Through the Rift

by Doctor Wheel

Sequel to The Rift. Fifteen years had past since the events of The Rift- BLU team is dead and RED had moved on. Life couldn't be more normal for these mercs, that is until a figure in a green cloak and a cyan blue girl show up and tell them some horrific news: their new friends had been captured by a new evil that has risen. Rated T for violence and language.

7. UPDATE! PLEASE READ!

Hello again. First off, I'm not dead. Secondly I want to talk about this story.

Now considering where it is right now...I'm highly considering a complete rewrite of what is going on so far.

Why?

Here's why:

1. Large cast. Because of the amount of characters in this story, I really want to be able to express each character to his/her/its full potential. Right now I am not getting that at all, and it seems that they are just standing there.

2. WTF is a plot? After going over the story mentally, I am unable to get a clear picture or sense of where to go, or what the hell is going on, especially after the third or fourth chapter. If I don't get it, chances are you won't either.

Overall, these two points is the reason why I want to rewrite this story. All OCs will still be used so don't worry OC submitters.

The new story will be titled: Down the Rabbit Hole
Summary: A sequel to The Rift- Fifteen year old Heather Conagher lives a pretty normal life, well, a pretty normal life for someone who the daughter of two mercenaries. However, life for her can only get stranger when a badly damaged Galleon appears in the middle of the desert base. Who are these people claiming to know her parents and uncles? And what is going on exactly?

-D.W