musician, so I practiced all day. I was most of the time alone in my room playing the same practice songs over and over, after a while I got very good at playing guitar. I didn't have that many friends because I was always alone at home practicing, somehow that didn't bother me, but I always wanted a true friend to talk with.
The other classmates from the music classes usually didn't go along with me, the ones that did really didn't speak much either and since my family lived in a big house we didn't get many visitors, only people that wanted to do business with my dad. Every weekend, mom and dad had their special presentations in where they leave for three days or more; they would either play out of town or even out of the region.
I always took advantage of those moments to camp near the backyard or close to the river since my parents didn't like me going too far without them knowing. The reason I really liked being outside was to stay close to the ocean and listen to it, the water always has such a beautiful sound and I find myself unusually attached to such melodies of nature. But one day I listened something below near the river. Someone was hurt and crying for help, when I went down to check it out, it was Buizel. That is where we first met, I healed him and then we met another day.
The next weekend I could go to the meadow I found Buizel again, we spent that weekend playing and exploring, we even managed to communicate a bit with simple nods and whatnot. Me and Buizel were getting along quite well, and he enjoyed my music so much, he was definitely a great friend at the very start, however, the weekend was ending, and I wasn't sure how I was going to recognize him from other Buizels, I assumed I could play my music and he would come running to me and so he did for the upcoming days days."
New listeners that were possibly fans from Kevin's music or other trainers that were waiting for their pokemon also had gathered to hear his story.
"Now that's honestly very interesting," Keldeo said, sounding intrigued, "It's new, and it really says a lot about Kevin how he's telling a personal tale for all those around him to hear."
"A few months later when I was looking for Buizel that day I saw something that had me worried, Buizel was fighting another Pokémon, I can't really remember what Pokémon it was, but the trainer managed to be victorious in that fight. I had told him to please leave him alone; even despite I told him he was my friend he wanted to catch him, I even lied and told him that he was a pokemon that my parents owned. Of course, the trainer, Adam didn't believe me so I defended Buizel, that trainer tried to throw his pokeballs to catch Buizel but I managed to block them all except one..."
Ash was still puzzled, "But, how is Buizel your pokemon?" Ash asked Kevin. Kevin looked at everyone that was listening seriously.
"He had the pokeball in his hand, I was so angry that I tried to take that pokeball out of his hands and then we both struggled for it. I was essentially stealing a pokemon, but Adam was stealing a friend. In the end I managed to snatch the pokeball and I ran as fast as I could. The next day there was a huge commotion and my parents helped me through everything, it was decided that Buizel himself should choose who he wanted to stay with. And then it happened, Buizel ran too me and hugged me the second he could.
After such a bad moment, my parents let me keep Buizel as long as I had a trainer license, I did it as soon as I could and finally me and Buizel could relax. I took out my guitar and I decided to play to relax a bit, to forget everything I had to deal, Buizel was quickly following the rhythm of the song, and he was actually humming too, I had quickly stopped playing just to hear him hum, he was basically making a song of his own, it was strange, but what he had hummed reminded me of the ocean. I tried to play his song and he loved it, at one point he actually placed his paws on the guitar strings helping me figure out some interesting notes, that just goes to show you how much attention Buizel had on my music, he was as much of a music composer as I was. And that is how we made our first song titled: "True friend of mine." It was the first song to be recognized by me, but also recognized by Buizel, even if not a lot of people know that he helped me, but a huge part of this song is all his merit."
Kevin hugged his Buizel dearly, it's not a memory he often recalls or even tells to others. The listeners slowly began to disperse and leave the Pokemon Center not before thanking Kevin for his time while they all waited for their own injured and sick pokemon.
Keldeo smiled, "Now wasn't that better than having Ash read his journal without his permission. Also, I find it interesting how instead of Buizel hiding in Kevin's back and avoiding Adam, Buizel actually gets caught by Adam but is reunied with Kevin thanks to his parent's intervention. One of the big problems I had with the original was that Kevin's parents were either useless, or had backstories that kept contradicting themselves. So far, it looks like Kevin's parents are actually important to the story."
Kevin practiced just a bit with his guitar for the presentation, although he seemed concerned but also excited, confident but also frightened, Buizel quickly noticed this on his friend and he quickly went to touch him to call his attention, he tilted his head as he looked at him with confusion.
