BOOOOOM!
A black wall was blown apart by Keldeo's Focus Blast.
No matter what we say or do,
Keldeo activated his Secret Sword and swung it, causing the screen to burst.
It's never up to me and you,
Victini rose into the air, his ears glowing with the power of V-Create.
We smile now and sing a cheer!
Keldeo and Santa Paws screamed in horror as huge burst of dark purple energy erupted in front of them.
Ghost Pony Rider roared.
Kyurem and Cryogonal the Critics both screamed as a zombie Lucario with a chainsaw appeared on their TV.
Keldeo screamed in horror, but sprayed himself with water to snap out of it.
Imperator Justinian was seated behind a desk in his study, with Keldeo standing on the other side.
The show must go on!
"FORESHADOWING!" Munna exclaimed.
"NO SHIP, SHERLOCK!" the Intoxiquer shouted.
"SPOILERS!" Zorua exclaimed.
The show must go on!
Jack Storm sprung awake in shock.
Matthais Unidostres and BrickBrony1894 bro-hoofed.
Meloetta sat down with Madoka the Fennekin and Damian the Meloetta on either side of her.
A Greninja stood ominously next to a Lucario with red Aura.
Keldeo and Ryan the Lucario fought on a cliff top, Secret Sword and Bone Rush clashing over and over.
Never fear . . .
Button Mash and Sweetie Belle bonked heads as they tried playing Wonderbolt Free Fliers.
Keldeo burst out of the ice encasing him in an explosion of light.
The show! Will! Go! On!
Keldeo reared up on his hind legs, his expression serious and his Secret Sword raised and glowing brightly.
Keldeo the Critic
Season 4 Episode 5: Wild Pokemon's Revenge by Bayleaf
tinyurl: nldrk8e
"It's me! Keldeo the Critic! I review it so you don't have to!" Keldeo said, "Have you ever wondered what wild Pokemon think of humans? I ask this because I heard a rumor that wild Pokemon attack trainer's Pokemon instead of their trainer because they're jealous of the Pokemon who are being cared for by humans."
Keldeo stood with a straight face for a few seconds, then he burst out laughing until he fell to the ground. After laughing and kicking for a bit, Keldeo got up and caught his breath.
"Whew! Okay, but seriously, what do wild Pokemon think of humans? Do they fear them? Do they want to get to know them? Do they want to take advantage of them like how Ash's Buizel kept stealing fishing rods? . . . ."
Keldeo blinked, then he said, "Uh, well, where was I? Oh yeah, ahem, OR . . . do they hate them?"
Wild Pokémon's Revenge
By: Bayleef
Ash and Co. come across an injured humanhating Charmeleon that they have to help. What will happen when Charmeleon tries to save Ash's Pokémon from the evil intentions of humans? Final Chappy up Now that thats done, gotta work on 'Unity of the Rainbow
Keldeo sighed, "What's with people advertising other stories in their-"
Keldeo shook it off and said, "Oh boy, I hope these tangents don't become a running thing in this episode. Okay, so this story is about an angry Charmeleon who tries to convince Ash's Pokemon to revolt, only for him to be the one to get converted by the other Pokemon and Ash's kindness."
DING!
Posters for Avatar and The Last Samuraii appeared.
Keldeo nodded, "Yes, this story has been told to death, but if I've said it once I'll say it a hundred times, that's not a bad thing. What maters is how the author decides to tell this story. So, let's review Wild Pokemon's Revenge."
"So we start out seeing the first problem with this fanfic."
Chapter One
Ash and co. had stopped by a beautiful lake in a quiet forest on their way to the Blackthorn City Gym. Brock sat by the fire making their lunch, Misty sat by the lake watching all her water Pokémon, except Psyduck, swim around. Ash's Totodile was among them. All Ash's other Pokémon were sleeping by the side of the lake. Ash sat with Pikachu, shining his badges.
"The story is in bold!" Keldeo exclaimed, "And it's really annoying! It's like reading something written for the visually impaired."
There was a rustling of bushes near Ash and Pikachu.
Pikachu looked up and growled. He got onto all fours and his cheeks sparks.
