Yugo: Hey readers! It's comment response time!
Ohirume: We said before that the next one would be on Labor Day, but there are a lot more comments than last time. So, we're doing around half now.
Seishin: And we decided today, because-
August 15th, 12:30 noon
I don't see a cloud above
The sun is shining down
What a pretty day
Ohirume: So sick of this summer heat
I can't beat away the haze
The rays are giving way
And spending all my time having conversation sitting next to you
Seishin: 'Hey, but I- don't really like the summertime'
And as you petted that cat
You said such a daring thing
Right from under your breath
Ohirume: Ah- and as the cat had ran away
You tried to chase it in the end
Jumping right out in front of-
Ohirume and Seishin: a traffic light that poured a shade of red bright red
Gem: *whispering to Omega* what are they doing?
Omega: *whispering to Gem* Heat Haze Days. It's a song with a theme similar to 'Groundhog Day.'
Gem: But, why is there so much mention of blood?
Seishin: It's not a happy song.
Gem: Oh. One more thing, what's a groundhog?
Omega: *annoyed sigh*
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From CorruptHero (chapter 16):
This chapter was weird but enjoyable
Seishin: *chuckle* Yeah. I have a tendency to confuse and befuddle.
Omega: His middle name is 'headache.'
Seishin: Technically, it's pronounced 'hade-ah-kay.'
Gem: Is it really?
Seishin: *shrug* I dunno. Maybe.
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Ohirume: Sounds about right. Yukiro is essentially a nonsense outlet. If it's crazy, stupid, an overdone reference, a fourth wall break, or just doesn't make sense, he's already done it.
Seishin: *chuckle* Yeah. I'm essentially a poorly written, cringey Deadpool/Freak-a-zoid rip-off … at least, after Rob stole me. Oh! Tell them what we're planning to make me do in the league!
Ohirume: I can't spoil that!
Seishin: Come on, just one thing. *nudge* You know you want to.
Ohirume: *groan* Fine. In one of his battles, not against Ash, he'll sweep the opponent using a hitmonchan named Egy-Grusht (Hungarian for one and Albanian for punch). During the battle, instead of calling out orders, he'll be doing the Macarena to a loop of the on-vocal version of AI Bomb while wearing an inside out sombrero, a camouflage taekwondo gi, and crocs.
Seishin: *psychotic laughing* SEE?! Who else could come up with this nonsense?!
Omega: *groan* Son of a *****, that just gave me a headache.
Seishin: Again, I tend to have that effect on people. Or in this case, other figments of my own author's imagination. Oh, wait! I just thought of something!
Omega: How?
Seishin: iNSaNiTY. Now listen! How about for my entrance, I crash land on my side of the field in a hatchback, escape by kicking the trunk door off its hinges and into the distance, ding, and pop out with the line: *heavy breathing* Everyone! *huff* Word to the wise! *huff* Hatchbacks and trebuchets! *huff followed by smirk* Go very well together!
Omega: *eye twitch* If you'll excuse me, I'm going to go find a freezer and stick my head in it.
Seishin: Works every time.
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From buterflypuss (chapter 17):
good chap
Ohirume: Thank you.
Omega: It's 'chapter' not 'chap.'
Seishin: No one likes a grammar nut, meggy.
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From KingBE123 (chapter 16):
good chapter, love the starbomb reference with lamborguinepig XD
Seishin: YES! And just wait until you see the Poké/Fakemon I'll use in the league!
Ohirume: This one I'm okay with spoiling … somewhat. A good portion of Yukiro's league team will consist of New Pokérap 'Pokémon'. We just haven't completely decided which ones, yet. And, yes, he will be using Fiddlyfaddlybiddlybaddlydiddlydoodlyhiddlyhoodly. I refuse to pass up a chance like that.
Seishin: *trembling* SO EXCITED!
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From buterflypuss (chapter 18):
good chap
Ohirume: Thank you.
Omega: It's 'chapter' not 'chap.'
Seishin: No one likes a grammar nut, greenie.
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From Nigga-san (chapter 1):
It would've been better if you had Ash get the watch during the start of his Journey. Also the OC has much to be desired.
Seishin: Oooo! Our first hate comment! How should we respond?
Ohirume: Yukiro, I don't think it's-
Omega: Complain about the username?