"Oh Buizel... it's nothing, I'm still deciding whether I should attempt to do something or not, it might be dangerous."
"And what is the thing he wants to do? Oh, I don't know, how about go talk to the criminals who attacked you earlier and try to strike up a deal with them!"
Team rocket was disguised as regular citizens sitting at the cafe having something to drink as they were preparing for their special plan to interrupt the presentation tonight at Sunnyshore city, as they finished drinking they began to discuss their plan, but not after James collected the soda pop caps. Their plan was simple, use a single smoke bomb to distract the audience and the performer and quickly snatch the Buizel for themselves. They had all agreed between them that the plan was simply brilliant, however someone else had joined at the table Team Rocket was sitting at.
"No one invited you to this table, why don't you..." Jessie was about to say as she realized the person that sat next to them was Kevin. He had his hands together while leaning on the table.
"I don't want trouble, but I was wondering if we could agree on a deal I have..." The three of them were still quite surprised that Kevin had sat down on their table, they wondered if he had heard their plan all along.
"I'll make it quick and to the point, I want your talking pokemon to help me, please." They wondered what they could possibly do; Kevin quickly placed a diamond necklace on the table. "I just want to talk with my friend, even if it's just for a few seconds..."
Keldeo tapped his chin in thought as he looked around as if searching for something. "Hmmm, where did I put that thing?"
Keldeo pulled up a picture of Xerneas with fireworks going off behind him, and put it back. Then he pulled up a picture of M. Bison, and put that back down quickly. Finally, Keldeo smiled and pulled up a picture of Hiro-san from UHF.
Hiro-san: "Stupid! You're so stupid!"
Keldeo then gave an embarrassed smile and said, "But maybe I shouldn't judge. After all, I did try an battle Kyurem before I was ready."
Keldeo suddenly got a flashback of his horn getting broken off by Kyurem. He shook it off and continued.
"So, as expected, Kevin goes missing, much to his manager's distress."
"Sir wait!" Ash yelled as he ran towards the man with the purple suit. The three travelers caught up to the manager, but he seemed to be hasty.
"I need to get working kids, I need to find Kevin or the show will have trouble, it's already as delayed as it is." The manager said as he was opening the door to enter the building.
"But sir, we saw Kevin last night!" Brock quickly said to him, as the manager stopped flat and looked at the three trainers and took off his black sunglasses, precupation was reflected in his eyes.
"Would you mind telling me where he went please?" He said to the three of them. "I'm awfully worried, he was supposed to show up three hours ago!"
Ash and his friends sat inside the building with the manager to speak, he introduced himself as George, a manager who has helped many talents throughout the region. As they looked inside the place, many records where hanging in the walls and many pictures of the manager himself with many different artists, one of them was him and Kevin shaking hands.
"I know Kevin well, I'm not usually concerned when he is late for an event, mostly because I know that he likes to look around the scenery and spend time with his Pokémon." He looked down as he said this, "he would always warn me of this however, but now he is just gone with no warning." The manager looked at the three of them. "Do you see why I'm worried now?" he said to them with a concerning tone.
"So our heroes search for Kevin and eventually find a couple of clues."
"That's Kevin's Pikachu!" Ash said as he got near him, a bit further from that place, a Riolu with Kevin's bag was also fainted close by both of Kevin's Pokémon were beat up.
"Ash, they are both too weak, we have to find the pokéballs so that we can put them and keep them safe." Brock said as he was looking for the pokéballs somewhere in the ground. Dawn searched in Kevin's bag and found one of them, Ash had found the other one laying around a bit further away, these were both Pikachu's and Riolu's pokéballs, Ash put both of them inside the pokéballs.
"Okay, we should take both of them to the people over at the city, is there anything else lying around?" Dawn said as she was still looking around, Ash looked around for anything else but found nothing.
"Where do you think Kevin's Buizel is?" Ash asked. Brock managed to find one last pokéball on the ground hidden within a patch of grass, the pokéball appeared to emit a few sparks from it, when Brock attempted to grab said pokéball and got his hand burnt. Upon examination, he noticed that the pokéball was broken, the pokéball's lock was glowing red, and the exterior of the pokéball was all torn open in a top and bottom portion of the pokéball.