Ash, Misty and Brock looked over at Pikachu. "What's up Pikachu?" Ash asked.
"Oh boy, it looks like Pikachu's doing his Lassie/Flipper impression again," Keldeo said.
The bush rustled and a large red lizard with a flame on it's tail fell out.
"It's a Charmeleon" Ash said as he called Pikachu off.
The Charmeleon looked up and them and growled. It had scratchs all over and was badly briused, but it was a stubborn one. It pushed itself to it's feet and held up it's claws, but winch and clutched it's right arm.
Brock looked at it's arm. "Looks broken, one of us should try to get it to let us have a look" He looked at Ash.
Ash looked at him, "Huh? Hey! Why's it always me?"
"Well you've had experience with Charmeleon" Brock said, pushing him forward.
"Well excuse me, Mister Pokemon Breeder/Doctor!" Keldeo complained.
"Alright, I'll try" Ash sighed and walked over to the Charmeleon.
The Charmeleon took a step back, growling.
"Take it easy" Ash said. "We just wanna help" He raised his hand a little nervously. He reached out his hand as if introducing himself. "Let us have a look at your arm"
The Charmeleon had it's deep blue eyes fixed on Ash's brown ones. It lowered it's gaze to his hand and growled. Without warning it jumped forward and sank it's teeth into it.
Zuul: "ZUUL, MAGIKARP, ZUUL!"
Ash yelled and jumped back. He looked at his hand, which was now covered in blood and hurt worse than a Beedrill sting. He cringed. He looked up at the Charmeleon, which was still growling.
"Biscuits! Talk about first blood!" Keldeo said in shock.
"Maybe we should leave this one, it isn't to friendly" came Misty's voice from behind him.
"Whoa, whoa, whoa! Hold on there Bayleaf!" Keldeo said, "You're coming off as a Misty. . ." Keldeo stopped, and then shrugged, ". . . dis-liker, I guess?. . . Not a hater exactly. . ."
"But we can't just leave it here" Ash said, not taking his eyes of the Charmeleon, in case it decided to attack again.
"We need to calm it down somehow, if we don't, that arm's gonna get worse and worse" Brock said.
Pikachu's cheeks sparked but Ash stopped him. "No Pikachu, we don't wanna hurt it any more than it's hurt now" He thought for a while. "Bulbsaur, come here" He called.
Bulbasaur approached her trainer and stood beside him.
"Buldbasaur, use your sleep powder to send that Charmeleon to sleep" Ash ordered.
"Were'd you get that idea?" Misty asked.
"Remeber Tracy's Syther?" Ash asked. "When it was all beat up but wouldn't let us help it? Tracy got Venonat to use sleep powder on it, maybe it'll work on Charmeleon"
"So, while I guess most anyone else would have passed this guy up after nearly loosing a hand, Ash has has a good enough heart to do what he can to help this injured Pokemon."
Keldeo smiled and said, "And I'm proud to say I would have done the same thing."
"And also, we get the good Ash with a brain in this story, who is able to put Charmeleon to sleep so that they can help him."
Keldeo peered at the story and said, "Wow, there sure were a bunch of of typos in that section."
Charmeleon woke up a few hours later. He shook his head looked around. He was in a small house, probably an old abandoned cabin. The sun shone through the windows and lit the nearly empty room. At the opposite side of the room there were three back-packs. He now looked at his arm. It was wrapped in some sort of white cloth and it didn't hurt as much as it did before he fell asleep.
There was a creak of a door and Charmeleon shot his gaze to the door that was to the right side of him. Then he saw the human that had attacked him.
Keldeo blinked and looked around in shock. "Attacked- you sunk your razor sharp fangs into his hand, you lizard jerk! What, do you have amnesia or something?"
Charmeleon growled and looked around. He hated humans and believed that humans used Pokémon for their own selfish purposes, to get money and trophies. Charmeleon nearly felt like getting sick when he saw Pokémon battle-
"EX - PO - SI - TION! EX - PO - SI - TION! RUSH - IT - OUT! AS - AP!" Keldeo and Munna sang.
"So Ash . . . technically . . . holds Charmeleon against his will so his arm can get better."