Seishin: No way! That's a line we don't cross!
Ohirume: Guys, they're not-
Faux: Correct their punctuation?
Seishin: That'd be pretty hypocritical. Especially with how little there is wrong with their review.
Gem: Oh, I know-
Ohirume: GUYS! STOP! IT'S NOT A HATE COMMENT!
Seishin: Rob, they insulted Soot and are complaining about the storyline.
Ohirume: NO! THEY! AREN'T! They are giving constructive criticism about a character and voicing their opinion about the storyline.
N-san, you are completely right. Soot is rather cliché and has much to be desired.
As for Ash's Omnitrix: getting it day 1 would mean that an Ash Ketchum with a canon personality would have the world's most advanced piece of tech. The whole concept of 'getting it as a child and maturing with it' is just- Something I wanted to try.
Thank you for the constructive criticism.
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From buterflypuss (chapter 19):
good chap
Ohirume: Thank you.
Omega: It's 'chapter' not 'chap.'
Seishin: No one likes a … grammar nut … Omega. Woah, déjà vu.
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Ohirume: Are these lies?
The heat is mocking me
'What you see is exactly what you're gonna get'
And with the blue sky
I hear a singing cricket's cry
And fall right back
Into another dark sleep
Seishin: Sitting up in my bed
I could hear ticking clocks
The shock will mock my ever-ringing head
I look to see the time
Ohirume: August 14th 12:something noon
I don't see a cloud above
The sun is shining down
And yet, I hear a cry of a cricket singing loudly in my head
Seishin: 'Hey but I- I really have to wonder why
'Cause, in the dream had last night
We sat in the same old park
We are sitting in now'
Ohirume: 'Hey- I think the two of us should leave'
But stepping slightly off the path
Their heads turned towards the sky
And were-
Ohirume and Seishin: Gaping, pointing, struggling to keep away a scream
Gem: Hey, I just realized something. How were Rob and Yukiro responding to the comments while they were singing?
Omega: *sigh* Gem, it's because … Actually, you have a point.
Yugo: Well, Ohirume did write the responses before coming up with this idea. Up next, scrapped scenes … but there's only one and it's- Meh.
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St. Anne – excuse to stay:
Why: too unbelievable / Soot could have phased the person out
Where: After everyone else evacuates the ship
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Ash smiled and ran over to Soot, "Nice work, you two." He closed the zipper on Soot's back, "Let's get out of-"
"HELP!"
Ash stopped and turned to see someone trapped in one of the chandeliers. It was trapping them like a cage.
Ash grimaced, "Crag!" he ran over to them and crouched down to face them, "Don't worry, I'll get you out!"
They were trembling.
Ash looked back, "Guys, help me with this!"
Brock, Misty, and Soot ran over.
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Ohirume: Endlessly, I see that overheated haze
And again, the laughing will repeat all through the days
Seishin: You've been dying for the past ten years
We are trapped in cycles and the end is never clear
Ohirume: But a story is a story all the same
And today like any has an ending so to say
Ohirume and Seishin: Far away
And out beyond that scorching summer day
Yugo: And this is my queue to cut in since we removed this part twice already.
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Seishin: August 14th sitting alone
On a bed a girl awakes
Repeating just the same
Muttering again
Ohirume: 'Guess I failed again'
As she all alone and held a cat
Still cradled in her arms
Yugo: And yet I hear the cry of a cricket singing loudly in my head
Seishin: *wide smile* Nice, Yugo. Finishing it Jubyphonic piano outtake style.
Yugo: It just seemed right.
Ohirume: Well I hope you guys enjoyed … reading a song. *sigh* I didn't think this through.
Seishin: On the upside, now more people will know about the song. To recap: Heat Haze Days (Jubyphonic English lyrics). And the same lyrics are used by Zoozbuh and philsterman10. All on YouTube.
Ohirume: Also, SirHamnet did an English version of "Kagerou Ib;" a Heat Haze Days parody.
Omega: *Eye rolls* Yeah, if people actually bother to read this 'chapter' this far in. Or at all.
Ohirume: They could just skip to the end and the underlined portions would catch their attention.
Omega: True. And that's much more believable.
Yugo: See ya guys on Labor Day. The real chapter will be up on the 18th.