"What's the matter Brock?" Ash asked as he saw him trying to pick up the pokéball form the ground.
"The Pokéball is broken. I've never seen something like this before." Brock said as he showed the Pokéball to Ash, it had some cables inside that were also popping out, Brock picked up a pair of sticks to use to move the pokéball around finding a good angle to grab the pokéball from. Dawn also approached to see what the issue was.
"Why don't we carry the pokéball with the sticks Brock?" Dawn grabbed both of them from Brock and placed them side by side on the pokéball and lifted it up as if it were a tray.
"Thanks Dawn, we need to fix this pokéball as soon as possible, we should take it to a Pokémon center" Brock said while looking at Ash and Dawn, they both nodded and quickly headed towards the Pokémon center.
"So they take the Pokeball to the Pokemon Center to be fixed, and then meet up with a certain character I certainly wasn't expecting to see."
"Excuse me, the manager said that you were taking care of Kevin's Pokémon, am I right?" The trainer asked Ash.
"Yeah, we are taking care of them in the meantime, what's your name?" Ash asked him, the trainer smiled at him and then replied.
"My name is Adam."
BAM-BAM-BAAAAAAAM! Dramatic Deerling Turned Dramatically
Ash quickly reacted and shouted.
"You are the trainer that tried to steal Buizel from Kevin!" Adam quickly stood and struggled to explain his situation.
"I changed! I was a kid with anger issues in the past, now I don't like fighting others! Please let's talk about this!" Adam still concerned on how Ash might react decided to remain on his defensive position.
"Then why are you here? Did you have to do with Kevin's disappearance?" Ash accused him, Brock and Dawn noticed were listening from a far and decided to come in close by.
Brock tried to calm down the situation. "Ash, don't accuse him just because he did something in the past." Brock explained to Ash, Adam was still worried, he sat down to explain himself.
"I was an angry young trainer back then and had these issues, but I've came to know what happened to Kevin, I heard that he disappeared so I was worried. I've been looking for him all day." Adam said as he sat down.
"Let me tell you what I saw however."
Cross Examination: "What I Saw"
Music from Phoenix Wright began to play.
Adam Explained everything he saw to Ash and his friends as the hours rolled by...
"...I had found Pikachu and Riolu alone outside of their pokéballs, but they were surrounded by these two guys and their Meowth, so I fought them and won. I couldn't find Kevin's pokéballs so I left them to rest behind the building as I looked for Kevin in the woods, I wasn't able to find him however and when I came back; Pikachu, Riolu and Kevin's bag were gone."
"HOLD IT!" Keldeo shouted dramatically.
Adam was going to say something else but one of the Engineers called out for Ash and his friends to talk to him.
Keldeo groaned in disappointment as the music stopped, "Oh come on, I was just getting started with the Phoenix Wright jokes!"
"I'm glad you guys are taking care of Kevin's Pokémon now, I'll keep looking out for Kevin. There was one more thing I was going to say to him before he had left the cafe." Adam started to head out and he silently whispered to himself "I still need to say sorry too." As he exited the Pokémon center he waved them goodbye, he took out his Charizard from the pokéball and began to fly on top of his Pokémon, possibly to find him through air.
Keldeo blinked solemnly. "Wow . . . you know, I think Adam really is a good guy in this. I mean, I'm really getting the feeling that he has changed here. Sure in the old one, Adam is responsible for Kevin's . . . ahem . . .'disappearance'. But looking back, Adam was a really boring villain character who had less development than Paul, and that's saying a lot. Maybe an Adam that changed over time is more interesting than just an evil abusive jerk. Although a guy who cuts up his Pikachu sounds mentally ill to me, just saying."
"So, anyway, then we get a scene that shows how exactly you fix a broken Pokeball that has a Pokemon trapped inside of it."
The screen spouted out countless letters, some of them had question marks however and some were just a blank square in the middle of the jumbled text. "Okay, see those strange letters and signs that appear? Those are the parts that are actually damaged in the data and we can fix this with no problem, although this is the biggest data damage I have ever seen."
Jake: This is all theory, though. If it responds to an external electrical impulse, it might respond to one coming from inside it.
"It does seem that way now that I look at it a bit more carefully, if that's the case then it's possible that the Hyper Beam that he can use may have caused the damage to the DNA code. We are going to take a while to rewrite some of the code" David said with a serious tone.