As Ash and the others settled down to sleep Charmeleon looked at Ash's Pokémon. [Those poor Pokémon] Charmeleon thought. [I'm going to get them out of here, away from that human] And with that thought in his mind, he lay his head down and closed his eyes.
The next morning Charmeleon opened his eyes to see a tray of food in front of him. He raised his head and sniffed the food curiously. There was more of that food Ash had given him, but it had something yellow on it this time. Charmeleon sat up and took it. It was sliced into thin parts. It was also a little browner and chrispy too. He took a bite and felt that it was much tastier than the last. Wait a minute, they were trying to trick him! They were just treating him nicely so he would like them and then they would capture him. Well he wasn't as weak as those other Pokémon, he wouldn't give in to their traps.
He shoveled down the rest of the food, not really caring about what it was.
"Okay, are we in his mind now or something? And what is Brock feeding him anyway, bacon and eggs? Why do you have to be so cryptic about what he's having for breakfast?" Keldeo said incredulously.
Charmeleon hated the way the human kept looking at him. Maybe he was trying to see if there was an attitude change towards him. Well he'd show him. He glared at Ash and released a small ember before wincing in pain at the pain in his arm.
Ash had been able to dodge the flames, but he was still slightly burned. He groaned and looked at Chameleon, who snorted and walked back into the cabin.
"Why do you keep attacking Ash for? Why not try your luck with the other two humans who didn't even really try to help you at all? Misty wanted to leave you, attack her!" Keldeo said, "And where did Brock and Misty go anyway? It's like they fell out of the story or something, what am I missing here?"
"So, of course, that night, Charmeleon tries to convince the other Pokemon to run away, bringing up all the ethical issues that come with capturing Pokemon and taking them out of the wild-."
[Let's go guys]
The other Pokémon yawned and looked at Charmeleon. [What are you talking about Charmeleon?] Pikachu asked.
Charmeleon looked at the door. [We can leave, leave the humans and their evil intentions. We could be free again, all we have to do is go now] Charmeleon looked back at them smiling.
"-Or you can just get up and say 'leave,'" Keldeo sighed in disappointment.
Pikachu looked at the others who all shrugged. He looked back at Charmeleon. [Uh...we don't wanna leave]
Charmeleon frowned. [What are you talking about?]
[Well you may not think it, but humans arn't all bad] Pikachu said.
[Ya] Bayleef steped forward. [Ash is more of a friend than a trainer]
All the other Pokémon nodded in agreement.
Charmeleon growled and stormed away. [These humans are better than I thought, these Pokémon don't even want to be wild and free anymore. But I won't leave until I've convinced them too come too] Charmeleon sighed and lay down again, closing his eyes to sleep.
Slappy Squirrel: "That was pointless."
To Be Continued
Aww, poor Charmeleon's intentions were good, wanting to free the others. Well not much else to say except please review. See ya,
Bay Bay!
Bayleef
adorable_chickorita
"Eh-bu-huh-what!?" Keldeo stammered, "Who puts their email address in a fanfic? So we can message you? You do realize that there's this thing called PM, right? Seriously, I I'd hate to see your inbox. . ."
Bayleaf opened up her email inbox. Her jaw dropped as she saw that she had 999 Spam messages.
"I just don't know what went wrong!" she exclaimed.
WAH-WAH-WAH-WAAAAAAAAHHHHH!
Keldeo shrugged and smiled.
"So back in the story, Charmeleon begins to relive some memories from watching Ash and Pikachu."
Then Charmeleon saw Ash and Pikachu. Ash was running away from Pikachu and Pikachu was chasing after him. Charmeleon watched curiously as Pikachu caught up to his trainer and jump onto his back, causing him to fall over. [Your gonna get yelled at for that kid] Charmeleon thought, but he was surprised to see Ash laughing as he pushed himself up into a sitting position. Pikachu jump onto his trainers lap and Ash scratched Pikachu behind the ear, causing him to tilt his head slightly.
Charmeleon tilted his head at the human's reactions. When he'd last run into a trainer, who wore a black outfit with an 'R' on it, they had been completely different.