Donatello: According to the life force scan-analyzer, these rampaging creatures are from Dimension X.
"This procedure is very strenuous and we can afford no mistakes, otherwise the Pokémon could lose some of his moves, he could acquire secondary effects but mostly he could lose a part of his memory, the point is that he can lose something from this procedure or even worse, gain something... we have to go through this very slowly."
Batman: Sunlight could reverse the freezing process-
Robin: But it's morning in the Congo!
"Sir, we detected an unknown component in the pokéball data, its right here." The engineer pointed to a section of the huge wall of text. David looked at it carefully, "this unknown code might be the very source of the issue. It is very large though, this might be because there is something else aside from the Pokémon inside the pokéball."
Data: My positronic sub-processor detected high frequency interphasic signatures from the organisms.
Keldeo shrugged and said, "The short version is that they're gonna use the computer to remove the extra matter inside the Pokeball digitally, leaving Buizel intact as they also fix his DNA." Keldeo blinked and said, "If humans have actually figured out how to do all that, I am truly afraid."
"So, the next day, the Pokeball is fixed and they finally let Buizel out."
He stood quickly from the table and began to run forward. Ash was so startled by the sudden reaction that he stepped back to give him space, Buizel moved to the side and fell from the table hitting the floor flat. Buizel looked all around, he screamed, but then immediately grabbed a hold of his own throat, he used his paws to touch his face frantically while muttering to himself, his voice stuttered and his eyes were out of orbit.
"It's just like the others..." Cedric said as he stared worried at the poor Buizel. "All of the pokemon are disorientated at first and then react in a bizarre way, I have no idea how this one will react." Cedric said as he approached the pokemon and kneeled in front of him. He used his stethoscope to listen to his incredibly elevated heart rate; he looked at him in the eyes.
"Don't worry little Buizel, we will take good care of you. I'm a Pokemon doctor." Cedric said to him as he listened carefully to his heart, Buizel looked at himself more carefully and then smiled, and later he became incredibly enthusiastic. He leapt about in the room and seemed as jolly as ever and sang a song in his own language. He skipped from one side to the other and danced.
Keldeo tried to stifle his laughter and failed. Then he said, "Okay, in the original, Buizel acted weird when he came out. But this? Oh my gosh, it's like if Pinkie Pie got drunk off of salt licks!"
"It's interesting to see Buizel so excited so suddenly, but Buizel should know about Kevin." Dawn said worryingly. Cedric nodded and later held Buizel in his arms, he was right after all, nothing is worse than losing a trainer.
"You seem very happy Buizel, although we have some terrible news for you." Cedric said while holding him up, Buizel's smile faded quickly, the pokemon then paid attention to him. "Your trainer Kevin, is missing." Buizel first laughed a bit, but then became quickly sad. Cedric had placed him down on the table once more. Buizel had become frightened, he trembled uncontrollably in place and his eyes shifted all around him, later with some sort of dementia he began looking at many different places rapidly as if being haunted, and then he was confused as Buizel started touching his entire body with his paws, finally he sobbed and then let out a screeching cry loud and sad enough to make your heart sink to the deepest of oceans.
"AHHH!" Keldeo cried out as he covered his ears with his hooves.
"Maybe Pikachu can calm him down?" Brock suggested Ash.
"That sounds like a good idea!" Ash said as he looked at his Pikachu, as soon as his Pokemon heard this he rushed right ahead. Pikachu had jumped on the table and greeted Buizel in an attempt to calm him down, Buizel had stood in place and stared at Pikachu, he appeared to be scared as well. Buizel fell on his back, fainted.
Dawn watched as Buizel passed out, he picked Buizel in her arms and patted his small head.
"Aww, Pikachu… you scared him!"
Pikachu Punch!
Keldeo smirked and said, "Aha! And you thought that joke was dead."
"Alright, so in the original story, Ash and the gang take possession of Kevin's Pokemon. But this time around, we actually get a plot point that makes a lot more sense."
"I think it would be better if we let Kevin's Pokemon be with one of his friends. Maybe he will feel comfortable." Cedric said, Ash and his friends agreed that it would be the best idea at the moment; they also had to head out to the next gym match soon.
"How about the manager? He had known Kevin and his Buizel for a long time!"