***FLASHBACK***
Charmeleon watched from atop a small cliff as a newly capture Charmeleon emerged from the humans Pokéball. This Charmeleon was very energetic, so she instantly began to play. She jumped up and down and hid behind rocks, as if she was playing chase with her trainer. When the trainer looked behind a large boulder, the Charmeleon ran up and jumped on the trainers back, causing them to fall over.
The Charmeleon jumped off her trainer and smiled happily.
The trainer pushed himself up quickly and reached inside their backpack. They pulled something out and swung it on the Charmeleon.
There was a loud crake of a whip and Charmeleon cringed as his friend was hit to the ground.
The trainer stepped forward. "Don't do that you stupid Charmeleon! If you didn't evolve into such a powerful Pokémon like Charizard I wouldn't bother with you, but your going to listen to me and obey me like you should. No more of this playing around, now come!" He turned and walked down the path.
The Charmeleon, who had her paw on her face where the whip had hit and was close to tears, stood up and followed the trainer sadly.
Charmeleon made an attempt to run after his friend, to help her escape, but he was held back by another Charmeleon. He cried out to his friend, but it was too late, they were gone.
***END FLASHBACK***
That's why Charmeleon hated humans, because one human had taken his best friend away, and she was more than a friend to him, just like he was more than a friend to her. They loved each other, and she had been taken away from him by a human.
From then on he had trained hard to become powerful enough so that he wouldn't get captured like his friend, and that he could maybe someday free her from the evil human that captured her. He challenged many wild Pokémon to build up his strength.
He won almost every battle, until he ran into a wild Rhydon. It was a tough battle, and Charmeleon, who had been badly injured, had to retreat.
He wandered for a few hours before he came across the three humans and there Pokémon. And this was were he was now.
Keldeo sat down and held an emotionless facial expression. Then he raised his left hoof and pointed with purpose.
EVERYTHING
WRONG
WITH
THIS
SCENE
RIGHT NOW
"What are the chances of Ash and Pikachu doing the same thing that the Team Rocket Grunt and the girl Charmeleon did?"
*ding* Fallacy Counter: 1
"I don't care how energetic you are, there's now way you're going to feel that comfortable and happy after being captured by Team Rocket!"
*ding* Fallacy Counter: 2
"I know Team Rocket is evil, but I'm pretty sure that NOBODY whips Pokemon! What is this? PETA's Pokemon Black and Blue?"
*ding* Fallacy Counter: 3
"Why is that other Charmeleon holding him back? It's just one guy, they could overpower him easily!"
*ding* Fallacy Counter: 4
"The whole things becomes kinda cheap when you realize that the reason for Charmeleon's anger is that he lost his girlfriend."
*ding* Fallacy Counter: 5
"Okay, so what exactly is you plan to track down a single particular member of a very powerful organization that has outlasted every other villainous team in the Pokemon Anime?"
*ding* Fallacy Counter: 6
FANFIC FALLACY TALLY: 6
SENTENCE. . . .
. . . .
PETA VIDEO GAME PARODY
Keldeo shook his head. "Okay, I'm pretty sure that counts as a tangent . . . then again, I did stay on topic by reviewing the story, but parodying Cinema Sins may have been a little too much-."
Keldeo's head jerked up and he said, "Oh my gosh, I'm rambling again. Okay, back to the story, where we have Charmeleon brooding over his long lost girlfriend."
Charmeleon began to wonder what had every happened to his friend, and he suddenly felt very lonely. [Were are you?] He whispered to himself.
"NEXT!" Keldeo said loudly.
"Charmeleon?"
Charmeleon turned around fast and noticed that Ash had come into the room.
"Are you ok?" Ash said, his voice full of concern.
Charmeleon wondered how Ash could tell he was upset, and then he noticed he had been crying. He wiped the tears off his tear-stained face and shook his head. [I-It's nothing]
"Charmeleon, come on. What's up?" Ash said as he cautiously approached the fire lizard.
Charmeleon looked up at him. [He understands me?]
"In a metaphorical sense, I hope. We don't need another Always there for you, Buizel," Keldeo commented.
He shook his head again. [Nothing you could help me with unless you can change the past]
"Are you going to be ok?" Ash asked.