They all left the Pokémon center, this time Cedric went with the group, he was very interested in analyzing this Pokemon as well. They thanked Nurse Joy for everything, and of course, Brock couldn't resist holding Joy's hands and getting romantic with her, but that only made his Pokémon hit him once again just to be carried away. They shortly arrived at George's place. They all sat down and talked about the recent events, as they told the manager all of the details he became very concerned. The Pokemon were eating on the ground, all of Kevin's Pokemon were out off their pokeballls as well. The people were drinking tea with some cookies; it would be a calm setting if Kevin weren't missing.
"Kevin wouldn't just abandon his Pokemon, that is not how Kevin is." The manager stated to everyone as the story had concluded, he glanced at the picture on his wall quickly. "How is Buizel doing?" The manager asked.
"Well, he is eating with the rest of the Pokemon, but it seems that he is very shy around them, shy and scared I would dare say." Cedric said as he looked at Buizel eating with the others, his head was down and he was lacking energy, he hadn't touched his pokemon food at all, the other Pokemon had cheered him to take a nibble on his food, once Buizel had a bite of it, Buizel's hunger became apparent as he stuffed his own mouth with food as quickly as possible.
"Poor thing, do you think you'll be able to take care of Buizel in the meantime? Just until people know about Kevin's whereabouts?" Cedric asked the manager.
"For my friend Kevin, I'd do anything, I'll take care of his pokemon, he loves them so much, especially his Buizel." George said, Cedric smiled as he drank from his tea.
"I understand, I too love my Lucario very much." The doctor said.
A cold shiver suddenly ran down Keldeo's spine, "Ugh! Where did that come from?"
"Well, anyway, Ash and the gang actually leave the story entirely, leaving us with Cedric the doctor and George the manager. I actually think this was a good idea, seeing as George actually is close to Kevin and not a stranger like Ash and the gang are. Plus, I like to see original characters."
"Well Buizel... how are you?" George asked not really sure on what he could do. Buizel stared at him carefully; his expression was of pure desolation.
"Well... I don't know how to keep a Buizel entertained or anything..." He was thinking on how he could entertain kids, "do you like painting?"
George had prepared several sheets of paper and set them on the ground, he selected a dark red paint and set it up for him. Buizel just paid attention to the manager's motions. Buizel placed a paw on the paint and then on the paper, his expression was of amazement and glee.
"Perfect! Go ahead and paint at your heart's desire. I'll leave this room on for you, but sleep soon." George said as he shut the door to his bedroom.
Another cold shiver suddenly ran down Keldeo's spine, "Okay, what is going on? This isn't supposed to be a creepy story, so why do I keep getting creeped out?"
The manager was walking in a forest, everything was dark and the thunder clashed atop the sky. Kevin's voice called, the mist enveloped him shrouding his sight. George looked at his surroundings with no luck. The voice said faintly at the distance. "We won't be able to talk again George, I'm sorry" The thunder rumbled the silence and broke the sky, desperation grew inside the Manager, he began to feel the same desolation that Buizel began to feel. The clouds swarmed and the Thunder erupted again...
...that was when George woke up, his mind was unsettled and he was uncontrollably sweaty, his preoccupation for Kevin had made him grow restless. He got out of bed and went to the kitchen for a glass of water. The Obscurity accompanied George, so he carried his flashlight to show the way throughout the obscure corridors.
Keldeo blinked and looked around awkwardly. "O . . . kay? . . . Is Kevin . . .psychic? Like Jack Storm? Well, if a Buizel can use Hyper Beam, then I guess anything possible."
"Also, if that was supposed to be creepy, then I kinda feel let down. That wasn't-"
As he drank the water he needed he heard someone in the room, papers rustled and a chair had tumbled, George quickly became alert. His flashlight looked at every corner and every hallway; he quickly spotted red paint on the ground creating a trail towards the living room. George followed the path, a small dark silhouette went though his feet, he turned around and lit the wall facing him to a disturbing sight, Buizel looked at George dead in the eye, red undistinguishable signs were painted, they pointed to the poor Buizel, these arrow-like drawings surrounded the entire wall. He was startled, crying and desperate. The Buizel also held tightly to Kevin's journal, George only imagined that his depression was getting to him.