[Why does he care?] Charmeleon nodded and forced a smile to show it was ok.
Ash smiled. "Have you changed your mind about coming out?"
Charmeleon thought for a while before jumping down and following him, but keeping a distance. He didn't know whether he trusted Ash or not.
Charmeleon sat in silence under a tree as Ash's Pokémon played by the lake with Misty's Pokémon. Pikachu had found a pokeball-sized ball in Misty's back pack and the Pokémon were now throwing it to one another.
Most of the Pokémon stayed away from Charmeleon because he seemed to have a bad attitude to anyone who went near him. Whenever they tried to talk to him, he'd snap at them, so they thought it best to keep their distance.
But as Charmeleon watched the Pokémon laugh and play happily, he felt a little left out. Sure he thought their games were silly, but the last few days with the humans had been lonely for him. All he wanted was to have someone he could trust, someone to talk too, but once again, he'd scared Pokémon off instead of trying to be their friend.
"Well, if only we had a ball of sentient cuteness that serves no purpose other than to be cute except when it sets off a randomly unexpected Dues Ex Machina-."
Charmeleon sighed sadly and looked down. Suddenly he felt something touch his shoulder and looked down.
[Your it!] The little Togepi cried as it poked Charmeleon in the shoulder. It giggled and jumped up and down.
Charmeleon tilted his head. [Do you...wanna be friends?] He asked, a little surprised.
Togepi stopped jumping for a second and nodded. [Catch me if you can!] Togepi said before turning and running off in the other direction.
Charmeleon froze for a second and was about to get up and follow when Togepi past him again. He looked at it confused before he noticed that Togepi was running in circles around the tree. Charmeleon smiled and stood up, chasing after the Togepi, who had began to run all over the camp.
Ash looked up from his lunch and saw Charmeleon playing tag with Togepi. He smiled when Charmeleon tapped Togepi in the back and then ran in the opposite direction.
Pikachu looked over and tilted his head. "Pika?" he asked Ash.
"See, told you Charmeleon wasn't all bad" Ash said as he watched Charmeleon slow down to give Togepi a chance to catch up.
Over the next few days, Charmeleon slowly began to get along with the other Pokémon. He'd told him what the other Charmeleon and Charmander called him back at his home, and when they heard it they all decided to call him Blaze, just like his other friends did. He got along well with the Pokémon, but he stayed away from the humans.
Nevertheless, he was beginning to warm up to them too. They had a whole new way of treating their Pokémon to most of the other trainers Charmeleon had met. They treated them like friends and not slaves, they didn't force them to do things and very seldom got angry with them.
Charmeleon's arm was now healed completely, but Ash said maybe he should wait a day or two more just in case. Charmeleon agreed, but only because Brock had just made their dinner.
Keldeo yawned loudly. "I'm sorry, but this is really boring. I get it, Ash and his friends are nice to their Pokemon, and Blaze finally sees that. But we aren't given any dialogue or interactions that convey that. You know: show don't tell. And you'd think Blaze would hang on to the fact that the humans did battle and capture wild Pokemon. I know Pokemon are meant to be with people and those Pokemon either enjoy battling, non-violent contests, or both. But still, this would have been a much more interesting story if Blaze had taken a stand on the ethics of using Pokeballs. But then again, this was a long time before N, so . . . maybe . . . I should get off of this Bunnelby trail."
Keldeo winked and said, "I bet you though I was gonna say Buneary trail, didn't you?"
When he did go back to the wild, he would meet up with the rest of his pack. They were all Charmander and Charmeleon, not many had the power to become a Charizard, because trainers with their water Pokémon or Ground Pokémon usually captured the stronger ones. Charmeleon began to wonder were his friends were.
"FORESHADOW-"
"It doesn't count if it's in the very next paragraph!"
A group of five Charmeleon watched from a bush nearby. The biggest male straightened up when Ash lead Charmeleon and the others into the house.
"And now, we learn the big, disturbing, shocking twist! The villains of the fanfic the whole time are . . . these guys?" Keldeo said in confusion.
[Blaze has turned against us]
A smaller female looked at the other.
". . . and girls," Keldeo added, still looking confused.
[What should we do Blire?]
[We'll get revenge Chara] He turned to the others. [Cinder, you with us?] He asked a male, who nodded. Next he turned to a female and to another male. [Liza? Chador?] The two nodded and glared at the wooden cabin.
Blire turned back to the cabin. [We'll wait 'til early mourning. No one turns their back on us and sides with humans, not even Blaze] He said, growling.
Blire: "We're gonna show how evil humans are by being evil ourselves!"
Chara: "But isn't that kind of hypocritical?"
Blire: "Silence!"
*Smack*
Chara: "OWW!"
"Meanwhile," Keldeo said, "We finally get some character development for Blaze when he tells the other Pokemon about his past."
[Why do you hate humans anyway?] Cyndaquil asked.
Charmeleon frown as the memories flowed back. He looked at the ground and answered sadly. [Because one human took away what meant most to me]
There was an awkward silence before Charmeleon began to tell them all about the Rocket Member. [He took Charina away from me, and now I may never see her again]
"Cleverly thought up names? Who needs that!?" Keldeo asked with a smile.
Portal 2 Announcer: "Sarcasm Self-Test Complete."
He closed his eyes and forced back the tears. He wasn't the one to show weakness in front of other Pokémon, and this seemed like a weakness. He suddenly felt something on his shoulder and opened his eyes to see Pikachu with his paw on Charmeleon's shoulder.
[I'm sorry Charmeleon] Pikachu said. [Now I understand. And I understand why you don't trust our humans]
Charmeleon looked back at Ash and the others, who were settling down to sleep. He sighed and turned back to the Pokémon. [It's late, we better get some sleep]
All the other Pokémon, who were feeling a little uncomfortable for bringing up the subject, nodded in agreement. The said goodnight to Charmeleon and some decided they'd sleep outside, because Charmeleon's tail flame sometimes made the room to hot.
"How does that make any sense? He's not the fire version of an Aurorus," Keldeo said.
Pikachu once again slept by Ash, first telling him about Charina, while the others went outside to sleep under the stars.
"Wait a minute, he told him? So, can Ash understand Pokemon or not?" Keldeo asked, looking very confused.
"Blaze, wake up!"
Blaze's eyes fluttered open. [Wh-what?] He looked around and saw Ash knelt next to him and was shaking him. "Blaze, we gotta get outta here!"
Blaze was confused, until he noticed that the room was filled with smoke. He stood up and looked around, noticing that flames were dancing across the wooden floor under the window. Being a fire Pokémon, the flames wouldn't have hurt him, but the falling planks of flaming wood was another thing altogether. The others were already out, leaving Ash and Blaze the only ones in the house.
Keldeo shrugged, "Oh, right, we can think about that now. We have Team Charmeleon's illogical evil plan to deal with."
"Come on, let's move it!" Ash yelled forcing the Pokémon towards the door, which flames were slowly surrounding.
Blaze didn't need telling twice, he ran towards the door, followed by Ash.
But before they could reach the door, five streams of flamethrower combined into one shot forward, knocking Blaze back. He flew backwards and slammed into Ash, who had tried to grab him. "Blaze, Blaze are you ok?" Ash asked.
Blaze groaned and opened his eyes, seeing the five Charmeleon, whom he thought were his friends, in the doorway. [What the...? What's going on you guys?]
None of the Charmeleon answered, they just watched as the ceiling above the door creaked loudly and smashed, covering their only exit.
"We are here to show you how evil humans are and how evil you are by committing murder. . . which is considered the ultimate evil in most cultures and races . . . you know, maybe we didn't think this through hard enough-."
"Silence!"
*Smack*!
"OWW! Stop hitting me, Blire!"
"But seriously," Keldeo said in annoyance, "I've seen Regular Show villains with evil plans that made more sense than this!"
The Urge: "That's when I realized I had to take matters into my own hands. . . so I came back in time to keep you from changing your name to Trash Boat . . . BY KILLING YOUUUUUU!"