Keldeo stumbled backwards in horror. "Son of a biscuit! When did this turn into a Creepypasta? Do I need to call Kyurem the Critic in for backup? Seriously, what the heck am I looking at? Pokemon Does Carrie or Five Nights at Buizel's? I'm not joking here, this scene is creepy. I mean, come on, blood red paint? What's next? Are BRVR and Jessica gonna burst in through a wall?"
"Well, instead of pulling a Shaggy and Scooby and running through the wall while screaming, George does what all stuffy skeptics do in horror movies before they get killed, he calls a doctor."
"This could easily be some sort of mental health issue." Cedric said as he examined Buizel carefully, George just sat at his couch and looked at the doctor and the pokemon
"Ced, I'm terrified, this is not something pokemons normally do, I know that much."
Keldeo face hoofed hard. "Really? 'Pokemons'? Did Sukotto really not see how asinine that looked?"
George got up and handed some papers to Cedric, "Buizel did these..." Cedric quickly looked at these pages, impressed but also shocked.
"These are all just Is... some N attempts here and there,
Keldeo opened his mouth to say something, but then shook his head. "Nah. Too easy."
but what does this mean?" Cedric asked himself puzzled as he kept checking the pages. "Do you think Buizel was attempting to spell out "Kevin"?"
"I'm not really sure, but how does he even know how to write letters?"
"Only Kevin would know," Cedric then looked at the journal that he had taken from Buizel. "Read Kevin's journal, you might learn something and it would explain how Buizel feels."
"Sounds like a good idea... I was planning to read it anyway."
"I'm sure it will help."
Cedric had promptly left after he assured himself that Buizel would be calm, George quickly recalled the journal, he picked Buizel up and petted him in the head, he took Buizel to a reading area in the house. He turned on the lamp and sat down with Buizel on his lap.
"I feel like you really are depressed, believe me... I am too, all I want is a hug from my friend Kevin..." George said to Buizel, the pokemon had come in close for a hug, George petted the Buizel.
"Well since I know you can't read, I'll read the journal for you. Maybe it can bring you some happy thoughts." George opened the pages inside the journal; he looked at the pokemon and scratches his little chin. "What if we find any clues on what happened here?" George didn't only read for the pokemon, but for himself. He needed to set his mind at rest if possible, and he also wanted to know more about Kevin himself. They are good friends, but he never understood his powerful friendship with Buizel, "Kevin won't mind." George began reading the old and faded writing.
"So the next three chapters is just Kevin's journal. It's pretty much the same thing as the original journal with a few changes. . . oh yeah, and this happens!"
"Oh I see! You want your friends to hear this story as well?" George had asked Buizel, however the pokemon simply just nodded away still saddened. "I thought you would be more happier to share your story with your poke-friends." George laughed at himself. "Poke-friends... I gotta use that one sometime with Kevin."
George released Riolu and Pikachu from their pokeballs, Buizel huddled up with them and they spoke for a bit between eachother. George looked and skimmed some initial pages, nothing was interesting here, just him talking about what he ate and what he would like to buy next week. George saw a light at the corner of his eye, Riolu began to glow out of the blue, the glowing figure began morphing and growing.
George panicked, but then he remembered this is a process called "evolution" or something of sorts. He couldn't believe it, he didn't know if there was something he should be doing or helping with. Riolu had stopped glowing and he had become Lucario! George never even dreamed how large a small pokemon like Riolu could really get after an evolution, he was almost his own size.
"There! That makes more sense! Riolus evolve through friendship!" Keldeo said proudly.
"Well, anyway, the journal just shows some backstory that I already went through when I reviewed the original. We get a few new plot threats, like Kevin having gone to the Kalos region and won some gym battles there, and it turns out Adam actually anonymously gave the chopped up Pikachu to Kevin for some reason we don't know. Anyway, the journal has some of the most touching and emotional moments I've ever seen between Kevin and Buizel-."
"I found a very important chapter and we should check this out together, it might help and I need a squarehead like you to help me out."
"Do you know how la- wait what did you just call me?" Cedric asked bothered.
"Sorry, it doesn;t matter, are you coming or not?"
"I'm very tired and it's like what, two in the morning? I have much to do tomorrow."
"If you come I'll, I dunno, give you one of Kevin's music Cds that has his autograph on it." George insisted trying to convince him, the phone hung up quickly with a loud slam on the receiver. "Well, I guess not..."