Blaze jumped up and ran towards the pile of flaming wood, but stopped when he heard something behind him. He looked back and saw Ash was on his hands and knees, and was coughing. Blaze walked over to him and tilted his head. "Char?"
Ash looked at Blaze. The heat was getting to him and so was the smoke. "Get out of here Blaze" He coughed. "If you go now, you might be able to get out on time" He frowned as Blaze shook his head slowly. "Go on, I'll just slow you down" He couldn't say anymore as he began to cough uncontrollably.
Blaze froze on the spot. Ash was telling him to leave? To save himself? To leave him there to die? Blaze jumped as Ash fell over, unable to hold himself up anymore.
This human had never done anything bad to him, and he had only kept him there to protect him. How could he just leave? He couldn't, he would get him out somehow.
Suddenly, he felt a power inside him that he'd never felt before. It made him feel funny, but strong. Then all was blank. There was nothing, he couldn't hear anything, he couldn't see anything and he could feel nothing, nothing but the power deep inside him.
Then it was gone. He opened his eyes and noticed two blue leathery wings in front of him. In fact, they were connected to him. He looked down and noticed his claws were much bigger, and he was much taller. His skin was no longer a blood red colour, but a bright orange. He had evolved!
Keldeo stood calmly, looking on in interest. He blinked and said, "What? Did you think I was gonna do some kind of joke? Why would I do a joke here? What joke could possibly go here? And even if a joke could go here, I wouldn't. It would be annoying and weird and-"
Suddenly, Ma-Ti ran in and pumped his fist as his Power Ring glowed brightly.
"HEART!" he shouted.
Keldeo stared at him shock, then he said nervously, "Um, I'm trying to do a review here, so, if you could just-"
"Oh, no problem, I'm done here," Ma-Ti said as he walked off calmly.
Keldeo blinked, and then he said, "See! That was weird!"
The Charizard spread his giant wings and let out a loud roar. He grabbed Ash, who had passed out from the heat, and covered him with one wing cross in front of him. He reared back and let a powerful Fire Blast escape from his mouth, blasting the wall down and revealing an exit outside. He walked out on welcomed the cool early morning air. He looked up and noticed Misty, Brock and all the Pokémon by the lake, a safe distance from the flaming house.
He walked over to them and noticed they were nervous, probably because they didn't recognise him. He stopped in front of them and removed his wing so they could see Ash.
"Ash!" Misty yelled. She glared at Blaze. "What did you do to him?!"
"How are you not able to put two and two together and figure out that it's Blaze? Or that he saved Ash?" Keldeo moaned.
[Misty!] Pikachu yelled at Misty before walking over beside Blaze. [It's Blaze]
Misty was shocked for a moment. "Blaze?" She said as Brock knelt down beside Ash, who Blaze had lay down gently on the ground.
"Wait, how did you know his name? The only way you could possibly know his name is if you could understand Pokemon, which makes no sense!"
Blaze smiled at her and nodded. He looked back when he heard Ash coughing again. His smile widened when Ash opened his eyes and looked at him.
Ash's vision was a little blurry, but it soon cleared up. He froze for a second when he saw Blaze then smiled. "You've gotton a little bigger in the last few minutes" He coughed and sat up. "Wow, I can't believe you evolved"
Blaze gave Ash a playful nudge with his snout, not knowing whether to take that as a compliment or an offence. He pulled back when he heard something and turned to see the five Charmeleon running in the opposite direction. [Cowards] He snorted and turned back to Ash.
Chara: "I knew this was a bad idea- DON'T YOU DARE SMACK ME!"
Glire: "I really suck, don't I . . ."
Ash patted Blaze in the nose. "Thanks buddy, I guess this means you trust me huh?" He smiled as Blaze nodded. "So were are you heading too? I don't think you have a clan to go back too"
Blaze looked over at the rising sun. [To find Charina...]
"And so, with that mission on his lips, the newly evolved Blaze goes out into the world to embark on his final quest to find his long lost love, leaving on a powerfully quiet, emotionally fueled, and subtly ambiguous final note."
Keldeo nodded seriously, but then burst out into laughter. "Ah-ha-ha! Oh man, I'm sorry, but I just couldn't keep a straight face for that long! Of course that's not how ends!"
Keldeo stopped laughing and held up a hoof, "But, let's be fair here. This isn't Overdue Sunrise. This story actually works well with a nice happy ending."
One Year Later...
"Come on you guys!" Ash yelled as they ran down the path towards a cave just outside Goldenrod City. It had been years since he had seen his friend Blaze, and this was were he was staying. Since they were passing by Goldenrod, Ash decided to meet his old friend.
As Ash and the others reached the cave, they found to Charizard resting peacefully outside the cave. One opened his eyes and soon as Ash and the others got close. "Hey Blaze" Ash said.
Blaze smiled and shook the other Charizard lightly. [Charina, wake up, Ash is here]
The other female Charizard opened her eyes and looked at Blaze before turning to Ash. She bowed her head. [Please to meet you Ash, I've heard so much about you. There are a few others that would like to meet you] She said lifting her wing to reveal three young Charmander sleeping next to her. She gave them a little nudge and they woke up instantly. [Look who's here] She said looking at Ash.
The three Charmander jumped up and cried a happy "Char!" in unison. They ran forward and jumped, knocking Ash down. Two sat on either shoulder and one sat on his head as he sat on the ground.
Ash laughed and looked at Blaze. "Glad to see you and your family are doing ok Blaze" Misty and the others had just arrived. "Our group is doing ok too"
The group spent the whole day talking about what had been happening in the past year and the Charmander playing with all the other Pokémon.
All in all, it was just like meeting up with all your old friends, a happy occasion were they renewed their friendships.
The End
Keldeo smiled, "Awww. Isn't that sweet. But you know what would have made it sweeter?"
Keldeo reared up on his hind legs and stomped on the ground hard. "If we had gotten to see Blaze rescue Charina from Team Rocket! How could you possibly leave that out? I mean, how did he even find her? How did he do it! Was there a battle? How did she escape the Pokeball! Come on, you wasted a perfectly good plot!"
Ok, not a very good ending but what did you expect me to write? Heehee, well I liked this part, and I hope you did too. See? Blaze wasn't all bad :P. Anyway, not much else to say 'cept thanks for reading and please review. See ya!
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"And I hate writers who say that what they wrote wasn't very good in order to get sympathy or to keep people from complaining! Saying that does not magically make your mistakes disappear. This ending was incomplete and you need to be accountable for that!" Keldeo said.
Keldeo took a deep breath, and he said, "But, all things considered, this fanfic wasn't that bad."
"I mean, yes, there were some problems and weird plot holes. Like the humans being able to understand Pokemon, Misty being put in an unfavorable light, Brock disappearing from the plot, the Team Rocket grunt using a whip of all things, the other Charmeleons being evil for no reason, and the slightly obligatory happy ending."
"But on the other hand, Blaze was a pretty good character and it was nice to see his heart of stone soften up again thanks to Ash's good nature."
Keldeo gained a look of difficult thought, "But still, those weird little quirks bug me, and they almost seem familiar to me."
Keldeo shrugged, "Oh well. Doesn't really matter, I suppose. It's an interesting story that can make you smile and warm your heart. Good to read when you're in a bad mood and need a lift."
Keldeo smiled and said, "I'm Keldeo the Critic, and I review it so you don't-."
Keldeo suddenly froze, and his eyes widened in sudden realization.
"Oh my gosh. . . I just figured it out. . ."
"The horribly cruel backstory. . ."
"The negative portrayal of Misty. . ."
"The way the humans can understand Pokemon with no explanation. . ."
"MY GOSH! . . . I KNOW WHO HELPED WRITE THIS STORY!"
Toadetteggirl2012 sat in a chair in her room, talking on a cell phone with a smile on her face.
". . . and then have Misty come and kidnap Blaze and Charina's children! This is gonna be great for Wild Pokemon's Revenge 2!" she said with a gleeful smile.
The End
Credits
Cinema Sins
Nostalgia Critic- Sonic Boom by BOXINGMAN127
Regular Show
Captain Planet and the Planeteers
Portal 2
The Animaniacs
Nosltagia Critic: The Lorax, Foodfight
Special Thanks
Mandopony