George had gone back to the couch to read some more, but before he could sit down, the door was knocking. "Who could it be at this time?" George got up once again bothered, when he opened the door Cedric came bursting in the manager's home.
Cedric was wearing a Kevin and Buizel shirt as well, this was probably the first time George has seen Cedric with regular clothes, and right beside him was what appeared to be his Lucario. "Okay I'm here! Where is my Kevin merch?" George didn't really realize how much of a fan Cedric was, until this very moment.
Keldeo's jaw dropped. "Oh my gosh, I know who this guy is! He's that idiot fan boy newbie scientist guy from the original story!"
*BACK IN SEASON ONE OF KELDEO THE CRITIC*
-Hello everyone, we have another damaged Pokéball. – Nurse Joy said as she handed the Pokéball to one of the guys.
-What!? Another one?! Oh man! – One of the scientists said as he banged his arms on top of the counter ridiculously hitting his skull on the process.
-Calm down newbie… Nurse Joy, please put this with the other ones, we still haven't finished with the last one we received today.- Another Scientist said, which appeared to be the one in charge in the room.
-But this is Kevin's Pok…- Nurse Joy was saying when she was interrupted by the scientist that banged his head with the counter.
-REALLY?! I'm a big fan! Did you finally find him?! – The guy asked.
(What, is this a failed attempt at a humorous scene? And this guy is a scientist! What scientist acts like a fangirl? Is it because he's a newbie? I'm a newbie in the Swords of Justice! I don't bang my head on hard objects! I don't act like a fangirl! I'm not lazy! I don't go over the top out of every stupid thing! What is this filler!?)
Keldeo sighed, "Well, he's a lot better and more developed in this rewrite. And he has a Lucario too! How could you go wrong?!"
Cedric got comfortable in his seat, his Lucario hugged him from above as he was seated and Lucario displayed a lot of affection towards him, Cedric sighed. "Didn't I tell you she was being restless? And yes, let's talk about Kevin, but I would like a coffee, running all the way here was the worst idea so far." Cedric simply laughed it off, while George went to prepare coffee for the both of them and turned on the machine. George sat in front of Cedric; still seeing how much his Lucario was snuggling and hugging Cedric. "Are Pokémon usually this affectionate?" George asked.
Cedric hugged Lucario back for a bit and told her to talk to the other Pokémon, Lucario kissed his cheek and went along.
Keldeo had a freaked out face. "Uhhhhhhhhhh."
"In the day of the incident, I remember very well, I heard the trainer commanding a flamethrower attack to that Charmalin." Cedric's eyes widened in curiosity as he heard that name.
"Excuse me, what?!" Cedric asked in disbelief.
"You know... Charmalin, the red fire-type lizard Pokémon... I think it evolves to Flamezard."
"Charmeleon! And it evolves to Charizard!" Cedric corrected him, every Pokémon in the room noticed, Cedric's Lucario came running to him as soon as Cedric screamed and gave him a hug. "I'm fine Kyla." Lucario went back to talk to the Pokémon, but not before kissing his cheek again. "Kyla!" The doctor rubbed that one off as well,
Keldeo put his hoof down, "Okay, stop! You're freaking me out more than Buizel's creepypasta painting!"
"Well, anyway, after Cedric and George finish reading the journal, they discover that Kevin's Pokemon have all escaped!"
George remembered this day as well. "That Pikachu had some nasty cuts, I mean just look at the cuts he has." As soon as George was pointing towards the couch Pikachu was sat on, he noticed that no Pokémon was sitting there and Kevin's stuff was also gone. Only Cedric's Lucario was there. George immediately began to panic. "Where are they?!" George ran to all of his rooms.
Cedric approached his Lucario, "is this what you wanted to tell me? But why are they gone?!" Cedric was also worried, but Kyla was trying to calm him down with her hugs and also kisses.
"WHAT IS GOING ON?!" Keldeo demanded, "Here I am, trying not to make any venereal comments, and this story keeps trolling me with scenes of blatant bestiality! Peter Jackson's version of King Kong wasn't as intimate as this!"
Keldeo groaned and said, "You know what? This just about marks the end of the first third of the story, so I'm gonna go take a break. Maybe I'll get some brain bleach or something."
Keldeo the Critic
We'll be right back!